[Report This]Date: May 19 2016 4:06 PM Title: Revelation
How can a backstory be so detailed?!! That was amazing! It just made their relationship so much deeper.
Karma is awesome. Jack saved Penny and now Penny saved Jack.
What a good note to take a break on. Well deserved.
I hope you come back soon. Enjoy your break!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your kind words!
Just for the sake of interest - the backstory is super detailed due to the way this story came to life; it evolved from a number of half-formed ideas I'd had for years and years, I just needed to refine these ideas down to one narrative that encapsulated everything I'd been thinking about. My first draft of GH-X2 actually had the revelation much much earlier, when Penny was walking Jack home, but I realised immediately how preposterous that was, for her to suddenly blurt it out like that unprovoked. As a writer, I just wanted that emotional hit to come straight in, as I felt like it was a really strong twist, but I knew that if I pushed it back to much later, and could take the story somewhere first, that it would have a more resonant impact. Ultimately, I ended up conceiving the kidnapping, and had to spend a long time figuring out how to make that fantasy scenario of being trapped around a dominant, but incredibly sexy girl work - writing erotic stuff well is actually much harder for me than working on the 'plot'... In the end, the stuff with Caitlin has ended up being the main body of this story, and that's cool with me - it's a major turn-on and, as I say, kind of wish-fulfillment, fantasy scenario stuff, but now the story has opened up again, it gives breathing room for a lot of the ideas I had at the start, but now with added drama and anticipation.
I've written short stories of debatable quality since my teenage years, some exploring the Penny role, and some exploring the Caitlin role, but this is the first time I've actually tried to make both sides work as part of a bigger narrative. It's because it's based on giantess, and real life musings I had back then, that this story is about 17-year-olds, and the drama revolves around that kind of not-adult, not-independent, but scared, confused, emotional, no-longer-innocent time in your life, that everyone claims is amazing, but I found quite daunting. I felt very insecure, especially with girls, and this just builds on that feeling, in a giantess NWO setting. This is what I would have written then, but never did.
[Report This]Date: May 19 2016 10:01 AM Title: Anticipation
AT LAST! The cavalry has arrived.
If I could give you eleven points, I most definitely would. Bravo!
Author's Response:
50 points to Gryffindor!!!
Date: May 19 2016 3:40 AM Title: Introduction
Not I'm unhappy but I didn't expect Penny's return. However, Jack suffered enough to avoid more damages cause a grandpa's poem loll.
Author's Response:
It was meant to be a bit of a surprise, I think a lot of people expected him to get destroyed by Amber - tried to do a bit of a curveball there!
Date: May 19 2016 12:33 AM Title: Anticipation
OH MY GOD SHE'S BACK! Also, you're frequent updates are a godsend. I like the detail of the house, the half-steps meant for Betas, shows her family actually cares about Betas or perhaps there is a Beta member. Either way, it shows the difference.
Author's Response:
My frequent updates will now dry up for quite a while I'm afraid, but it was good while it lasted! The story has moved on and developed quite a bit over the last 5 chapters, and there will be more to come in future, when I have time.
The stairs detail is something I've been saving up; I think this is actually the first staircase mentioned in the story so far, as Jack lives in an Beta-sized bungalow, and Caitlin in an Alpha-sized one.
[Report This]Date: May 18 2016 7:40 PM Title: Anticipation
He was expecting to go to hell, but instead he found heaven.
Author's Response:
Very nicely put!
Date: May 18 2016 11:33 AM Title: Conniption
Ooo! Conflict! You seem to have found a decent balance of chapters for tone, sexy stuff and conflict here.
Gotta say, I was sad to leave Nice Caitlin for Nasty Caitlin, as it was very endearing to see her so comforting for once - but then, I probably wouldn't be reading if that was all there was to the character!
Author's Response:
Nasty Caitlin isn't 100% nasty... otherwise Jack's head would probably be facing the wrong way. Amber, on the other hand, now there's something scary... Nice Caitlin was thought extinct for many years - it's highly unlikely anyone else has even seen so much as a fleeting glance of this rare, majestic animal.
In all seriousness, Caitlin has enormous issues (geddit...) but she is still a human female, and she has needs, be they sexual ones, recreational ones, or emotional ones.
