[Report This]Date: December 16 2013 5:01 PM Title: Chapter 1: Life of the Party
Excellent as usual. Please keep going!
Author's Response:
Just posted!
[Report This]Date: December 14 2013 11:17 PM Title: Chapter 5: On the Road Again
Gotta love Maggie.
Author's Response:
Scott probably wouldn't agree...
Date: December 14 2013 12:08 PM Title: Chapter 5: On the Road Again
Brilliant writing. Seriously top notch, and I've been following most of your stuff for some time now. I love how you keep readers anticipating, both in your writing and the predictability of your upload speed. Thanks for writing man, you're legitimately amazing. Please don't stop writing.
That being said I'm waiting on a very long maggie chapter with some pretty in depth raunchy foot stuff. And I know you don't usually do butt, but when you did that one chapter in ALB with Jenny, it was pretty good, so if you could throw something like that in that'd be cool too.
These are only suggestions though, and please only take them as that. At any rate I will enjoy whatever you write, so thanks again.
Author's Response:
Thanks very much for reading and reviewing. Maggie's got a pretty lengthy segment later on, so be on the lookout. As I've already got a baseline down for this story, there won't be butt stuff, but I see no reason for it not to appear in future stories with these characters.
[Report This]Date: December 14 2013 9:16 AM Title: Chapter 5: On the Road Again
God I was hoping Judy wasas more evil, but I gues I will setlle for maggie. I cannot wait for her turn. BTW I hope that she has more interaction than the other two. I can see her thinking up some good punishment games.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. And don't count Judy out just yet; she just happens to be a bit more subtle than her daughter.
[Report This]Date: December 12 2013 6:32 PM Title: Chapter 4: Growing Pains
Great stuff. Can't wait to see more of Judy's bare feet. Hope she takes him in her room for some alone time when they get home. Prep her toes for painting or try to rub them lol. Hope to see more with sexy Judy
aaron
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. Judy gets the first turn with Scott this time around.
[Report This]Date: December 12 2013 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 4: Growing Pains
Law and Order: Shrunken Victims Unit
Well to be fair it is his own fault.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review!
Date: December 12 2013 3:30 PM Title: Chapter 3: Booked
@riczar a possible explanation is that the judge specified how long while Scott wasn't listening, right before the beginning of the chapter; he knows it's supposed to be less than how long he'd endup being in jail, but he just didn't listen how much, and his family will find out and react (his mom will be even more disappointed, hi sister will laugh about it... you get the idea).
OR "indefinitely" means that something's going to happen afterwards -- new world order can be anything after all.
Or maybe... ok, you all get the idea, and I did say I wouldn't comment on each teeny tiny detail; sorry, I couldn't resist :)
(tnx for giving me something to look for while rereading it anyway)
Author's Response:
I like your thinking. I will also point out that "indefinite" means there's no specified length, referring to the fact that Scott will go up for review eventually.
[Report This]Date: December 12 2013 2:12 PM Title: Chapter 1: Life of the Party
I can't say I'm a big fan of this genre (gentle fan here), but occasionally you drop something good in. Much of what follows in personal opinion, but some of it could make the story better overall.
A criticism I have is the duration of punishment. You never said what it was, but the summary indicates indefinitely. No fair court would make the punishment open ended. Its either life-long, death, or certain conditions that need to be met for release (usually a period of time with a possibility of early release). This would affect the mindset of the characters. Life imprisonment would mean Scott has nothing more to lose and fall to depression, insanity, suicide, or escape. A limited duration imprisonment would force him to take the punishments and try to be on his best behavior with him looking towards hopefully better things in the future.
Unless his lawyer lied to him (possible if his mother is involved). He mentioned that this punishment is better and shorter then what he would have received normally. Just didn't want you to forget that point.
An observation I should make in Scott's defense is that this has been brewing for a long time. His punishments have been abusive and its his strength of will that hasn't caused him to go insane, which any of us would have done after the first time or two.
I don't know how much longer this series will go for, or even if you have an ending in mind for Scott. I do hope that he'll be able to eventually step away from this and have a happy life.
Author's Response:
Ouch. Well, you've got your opinion, and I respect that. I do think your argument is hinging an awful lot on some nitpicks with the legal system in place here. Part of the plot there is that Judy's been working toward something like this for years with her growing influence on the law. I'm not sure if we've gotten there yet in the story, but Scott will be up for review in the future; the indefinitely part refers to the possibility of this being permanent. His mother did indeed lie to him, or at least withheld the truth, as was stated in one of the chapters. On your final point, of course this has been brewing for a long time. #1, this is a fetish story revolving a lot around humiliation and degradation of character, and #2, this is a futuristic, almost dystopian, scenario where society is perfectly accepting of what is in reality a very harsh consequence system. The bottom line is that there's got to be some suspension of disblief in order to make the fantasy part function in what is essentially a light porno story.
