Date: June 26 2015 6:26 PM Title: Just a Simple Trip to the Library
Please do not stop writing this story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response:
Hey! I don't plan on it, I actually just recently gor through some work related and location issues, but I plan to start writing again soon!
Date: June 24 2015 5:30 AM Title: Just a Simple Trip to the Library
I like chapter 6
Date: June 24 2015 5:29 AM Title: Just a Simple Trip to the Library
I like chapter 5
Date: June 24 2015 5:28 AM Title: An Unexpected Trip
I like chapter 4
[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 10:09 AM Title: The Novice Witch
I say again that it's nicely refreshing how Michelle is a gentle giantess-witch. Too many similar stories have started out with that promising premise (sorry; alliteration unintended). Only to peter out when they get into some kind of internecine (ALWAYS wanted to use that word!) political intrigue. And, thus, they remain permanently unfinished.*
*Sorry, too, for the mistaken ID.
[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 10:06 AM Title: My Hiding Places Suck.....Clothing Store Edition
Yep! Isaac definitely had a real "clothes" call in this chapter.
Author's Response:
2 Punny 4 me
[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 9:53 AM Title: Just a Simple Trip to the Library
Really loved the length of the last few chapters but I was hoping that there would have been more butt action in the underwear department. #iwantmorebooty lol
Author's Response:
Have you read Chapter 6? If not, that is probably exactly what you're looking for haha
[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 9:53 AM Title: Sadness and Shopping
Newsflash, Isaac: even tomboys can go on a frilly binge!
Author's Response:
Love your comments haha
[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 9:48 AM Title: Sleepover at Sarah's
Someone should remind Isaac that even Lake Superior is shallow at the edges.*
*I was originally thinking about saying that he shouldn't sweat the small stuff. But, I changed my mind as that would, admittedly, be stooping _too_ low.
[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 9:35 AM Title: The Novice Witch
I say again that it's nicely refreshing how Sarah is a gentle giantess-witch. Too many similar stories have started out with that promising premise (sorry; alliteration unintended). Only to peter out when they get into some kind of internecine (ALWAYS wanted to use that word!) political intrigue. And, thus, they remain permanently unfinished.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I wanted to write a normal couple. I see a lot of stories that start out gentle, only for a giantess to take her power a bit too far, and then turn into another dominatrix story. And I think you mean Michelle haha, Sarah is Michelle's cross country friend.
[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 9:28 AM Title: The Book Store
Oh, frig! I have a bad feeling what Sarah is going to mistake for her birthday present.
[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 9:26 AM Title: Sarah
Methinks Sarah might be a switch hitter...and I don't mean on a girls' softball team.
[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 9:22 AM Title: An Unexpected Trip
"She's in the money.
Add a shrunken honey.
And, she's got enough
Of what it takes to
Get along."
With apologies to Messrs. Warren and Dubin.
[Report This]Date: June 11 2015 10:37 PM Title: My Hiding Places Suck.....Clothing Store Edition
You're right it was a really good chapter. Probably the best out of the whole story.
[Report This]Date: June 11 2015 10:32 PM Title: Sadness and Shopping
a34;a34;a34;a34;Bravo!! I have no complaints or feedback to give. It was a perfect chapter. a34;a34;a34;a34;
Author's Response:
Thanks! I've been putting a bit more time into the chapters' the only downside of that is that I'll probably only have time for around two chapters in a day.
[Report This]Date: June 10 2015 10:54 PM Title: Sleepover at Sarah's
So I realize that some of your first chapters are space out pretty good. But they do need a bit more though.
Some of my favorite authors on this site are Jacksmith, JT07, Akbar, etc. Trying checking out they're writing.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'll check them out
[Report This]Date: June 10 2015 10:48 PM Title: The Novice Witch
That was pretty cool spells. Maybe a durability spell can add flavor to future chapters.
[Report This]Date: June 10 2015 10:45 PM Title: The Book Store
I rather have longer chapters. Then a whole bunch of short chapters. Just something to think about.
Author's Response:
Alright, I really don't want to merge 11 and 12, but I merged 13 and 14, which were probably already the longest chapters, so I'll put more time into writing longer chapters filled with more content. As always, thanks!
[Report This]Date: June 10 2015 10:42 PM Title: Sarah
Alright, you need to continue to space out you paragraph. Once that happens it will be mostly perfect.
Maybe try looking at other stories that have the spacing, or books. If you don't want to do that then just turn on double spacing.
Author's Response:
Yeah I'll just turn on double space haha, I write on my phone, so I just got into the bad habit of not adding good spacing. Thanks for the feedback!
[Report This]Date: June 10 2015 2:18 PM Title: The Novice Witch
Story is going good so far, maybe could use a bit more description of where Isaac is in relation to Michelle at any given time. The conversation in this last chapter played out as if they were both the same size and nothing was out of the ordinary. I understand you were trying to give some exposition on Michelle's power's while moving the story along, but don't forget its a Shrunken man story :)
Author's Response:
Gotcha, I appreciate the feedback. In the later chapters I have written I was a bit more descriptive and I wrote the orientation of the characters better. Hoepfully those improve your opinion on the story! Also, specifically in regards to chapter nine, I wanted it to seem like he wasn't shrunken to show that they are close enough to ignore the elephant in the room.