Reviewer: Saftkeur Signed [Report This]
Date: October 06 2015 1:32 PM Title: Chapter 2

Absolutely loved this one! So perfect, in so many ways; the utter gentleness and care and trust between them, yet still pushing to the edge of what is safe. I think that is what I liked the most about it; toying with someone so small and fragile in one's mouth is such a dangerous prospect, but the care and trust between them both makes it feel so incredibly safe and even calm.

Also, despite the challenge first-person perspective usually gives, it works well here; a little awkward to read at the very start, but by the time I was halfway down the page I was into it, and not even thinking about the perspective at all. It didn't even occur to me again that it was in first-person until I'd finished and started to write this, actually!

And a good ending too, as "happily ever after" as you can get without actually using that annoying cliche to tie it up. I'll be eagerly looking forward to more if and when it comes, but the lack of cliffhangers will make it a much easier wait. ^^

 

Author's Response:

Real glad you liked it. The implied danger and gentleness was what interested me in writing it. I'm guessing you mean 2nd person? I don't write in it often, but it can have its advantages.

Reviewer: Flaming_Heart Signed [Report This]
Date: November 03 2014 10:38 PM Title: Chapter 2

Awesome chapter, I love the playful interaction between the two. It's a nice change from all of the cruel stuff.

Author's Response:

Thanks very much.