[Report This]Date: April 28 2014 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 5
This chapter was slow, but entertaining, good job once again!
In the next chapter can you add some butt action? At least if that's the way the stories going.
Author's Response:
Just wait and see what happens next chapter :)
Date: April 28 2014 5:32 PM Title: Chapter 5
Great chapter. Glad to have se of my questions answered. Can't wait to find out what happens to Jaden
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like it. May the next chapter have mercy on his soul.
[Report This]Date: April 28 2014 3:23 PM Title: Chapter 5
He needs to live for five minutes but those will be five hellish minutes. Pity him, he hasn't done anything to deserve it.
Author's Response:
We all feel his pain :(
Date: April 28 2014 2:44 PM Title: Chapter 5
I don't like cliffhangers. They're annoying. A nice chapter though.
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making sure she doesn’t hurt him.
You mean: didn't
You're writing the story in the past tence.
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Who knows, if you’re up for it I can chew on you all the way Alex place.
You mean: Alex's place.
Author's Response:
Oops, we'll I'm trying lol.