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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 29 2014 2:21 PM Title: For Hours of Fun Collect Them All

I hope the next chapter isn't going to be one of those "Death by Poonga-poonga" deals.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2014 9:14 PM Title: For Hours of Fun Collect Them All

Best bully ever!

Reviewer: VividImagination Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 28 2014 8:52 PM Title: For Hours of Fun Collect Them All

Parkour eh? I think some MMA training could've had more of an effect against bullies, but I geuss no matter the skills, Amy still has the biggest advantage.

Amy's turning out to be quite the goddess. Can't wait to see what else she has planned.



Author's Response:

I thought it would make for a more interesting chase rather than run away whenever she puts her foot down.

Reviewer: sketch Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2014 8:29 PM Title: For Hours of Fun Collect Them All

I like how we get these little glimpses that they might start liking each other.  But Ben can't give into her yet.  He needs to continue challenging and surprising her.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: April 28 2014 7:38 PM Title: For Hours of Fun Collect Them All

Hmm, I don't hate Amy for some reason. She could do a lot worse than this. anow it remains to be seen how the boys counter. Might be up to Ben since Mark between her cheeks and Johnny immobilised by her breasts.

  I would love to see how Ben finds a way to fight back, she is not as invincible as I thought and I can tell how she was amazed at how much harder it was to catch them than she believed so it is not all hatred and they got some insight as to why she feels so powerful when they were in her palm.

Reviewer: chrlorez Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2014 7:11 PM Title: For Hours of Fun Collect Them All

This story is still awesome. I really like the friendship between Ben, Mark and Johnny. But I didn't expect them to know parkour. The good thing is that you explained how they knew it in a semi-realistic way, and I enjoy realism in my giant woman fetish material.

In my last review, I gave you points off for improper spelling, while messing up a word myself (spelled condition as 'conditiin' by accident). Since that was hypocritical of me, I was going to omit the misspelling of "below" with "bellow" and give you full marks. Unfortunately, you messed up usage of the words "peek" and "peak", and for that you lose your full mark status. You only get 4.9 stars out of five for this chapter.

Also, spelling is less like kryptonite, and more like a vitamin. You're just spelling deficient.



Author's Response:

Thank you. I wanted them to know parkour because it seemed like a really cool element in a chase scene. Guys running around in circles is both boring for the read as well as for Amy. So I wanted to liven things up. But, like you, I enjoy realism. So I also had to figure out a way to incorporate without it being like a deus ex machina kind of thing. Once again Assassin's Creed has yet to let me down.

 

Btw I think I might be allergic to that vitamin.

Reviewer: tinyguy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2014 6:57 PM Title: For Hours of Fun Collect Them All

This is a great chapter once again.. Have a feeling if feeling that once the torture is over, Ben will have some alone time with Amy... His friends may still have to deal with her though, so I wonder how ben's gonna take that

Reviewer: JTC Signed [Report This]
Date: April 28 2014 6:14 PM Title: For Hours of Fun Collect Them All

Loved the new chapter man. Awesome in every way

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