Date: May 17 2016 7:20 PM Title: Conniption
Interesting to see Caitlin in a temporary state of weakness. She still comes off as a stone cold bitch in general, but not such a cardboard cutout type of villain now. I'm sure the next chapter is going to be hell on earth for Jack.
Kind of wondering for how long Jack is going to end up in captivity. This basically has to end at some point for him. Either he dies in Caitlin's clutches, is released, escapes (unlikely I know), or maybe becomes brainwashed into staying Caitlin's boytoy forever. Those seem the most logical conclusions to his conundrum, but maybe you have something altogether different planned.
Also wondering if Penny might make an appearance soon in coming chapters. Her sympathetic nature serves as a nice counterweight to Caitlin's malice. It would kind of be a shame for her to simply be out of the story altogether. That being said, the story is intriguing in its own way (if a bit sadistic at times). Looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Deffo stone cold. It's not her fault though, it's the just way she's... written (Jessica Rabbit style).
The answers to your questions may well have been answered in the next chapters, suffice it to say, your thoughts are/were very much along the right track.
[Report This]Date: May 17 2016 5:08 PM Title: Conniption
Yep, Jack triggered something. He made her she'd a tear and reveal that she had some concern for him.
In other words, Jack outplayed Caitlin. Big Time. I mean, she had a loss of words and Jack took advantage of it.
Having been defeated once finally, Caitlin feels embarrassed. She decides that this can never happen again and she establishes dominance again.
Jack's little victory doesn't last long as Caitlin ties him up and leaves him trapped waiting for Amber.
Will Amber show up before Caitlin? Of course, and I believe Amber will break Jack. And if Jack thought him being sexually assaulted by Caitlin was bad, then these next few chapters will make that feel like nothing.
I think Jack can maybe tip over the laundry basket. If something heavy is at the top, it actually helps because the weight can bring the basket down.
Well, Jack is in for a rough meeting with Amber. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
A small victory in a war he looks like losing, or something more significant? It took forever, but the longer he was able to withstand Caitlin, the more she let him in, without intending to.
Date: May 17 2016 3:36 PM Title: Conniption
Really Caitlin? "Teach him his place in the world" is the reason for all this? That seems WAY too simple a reason for doing all these things, you'd think a simple pounding would suffice, no?
Author's Response:
Perhaps she's trying to teach his place in the world, is underneath a giant woman? But yeah, you're damn right, that can't be the only reason... I get the feeling she's a big liar!
Date: May 17 2016 3:33 PM Title: Introduction
Hmm, see i would have to say that when i use the words "cunt" and "bitch", that i use it for both males and females, not really using it for its "intended" gender. And I am in no way a 'macho male' nor am i 'secure' in myself as it seems you believe, they're just my go-to words for when i'm upset; though i'm not angry per se, I guess i'd describe it as a slight agitation at best. And as for why i use those specific words, it's influenced by where i live, not by my outlook on women (i'm writing this bit due to the "because she's "just" a women" bit). As someone who has been around a lot of women, having also been bullied by women, i must say that regardless of someone's gender, both have the capacity and means to hurt; an example i'll give, is a woman that was shorter than me, smaller frame, though much more ferocity, managed to easily beat me to the ground and proceed to kick me (though for no other reason discernibly, than the fact i do not fight back); so forgive me if i'm sounding a tad defensive, but you seem to have interpretted a lot more from my message than was actually there, and seemed to have assumed a lot about myself from it. I'm from an Australian culture, where everyone uses "cunt" for literally everything, and "bitch" as an adjective towards anything; I don't believe for a second that women are any "lesser" than men, nor do i have the mindset that "if some bitch attacked me i could deal with it" mindset. Though i can see how there may have been things that lead you to believe this about me, and my message being as short and brash as it is, would definitely not give any reason to think of me in a positive light, i must stress that you're looking too much into what isn't there and making too many assumptions about me as a person.
Though you are right that it is very interesting to see how we perceive the difference in impact in comparison to a giantess decimating an entire city, versus this one on one interaction. Though i honestly must say that i don't read often on this site, I cannot handle the very unreaslistic reactions and developments that are rampant in this community, mainly due to how detached i feel from it, nor do i watch much film, so i don't have a built up familiarity with these kinds of gratuitous actions and gruesome developments in terms of story or otherwise.
