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Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: June 11 2014 6:28 AM Title: Chapter 19 Part 1

People can guess what happens. I assume reader have an imagination. Also, stupid Americans with the imperialistic ways.

Also here:

You’re parents

You mean: your

Reviewer: chrlorez Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 10 2014 4:05 AM Title: Chapter 19 Part 1

What!? Ryan is Jaden's brother!? 

Actually, I'm calling straight bullshit on that. This is either a disappointing twist or a blatant lie. Either way, I'm a nurture-over-nature guy, so blood relation is no excuse for Jaden to lay the smackdown on that son-of-a-bitch.

So when is Commander Richards and Jaden teaming up to kick ass? By which, I mean, when's the next chapter?

P.S. Did I mention enough Commander Richards is my favorite character? If you make this into a series, he should be the protagonist of a spin-off.

Reviewer: tinyguy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 09 2014 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 19 Part 1

Such a major plot twist!... That's all I have to say

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 09 2014 3:07 PM Title: Chapter 19 Part 1

Wow, Ryan and Jaden are brothers! Oh man that must suck. I just want to see the next update , this is so good! I got a feeling he will die, just feels that way. Jaden will die and Ryan will win, this story  has had that tone for a while now.



Author's Response:

Really now? Lol I like to keep my readers guessing lol.

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