Reviewer: chrlorez Signed [Report This]
Date: April 28 2014 6:23 AM Title: Window Shopping

For curiosity's sake, can Mark be black? I feel like a group of three friends, one of them has to be a minority, and I've never met a black Johnny before.

I really dig this story. And the explanation as to why Amy's parents has the government by the balls is perfectly logical. In today's world, exclusion of a particular person solely on their condition is not approved of, so the government over-compensates to stay politically correct. Only in this case, Amy's conditiin is being 120 feet tall or something. One good attorney and Amy getting arrested can end up causing an incident. 

P.S. You spelled "rumors" as "rummors". 4.99 stars out of 5. Clean up your act.

Author's Response:

Sure he can. I actually prefer diversity between groups of people in stories like this.

 

Clean up me act? Come on man, I wasn't kidding when I said spelling was my kryptonite. If the essence of spelling could be transmuted into a physical substance, it would kill me faster than exposure to Plutonium.

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: April 27 2014 10:16 PM Title: Window Shopping

Cool story, I like the scenarios a lot and the conflict between the characters. Interesting hints about Amy's backstory too and the various government projects involved with accompdating her. Will we learn the cause of her, um, gigantification or is that ultimately unimportant to the story?

Loved the mouthplay chpater. I know you're more of a foot guy but that was well done so if you ever feel like including more of that, I'd be in favor.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: April 27 2014 4:59 PM Title: Window Shopping

Short but we learned alot Amy's parents. I guess the kidnapping starts now, we'll see if my theories are right.

Reviewer: VividImagination Signed [Report This]
Date: April 27 2014 4:38 PM Title: Window Shopping

Ahh, I see. I assumed they expected him to just change and continue on with his day, but this makes much more sense.

Finally...kidnapped. A lot more witnesses than I suspected though. I wonder how long she'll be able to hold on to them before the police get involved.

Also, I'm sorry to say that I noticed a fair amount of spelling errors, which don't annoy me in the slightest, as I could still read it fine. I just figured that if you wanted to avoid chrlorez's wrath, then you might want to check over the chapter again.

But yeah, this rocked. I assumed she would only have Ben to play this. This makes for much more fun.