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Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 22 2014 8:15 PM Title: 'The Rescue'

I think the nervousness of the moment lead to the alcohol which lead to her inhibitions being slightly lowered and her primal urges coming to the forefront. Basically this wasn't her fault as bad as it makes her look.

Reviewer: zumi Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 20 2014 9:05 PM Title: 'Meet Christy'

Great chapter as always! Always look forward to reading this story, and these last few chapters have been absolute gold especially. Definitely looking forward to more. :)

 



Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying it! :)

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 20 2014 4:20 PM Title: 'Drunk Christy'

Great chapter, Her trying to be good in the face of all this while letting her naughty side come through little by little was a fun read.



Author's Response: Thanks :) Now what's going to happen now that her naughty side has come through...? ;)

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: September 17 2014 8:00 AM Title: 'Meet Christy'

I think maybe you have too many plot points going on at once. Im not sure introducing a world-wide shrinking epidemic into a story about a giant girl was necessary. And then Dans parents get squished? Plus Dan doesnt seem too sad about it if he ddecidd to go on that date after all...I still like this story, mind you, but I do have those^ criticisms.



Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! Just to clarify, Dan is sad about his parents but not as sad as he should be, primarily because he had a bad life with them. Also the whole shrinking epidemic is going on in the background and I added that in because it's kind of the same universe as my previous story. I like to make sure my stories are somewhat realistic in a sense so it really does help when people point these things out :) I hope I cleared that up for you ^^

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: September 17 2014 5:52 AM Title: 'Meet Christy'

That's not smart, bringing your sister for a date but Dan can't be faulted when Jess was suddenly thrust upon him. 

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 16 2014 8:13 PM Title: 'The Date'

A nice monkey wrench thrown into the poor couples plans.

Reviewer: 101st airborne Signed [Report This]
Date: August 28 2014 3:28 AM Title: 'Accident'

Really good story very well written good job



Author's Response: Thanks :)

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: August 27 2014 11:55 PM Title: 'Accident'

Damn what made them change their mind over Jess? That was just downright evil!

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 27 2014 11:16 PM Title: 'Accident'

So we have some -big- bads for our percieved bigger bad to teach a lesson to, great stuff good sir.



Author's Response: Haha, thanks :)

Reviewer: 101st airborne Signed [Report This]
Date: August 25 2014 2:24 AM Title: 'Meet Christy'

Really good story if you ever need a Soldier character im your man 

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 25 2014 1:10 AM Title: 'Coincidence'

A bit of romantic interests humanizes our big heroine/potential war machine even more.

 

Great chapter.



Author's Response: Thanks :)

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2014 6:50 PM Title: 'Problems'

WOW. Will totally didn't deserve to get killed like that for having an outburst during a stressful time in his life! Even if he meant every word of what he said, damn...Not to mention she basically raped that guy Dan. Christy's got issues.

This is a good story BTW, I read it all in one go just now. I'm glad I caught this early on, because it would have been a pain to catch up if it was further in. I wonder what will happen now?



Author's Response: Thank you for the review :) I'm glad you decided to read it before it got too long to justify starting, the same thing happened with my previous story 'Kai and Tris'. It got too long and nobody would want to start a story with over 20 chapters I guess. :P

Reviewer: Jimbob Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2014 4:37 PM Title: 'Coincidence'

Wow... just waltzing right into other people's homes. What the hell is wrong with the people of the worlds you write?



Author's Response: Haha, it'll make sense in the next chapter :P

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2014 3:52 PM Title: 'Dan'

An interesting look at things through the eyes of the only witness/

Reviewer: MostKnownUnknowns Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2014 4:34 AM Title: 'Meet Christy'

Loving the character development. Liking this new kid. Please keep it up. Can't wait for the next few chapters



Author's Response: Thanks :) I'll make sure to add the next chapters as soon as possible :)

Reviewer: Jimbob Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 23 2014 7:56 PM Title: 'Dan'

Wow, he just managed to say all the wrong things, and at precisely the wrong times, in just the wrong way. Granted Christy wasn't exactly in a receptive mood at the time, but that definitely could have gone much better for him.

Reviewer: Jimbob Signed [Report This]
Date: August 22 2014 8:45 PM Title: 'Problems'

What happened? It's been a week since you've put up a new chapter. Everything going alright?



Author's Response: Yes, I just won't be able to add chapters as often as I hoped, but I will be adding chapters none the less. :)

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 15 2014 7:04 PM Title: 'Problems'

That just happened, great plot twist



Author's Response: Thanks :)

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: August 15 2014 7:02 PM Title: 'Problems'

Wow she killed Will just like that but I see her pain and am curious to see how she'll get around this.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 11:08 PM Title: 'Unexpected'

This turned into kind of a complete 360, also did she grow 20ft from the first chapter...

 

Very curious theory here if I'm on the right path.



Author's Response: I changed her height for the whole story because the height difference between people wasn't realistic enough :)

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