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Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 19 2014 2:26 PM Title: Chapter 33: Rammun

Things have gotten pretty dire. I'm not sure how anyone is supposed to fight this guy! I mean not only does he possess Jessica, but he can easily take possession of other people with his dark magic! I guess having the odds so stacked in the bad guys favor makes things interesting, because I'm certainly interested!



Author's Response:

I hope it lives up to expectations.

Reviewer: lilguyunderfoot Signed [Report This]
Date: June 19 2014 6:51 AM Title: Chapter 10: Where it all began

i don't usually read gentle type stuff but i like this. good job with it



Author's Response:

Thank you very much and thank you you for reading

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 19 2014 6:35 AM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings

Jessica is still in there, don't give up! Rammun must not win. So it looks like Dawn is right, Tucker will be a hero but not in the way she said. 



Author's Response:

Maybe he will, we'll just have to wait and see

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 14 2014 3:04 PM Title: Chapter 32: An Uneasy Lunch

So it starts now but I am confident they'll find a way to stop thr entity from using Jessica as a weapon of mass destruction.



Author's Response:

You'll have to wait and see my friend (Still thinking exactly what is going to happen).

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14 2014 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings

Great chapter! Things are starting to get exciting again!



Author's Response:

I thought people would find this one boring but hearing this has filled me will joy. I'll feel even better if England beat Italy.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 11 2014 8:01 AM Title: Chapter 31: Jessica vs Dawn

So this is where we will see the evil mind controlled Jessica eh? I guess they don't quite remember the events of the last arc but they haven't quite forgotten either, those memories still somewhere inside foggy as ever.



Author's Response:

Yep they're still there but buried deep inside of them. Just so that the last arc wasn't a waste of time and that Dawn's work might have avoided her darker future.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 06 2014 4:33 PM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings

I wonder Jessica is facing? Godzilla? Dawn? Tucker? A bigger Jessica? Not to mention that Agent Daniel is still pure evil and we still don't know what he is up to.

Reviewer: riczar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 06 2014 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 30: Reunited for now

You reminded me that they're planning to erase Tucker's memories at the end of the 30 days.  If what Dawn said was right, it'll do him more harm then good.  That and the condition of his life BEFORE Jessica.  You'd think a company as advanced and thorough as Park would interview and do a psych profile on him.  They'd realize that he's better off on Home with Jessica.  Let's hope those subconcious memories and budding romance will get them to advocate him staying.

Looking forward to the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading, it might come up at some point. I'm still planning exactly what happens at the end of the series. Also thought I'd yank the readers by ending the chapter on a mini cliff hangar

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 01 2014 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings

Oh dear,  they've found some ancient evil on a deserted planet, it might have once been very different until the cube arrived. 



Author's Response:

We'll just have to wait and see

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 01 2014 1:08 PM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings

I did read about the cube, but just saying that since this arc is barely starting it can't really hold a candle to how exciting the Dawn arc was, especially towards the end.

I'm sure the arc will get better, its just right now its still mellow.



Author's Response:

Fair enough, believe me the arc will get a lot more interesting as it goes. The beginning of arcs are normally slow but they pick up pace as it goes along. Hopefully the chapter didn't bore anyone too much but it was necessary.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 01 2014 10:46 AM Title: Chapter 29: Terror-forming

Nothing too interesting happened in the chapter, but it was cool to get some banter between fellow agents.



Author's Response:

Did you not read about the cube?

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 28 2014 5:46 AM Title: Chapter 28: Mission Of Impotance

Ah a new mission on a lifeless planet? What could go wrong? Also, I am writing out the first chapter, will email it to you tomorrow so you can take a look before I upload it.



Author's Response:

Ok that's cool, yeah just send it me and I will read it and give you my thoughts. BTW you'll see soon that if things can go wrong, they normally do.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 24 2014 8:27 AM Title: Chapter 27: Why Are You Blushing?

Aw Jessica has a crush on Tucker, better act fast before Jenny beats you to it. Also, wasn't Tucker supposed to return to Home in a month's time after he arrived or am I missing something?



