[Report This]Date: August 27 2014 11:55 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Stranger
Definitely a prologue worthy of one of Eastwood's "spaghetti Westerns."
I'm now off to chapter 2. :-)
Author's Response: Thanks I'm a huge fan of Clint Eastwood.
Date: July 25 2014 8:47 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Stranger
Well you don't need to go that far but maybe for future chapters bear that in mind.
Author's Response:
Chapter is already updated, and changes have been made. Its good you made me rethink the chapter, I wanted to reveal some of the strangers past.
Date: July 25 2014 12:31 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Stranger
I like the stranger coming, keeps the audience guessing what will happen next. However the sex scene was too soon for me. Might want to develop things more before characters start bedding each other.
Author's Response:
Ok, I shall delete chapter 3 and shall make minor changes. Thanks for the critique!
[Report This]Date: July 23 2014 5:29 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Stranger
Okay, kind of mysterious and badass. You a fan of Carycomic's work?
Author's Response:
I have not read Cartycomics works, but I am a fan of spagetti westerns and clint eastwood. Also expect the facade of mysterious and badassery to slowly dissapear, people arent robotic killing machines. By the way thanks for the review.