[Report This]Date: September 23 2017 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 17:The Shy Boy and the Milk Bottle Bum
This chapter alone felt like a movie. It was touching and I cheered for both of them throughout the end.
Loved how Janet was learning about how her body was different. Also, her describing the pencil test was good too. Gives a good picture of how big an ass truly is.
Caleb felt a little bit too innocent about girls. I would expect him to at least know the basics. He seems clueless like a child which felt off, but I liked how he just enjoyed the experience at the end. I consider myself a shy person at times so it's nice to see Caleb get the attention he deserves.
One thing that I really liked was the suspense at the end where Janet is searching for Caleb after hearing about the shrinking of men. Her trying to contact him and the urgency to find him before other women was making my hair stand up. Intense and I like it.
This is probably the most complete chapter that could stand alone as a story.
I can't wait for the next one!
Author's Response:
Thanks again for your interest!
I wanted the pencil test scene to give a sense of Janet's ass being curvy, large and awesome and I think it succeeded.
Caleb has a fairly high IQ. His biggest problem is social. He has problems with the usual rules of social interaction which means he has problems with dating. Or no problems since he couldn't get a date prior to ther Rebalancing. He knows a few things about sex but it's all from reading. He blurts out his knowledge in unlikely settings such as his chats with the nurse. He's inappropriate without being fully aware of it, or else he's so full of hormones that he can't stop himself. He's the kind of guy that made the girls say "Ewwwwwww..."
I think he intuited the idea of becoming small to make himself a better lover, perhaps from his own failures at dating making him feel small toward women. Or perhaps the GOL planted it in his head to prepare him for the transition. The irony is, before being shrunk, he was anything but small in that department, according to Janet.
Janet understood Caleb's awkward nature enough to know that he'd be in a bad way in any sort of "man-harem." She associated him with her sexual reawakening and the changes in her body, as he was the first to notice them, and that knowledge drove her to direct her expanding passion toward him.
I also wanted to return to how hard it is for these women to deal with their newfound desires. Imaging getting off five or ten times a day for an extended time! Janet tries to do right through her lust. The ROS turns everything upside down so a lot of times, men and women just have to ride their passions and hope it turns out all right at the end.
Had I told this from Caleb's perspective I might have added more from him about how it felt to be drawn to the large, curvy ass of a 50ish nurse.
Thanks again, Tom!