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Reviewer: elza3imza3im Signed [Report This]
Date: June 10 2014 8:27 AM Title: Lucy Gets Ready

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Reviewer: GoodVibesAndLittleGuys Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 02 2014 8:07 PM Title: Lucy Gets Ready

Overall great story and writing, I liked how Tom being a celebrity was not overlly prommenent in the story. I usually dont like stories with celebrities in them but this one I enjoyed from start (although the beginning was a bit strange) to end. You should expand the story.

I would like to see what Sam would experience if Lucy left him/forgot about him and he had to survive to unaware presence of Tom. 

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for your feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed the story! Although I'll readily confess that Tom Reed was originally written as a certain English celebrity with the same given name, I decided to go with an original character instead to allow readers to use their imaginations and to set up the story's own unique world.

I'd be interested in hearing any feedback as to what you found strange about the beginning: constructive criticism is definitely appreciated and helpful for future writings! And speaking of the future, I have thought about maybe revisiting Sam and Lucy in a follow up or entirely different story.  The question of what the morning after holds is certainly a valid one.

Reviewer: Michael1258 Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 01 2014 9:39 AM Title: Lucy Gets Ready

I agree its a little odd as well. At first i was thinking it was the girlfriend trying to explore new guys and fulfill her boyfriends fantasies in a mildly sadistic fashion, but introducing him to tom when theyre about to have sex is a bit off the wall. If i were tom id instantly think wtf is wrong with her. i would have suggested making it completely unaware for the third party. but you started off great. 



Author's Response:

Thanks, I appreciate the feedback! In hindsight, it's not too well elaborated on, but Tom's eagerness to go along with Lucy's plan is semi-explained as egotism.  His fame has brought him worhsip from plenty of fans, but the idea of taking that concept to such an extreme as dominating over a tiny person is too novel and enticing an offer for him to decline.  He felt enough like a god before and is persuaded to go that extra step futher, if just over one life.

I actually did float the unaware idea when the story was commissioned, but ultimately they wanted Sam to be discovered after the date.  I did manage to stretch it out into the foreplay, though.

Reviewer: riczar Signed [Report This]
Date: March 31 2014 11:22 PM Title: Lucy Gets Ready

This story had a decent start, but has gotten weird.  I guess I'm a little old fashioned and a romantic.  I was hoping that Lucy was trying to experience her fantasy and rekindle her relationship at the same time.  But I'm thinking that this might not end well for the boyfriend.  No rating yet.



Author's Response: I appreciate the feedback! Lucy's libido has definitely taken over from here: her fantasy is just to have a memorable night with Tom. Being able to torment her boyfriend who she's more or less emotionally cut herself off from, and using his own fantasy to do it, is just icing on the cake for her. There's still a bit more of the story left, though. Maybe Sam and his relationship with Lucretia can still survive?

Reviewer: SafetyPin Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 31 2014 9:10 PM Title: The Big Date

No mercy.

Teach him a lesson he will not forget.

He barely survives a horrific and disgusting experience.



Author's Response: No mercy? Check. Trust me, Sam's experience will be disgusting, horrific, and unforgettable - if he survives, that is!

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