Author's Response:

Yeah he has to go back to Earth after a month of being on Home. It hasn't been a month yet, It's only been a couple of weeks.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: May 22 2014 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings

Aww, forgetting things! That kind of makes it seem like this whole episode was for nothing! Ahh, well, it was still fun to read.



Author's Response:

Believe me my friend it wasn't for nothing

Reviewer: sketch Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 22 2014 8:38 AM Title: Chapter 26: Judgement Day

Aww, he didn't remember Dawn, at least not consciously?  I hope what ever change they experienced might be enough to change the future for the better.  Will we get to see Dawn in her own time?



Author's Response:

Maybe.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: May 22 2014 4:05 AM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings

Touching stuff, guess I better start work on my part. So she does remember what happened to her, should make things interesting.



Author's Response:

not really but it's within her subconcious so they will still be there. She may experience deja vu from time to time.

Reviewer: sketch Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2014 12:30 PM Title: Chapter 25: She's here

Glad she hasn't killed anyone so far.  And now Tucker knows the truth as well.  

Dawn has gotten really big, I hope going back will either reverse it, because it's going to be really hard living life with nothing in her size, or her friend does find a way to make her change sizes.  (I know, weird coming from a gets fan who loves this scale.). In any case, she is running out of time.  I hope if she tries to have one more chat with Dad, it's a quick one. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading, yeah most likely the next chapter will be the last of this arc. There might be one more after that but I somewhat doubt it, it all depends on which direction I take.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2014 4:49 AM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings

 Oh my oh my, our heroes are literally running out of time. Dawn may not be much older thanks to her genes but everyone else will die. If Tucker dies before Dawn goes back then she will cease to exist.

  Also, she should be horrified to be so big, people are smaller than her thumb and her regret at causing Dr. Crilly so much pain shows that she isn't evil, just like her breakdowns before when she cried over not being able to see her father.

  Hope she can come to her senses and go back to her own time. Perhaps only Tucker can do it. I think I might have said this before but I'll say it again, this is much better than the original. 

 One last thing. The little side story I'm working on, I am targetting a June release. I have a habit of making stories go on for too long and for this one I want to make sure it doesn't drag on for too long. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading. Yeah things are going to be tied up relatively soon and I'm still looking forward to reading your little story. I don't mind how long or short it is, I just appreciate you writing it.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 17 2014 5:53 PM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings

Dawn certainly has anger issues..Im not gonna lie, its a little hard to like future Jessica when were only getting one side of the story combined with her hatred of her. But Dawn IS a teenager and they arent the most reasonable people. She does have a point about Jess keeping this info from her until her father was dead...cant blame the girl for being sour about it. 



Author's Response:

Yeah Dawn is a moody teenager and due to her circumstances she does have anger issues but deep down she is a nice person and hell Jessica might not be so bad.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 17 2014 8:24 AM Title: Chapter 24: Dawn's plan

I like this remake, more conflict and therefore more action,  Dawn may be in the wrong here but I kind of like this new Dawn. Smart girl, using her powers to break out of the cell. 

  Jessica must have been one cold distant mother based on what Dawn says and feels about him but I suspect Jessica had no choice but to let Tucker be. He went back and that's it, company policy prevented her from returning until it was too late. 

  I would like to meet this Graham but if she continues this rampage, she will never meet him ever again as the universe destroys itself. Tucker will have to be the hero of Home. Speaking of Tucker, he seems to have discovered how fortunate the biggest heroine of all has decided to be his friend and how lucky he is. 

  By the way, is it possible if Jessica were to find out what is happening on Earth in Limbo? I think it might be better if she did know about it. It would help...this thing that we have. 



Author's Response:

You can add that if you want in that little thing you're writing. As I said I'm giving you free reign. Maybe future Jessica isn't all that bad, as you can imagine it must have been difficult for her to raise Dawn all by herself. I'm not sure whether we will seethis Jessica, I might save it for a later short story. Thank you for continuing to read and I hope that you enjoy the rest.

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