[Report This]Date: September 21 2014 11:37 AM Title: Run Alvin, Run!
This chapter did a great job of showing what Alvin must endure on a day to day basis. I'll admit, if I was Cassie I'd be more concerned that a little man was tied up and gagged rather than nail him as a pervert. But I also understand she was too angry to think straight so it's not really a problem for me. Plus Alvin shouldn't of peeked. I know the temptation was great but I doubt it could be worth your life.
As for Cassie, I'm hoping I'll like her. I don't know if Wendy has any redeeming qualities but Cassie seems pretty cool, just in a temporary bad mood.
And finally I read your comment with chlorez. I also always put myself in the main character's shoes. Despite what I wrote about in my last story I am extremely against suicide. Still, if I was Alvin, my first idea of getting good with Cassie would have been to break down crying and then tell her she'd be doing my a favor if she crushed me. Overly dramatic? Definitely. But would it have made her pause and think twice? Possibly.
Anyway I'm loving this story so much and it's only been three chapters. Great work.
Author's Response:
I don't think he was at fault for looking but I don't agree with him not averting his gaze. You'll have to wait and see what I have planned for Wendy's relationship with Alvin. Glad you like Cassie, I put a lot of thought into her.
I actually assumed you battled suicidal thoughts in your last story and bullying for your first, the latter because it was so engaging that you drew from real life. That could work, Cassie doesn't seem to be a sadistic girl but that might saying too much already....or is it?
Thanks for the compliments, hope you enjoy the next chapter.
[Report This]Date: September 21 2014 8:45 AM Title: Run Alvin, Run!
I kind of feel for Cassie. I mean geez Katherine where the hell did that come from? I might have to reavaluate what I think of her character? Anyway pretty good chapter I really hate that Alvin is on the hook for Cassie's misdirected anger but hey whatcha gonna do?
Also Alvin is pretty dumb to pick on a girl's body image issues when she's twice his size and strength..just sayin.
Author's Response:
I would like to say more about Katharine but her story has yet to be told. Plus vgiv has plans for her....bwahahahaha!!!!
Alvin just happens to be in the wrong place at the wrong time, Cassie hasn't had it too good either.
Yeah but how many of us think straight when we're angry? Alvin ain't too different from the rest of us.
[Report This]Date: September 21 2014 7:20 AM Title: Run Alvin, Run!
This was a great chapter... Can't wait to find out what's in store for Alcib!
Would also be kinda neat to see how classes and stuff hoe for him at school... That is, if he ever makes it back there alive! :)
Author's Response:
Thanks, hope he does survive, I do want to show how school is like for people in this world.
[Report This]Date: September 21 2014 6:42 AM Title: Run Alvin, Run!
Ok, great story so far! But now I just want to read the next chapter. Poor Alvin can't catch no breaks.
Author's Response:
There is a break...but he might not want it.
[Report This]Date: September 21 2014 5:18 AM Title: Run Alvin, Run!
Hmm, yes, I have to agree with gadget. Of course, I'm more of a gentle giantess fan myself, so I'm biased. :) Poor Alvin can't catch a break.
Author's Response:
I won't disagree with you on Cassie's thoughts, she definitely wasn't thinking straight. A good girl having a bad day has enough and a good boy having a streak of bad luck that makes Bad Luck Brian look good, Wendy must be thrilled with herself.
Date: September 21 2014 4:23 AM Title: Run Alvin, Run!
Okay, so Cassie sees Alvin tied up, and the first thing that runs in her head is, "this little pervert is into bondage!"...
Kind of unrealistic if you ask me. I think if he would have somehow escaped from his bonds and THEN they caught him, it would make sense to pin him as some kind of voyeur.
Anyway, I guess that bit of weird logic allowed for setup of further plot down the road, so its not too bad. The rest of the chapter was awesome though, as expected for you!
Author's Response:
She's had a bad day, wasn't thinking straight, irrational thoughts tend to either create storylines or expand on them, it'll be fine. Alvin should be fine too. I hope.