As for Jack being hard to project into, i'd have to disagree, i find it easy to relate with jack, maybe it's because i've been in a situation where those bigger than me have 'dominated' over me, and i reacted in a similar way. So it's incredibly easy for me at least, to project into this story and be drawn in, though of course, it's not easy to imagine this specific situation.
But yes, that was me saying 'well done', you've definitely made an interesting story, and i think that you've done really, really well in terms of how you've written it out.
Author's Response:
Cheers!
(I wasn't singling you out for criticism or anything, there have been a few reviews along the same lines - I just chose to talk about it in your reply as it had been a while since someone had called Caitlin a bitch directly in their review).
[Report This]Date: May 16 2016 9:38 PM Title: Capitulation
Poor kid! By the time Monday rolls around, she'll probably stuff him back in the teddy bear, bound-and-gagged once again.
Date: May 16 2016 10:22 AM Title: Introduction
This is extremely fucked up, but it possesses such talent. I'm a mixture of emotions, on one hand, well fucking done with writing what you have, it's brilliant, but on the other hand; FUCKING HELL, what a bithc, amber is a cunt, i want them both severely injured.
All i can say is this is fucking amazing, and amazingly fucked.
Author's Response:
Hahaha! Thank you, I think!
It's fascinating for me to read the comments from people who get supremely angry and frustrated at Caitlin's (and Amber's) actions, and don't get me wrong, it's very flattering that the depiction is powerful enough to bring out such a response. It's meant to be hard to put yourself in Jack's shoes; Caitlin's psychotic - the kidnapping, the forced sexual stuff (rape), the casual disregard for his emotional and physical wellbeing - it's brutal. Horrible things like this do happen in real life, with the genders reversed notably. Most horror films, or cinema that has difficult-to-watch torture or rape scenes (I dunno, gangster movies, psychological thrillers etc) will go way beyond this level of discomfort for the viewer. I acutely dislike blood-letting, serious injury and dismemberment, some lines would need to be crossed here for anything like that to occur. I'm also not so sure it's 100% 'fucked up' to depict this; it's an exploration of a reality within a universe where there are a few vulnerable half-size men, and this is something that I predict would happen in that context.
A lot of 'evil' giantess fiction I've read deals with women who destroy cities with buildings full of innocent lives, or torture, crush and eat shrunken tinies who are curiously tolerant of these capital offences for the sake of their fetish. I don't mean this in a disparaging way at all, it's just really interesting that when the giant is big enough, or the tiny small enough, that the psychology and humanity of it isn't as noticeable. That's kinda the crux of this size ratio, and this scenario - Caitlin and Jack are almost at a liveable scale difference (imagine a very tall woman and a real life homunculus or dwarf) so it is quite visceral and 'real' to see prejudices and abuse depicted on someone more 'human' in scale to the person mistreating them.
In terms of the 'karma' you hint at, and the very gender-specific insults you've thrown at Caitlin and Amber - this is very, very easy to do from the position of a full-grown 'macho' male, secure in the knowledge that if some 'bitch' attacked you, you'd be able to teach her a lesson or whatever. This is not the case for Jack, these aren't bitches and cunts who are inferior to him (I hate those words used in this context, but I can appreciate why you're using them), it's almost genderless, he's a tiny animal unable to protect himself from much larger, stronger animal, whether they're female or not. That's the horror, he finds her incredibly attractive, but she's debasing him, does that make it ok, does it even make it LESS ok than if an Alpha man kidnapped him, because she's *just* a woman?
Anyway, just my thoughts on it. Thanks for the comment.
Date: May 16 2016 7:01 AM Title: Introduction
Great chapter again! Well, Jack become a totally toy, slave. The fact that he dissociated himself emotionally from what is happening is maybe a defense mechanicism. Penny will return but I don't bet on justice system. However, I bet on bad karma style justice like Cayce's Summer Job.
PS: you are a great writer as beginner!
Author's Response:
I think his weariness is reaching the point that he's not himself any more, he hasn't got the energy or the mental faculty to fend her off or plan as he did when she first got a hold of him. It's now an endless sequence of one-sided experiences that he has to withstand. She does appear be trying to keep him weak, hungry and on edge because she's aware of how crafty he can be, but perhaps that's just the author speculating...!
