Reviewer: tinyguy Signed [Report This]
Date: May 03 2014 11:00 AM Title: We Need a Plan, And Insurance.

Great chapter... Wonder if she'll stay

Reviewer: VividImagination Signed [Report This]
Date: May 03 2014 8:53 AM Title: We Need a Plan, And Insurance.

Now all we need is for the real Godzilla to show up and have Amy beat the tar out of him. That'd show her worth to the community. :D

It sounds like she's in control of herself in the dream, and not simply observing. So it's interesting that she'd take such pleasure in crushing people, but once she awakenes, she's immediately faced with regret. Perhaps she's conflicted. Part of her craves dominance, while she also desires to be treated like a normal human being.

In any case... I'm interested to see what type of plan the guys will come up with to help her.

 

Reviewer: chrlorez Signed [Report This]
Date: May 03 2014 5:24 AM Title: We Need a Plan, And Insurance.

Will the town forgive Amy? Will Ben's family ever make another appearance? Will Mark and Johnny have any features that distinguishes them from each other? Will Amy ever have a chance to use her character development? Where the fuck are Amy's parents, anyway?

Tune in next time. Same bat time, same bat channel.

I like this chapter a lot. Things are happening at a great pace. My only concern is that there won't been enough time between now and the town meeting to allow Amy to prove how she's changed as a person realistically. Especially since she's under house arrest. Even with the best efforts of Ben, Mark, and Johnny.

P.S. You mixed up "ones" and "one's". 4.9 out of 5 stars. I am determined to never give you five complete stars. >:D

Author's Response:

Challenge accepted. Though you might want to check the rating you gave me in your comment. I do believe they are 5 stars.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: May 02 2014 11:58 PM Title: We Need a Plan, And Insurance.

Oh dear, Amy will lose if it's a vote. The call to move her to a military base where they'll cage her like a beast will drown out the boy's attempts to show them her true side. These rumours are painting a very untrue side of what really happened.Not that Amy doesn't deserve it, she did torment and this is karma for it. However, the  chance to redeem herself will be gone if the town votes her out.

So this is keeping Ben, Mark and Johnny up? I think they will have something. Maybe visit Amy, learn more about her past.  She has much to reveal. It will help in their fight to save her life.

The dream sequence was amazing, I thought Amy would wake up and decide she would take them all down because they got out of line. Crying herself to sleep after she woke up because she saw herself as the monster she never wanted to be. The monster everyone thought she was and since the pressure was so overwhelming and maybe even her parents are afraid of her, she just decided to be what everyone thought she was. No wait I said that before and it seems I am right, she is doing all this to fit in. I really want to see more and thanks for replying to my idea, gonna make changes to it but it should improve the story.