Date: December 12 2013 10:17 AM Title: Chapter 4: Growing Pains
I swear I thought the chapter would end with a "thank you" ;p
Other than that, I'll try to only comment every few chapters (unless you have the whole plot completed already): you probably already know what I think of this series, and I don't want to slow you down ot make you doubt your choices.
I should double check my web history, but I've got a feeling you've been making me visit this site much more often than usual in the last few days.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. Glad to know you're interested in what happens enough to keep coming back. On the "thank you" that you expected from Judy, as you'll see soon, her mood is just a little too cold this time around for formalities.
Date: December 11 2013 7:57 AM Title: Chapter 3: Booked
Looks like even #2 didn't teach him anything; even Susan was too soft on him :)
The beacon is a good idea btw -- I thought the story would involve some officer checking him from time to time, but an automatic device makes more sense.
PS
About Zephilia&AdamX's comments: I'm really really glad there won't be M/m; and the best one imho was the 1st episode, because I read it expecting "just another story", and so its goodness took me completely by surprise :)
(Also because it was his&Ella's first time, and again, that's a bit difficult to replicate in a sequel)
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. At first I thought I'd go with the officer checking in, before realizing all the fun possibilities the beacon brings in for the story.
[Report This]Date: December 11 2013 2:48 AM Title: Chapter 3: Booked
This might be your best installment in this series with all due respect.
Author's Response:
Oh gosh, and we haven't even reached the actual fetish fun yet. Pressure...
[Report This]Date: December 10 2013 2:01 PM Title: Chapter 3: Booked
Oh I wonder what they will do. I just hope ther isn't much M/m interaction. Sorrt I love more F/m and F/f scenarios. Love this scenario though there are a lot of possiblilities. I just hope they are more cruel.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! Don't worry about M/m; in terms of fetish stuff, this is F/m all the way. There may be some dialogue between Scott and his brother, but that's it.
[Report This]Date: December 10 2013 12:06 PM Title: Chapter 3: Booked
ok. Scott is officially a douchebag. If it was ME who killed that baby i would go to prison willingly and even accept lifelong. So, Judy, Maggie: GET SATAN ON HIS ASS!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! As you'll see soon, Judy and Maggie are in complete agreement with you.
[Report This]Date: December 08 2013 5:40 PM Title: Chapter 1: Life of the Party
I'm super glad you're continuing this tale of maternal domination! This will be spectacular, no doubt. I do hope part of his punishment consists of being even smaller and that his mom's foot stink completely crushes his sled-worth this time.
Author's Response:
There is definitely some severe punishment coming up. Thanks for reviewing.
[Report This]Date: December 08 2013 2:10 PM Title: Chapter 2: Comes Crashing Down
Great atory, I just hope the girl is ok and cannot wait for the would of hurt for Scott to start.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: December 08 2013 4:33 AM Title: Chapter 2: Comes Crashing Down
jesus... Is there any chance the baby survived?
Author's Response:
We'll just have to wait and see, won't we?
[Report This]Date: December 07 2013 10:27 PM Title: Chapter 2: Comes Crashing Down
Cool Beaners Dude reminds me of the old days, what I can remember of it anyway...;`)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: December 07 2013 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 2: Comes Crashing Down
Before I completely hate Scott and hope that his mother humiliates/degrades/abuses him with no remorse, is there going to be a chapter that describes what actually happened?(He may or may not be at fault here).
Nonetheless, this was an excellent chapter and I am looking foward to more chapters!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing. There will definitely be more information on this event later in the story, and most likely in future short stories of the series too.
Date: December 06 2013 2:18 PM Title: Chapter 1: Life of the Party
I've always loved these stories and I can't believe that you have another one out. If I may ask a request... Could it be possible to add some butt action in this as well?! You don't have to if the story is already written but if you can that would be freakin awesome!!! You are one of the best writers on this site. Thank you!
Author's Response:
I've already got this one pretty much written, so this story is going to be butt-less. With what I've got planned for future stories in this series, though, I could see that being a possibility. Thanks for reading!
Date: December 06 2013 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 1: Life of the Party
Much better than toy teacher >:-)
Seriously, thic counts as a Christmas surprise.
Can't wait to see the new world order...
Author's Response:
Merry early Xmas to all I guess! Thanks for reading.