Cayce's 'Homunculus' is my all time favourite GTS read, and it wasn't even because I found it erotic (feet and being inches tall is not my preference at all) - it was because the story was incredible, and twisted and toyed with my emotions so much I could Not. Stop. Reading. I will deffo have to make time to read Summer Job, I may have tried to read it before but not got into it as much, or something. 'Homunculus' especially convinced me that I should try and write a 'proper' story, something that gave the characters motivations and made the experiences that much more meaningful than just 'giant sexpot touches your dick'. I like to think GH-X2 is my paltry attempt at repurposing that kind of approach to meet my own interests in macrophilia.
[Report This]Date: May 15 2016 7:12 PM Title: Capitulation
You know that feeling when no matter what do, it won't change the outcome? Well, Jack is in this moment. No matter what he tries to do to escape, he will always be caught and punished. Now he just gives up in this chapter.
Jack had many things before he got captured. He had friends, family, and an identity. Well Caitlin took everything from him, including his identity. Jack kept fight until he lost something special to him. His virginity. Yeah, I know some people don't consider that to be losing virginity, but for Jack, he wanted his first sexual experience to be with another Beta girl, not like this, and Cailtin took that away from him too.
Hmm. I never considered jump rope as a bondage tool until now. I mean, this is an everyday item that most people have and it could be used for some humiliation like this.
When Jack mentioned that his hands were resting above his head, I thought Caitlin was going to tie him up to the bedposts and go for round 2. Perhaps another time.
Alpha food must look like a buffet for Jack. Just one plate may fill him up and he will never have to get seconds. However, Jack does get a meal, on Caitlin's thigh. Then he gets seconds on her foot. Might be worth it considering how desperate Jack is.
Jack said multiple times that he did not want to give her satisfaction of his humiliation. It looks like there is still something that Jack actually has control of. He still has hope. The question is for how long especially with Cailtin being so unpredictable these last few chapters.
The couch scene was nice. Caitlin comforts Jack and it actually doesn't comfort him. Instead, it seems to scare him because it doesn't know what to think of her anymore. Should he feel mad, thankful, he doesn't know. She keeps doing opposite things to him which confuses the crap out of Jack.
I think Caitlin is just breaking him down until Jack just gives up. Then she cheers him up until he gets some energy. Then, she humiliates him again when he starts showing signs of vigor. It's a cycle. She probably enjoys breaking him down again and again and Jack hates it so much.
If I was Jack I would start acting like crap all the time so Caitlin would comfort me all the time. Of course, she might catch on my idea so I would resist here and there, but for the most part, I think Jack can exploit this by faking his misery. Now I wonder if Jack can hear my idea.
As this story goes on, it feels like a social experiment. "Hey, let's put him in the pool". "Hey, let's throw him". "Let's try forcing him to orgasm". "Now let's force him to eat off her foot". "Now let's mess with him and have her comfort him". Well, if this were an experiment, I would say it is going well if the point was to break Jack down.
I wonder what Caitlin has in store for Jack next. I'm loving the bondage stuff (rope, tape, gags, cuffs). Would love to see more of it.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
There's a lack of consistency in Caitlin's approach that could be explained by a few things. I'm definitely trying to hint at the fact she's just doing what she feels like, and if it happens to be mean, or nice, or sexy, it's not like she's really thinking about it as much as he might think she is - she might just be a bit naive and doesn't really understand how to be very cruel particularly well. It's not in doubt that she has some kind of fascination with him, whether she straight-up likes him, or just likes how small he is, or what it is he represents to her. She's very much a bully, and most of her friends are just yes-men, so maybe she doesn't know how to be normal with him at all, and is just trying to do what she thinks he would react best to, or expects, as an inferior manlet. It's not beyond the realms of possibility that someone has trained her to treat him like this either.
[Report This]Date: May 15 2016 6:50 PM Title: Capitulation
Seriously, the more I read these the more I wonder, what's the point of all this? Just for fun? Has she done this to many small males in the past? Remind me why she gets to get away with all this, exactly? Does this world not have the same laws as ours? In our world just because someone is rich or has connections doesn't mean they get away with everything. This is clearly assault, rape, and kidnapping, how does someone get away with all that? Is she gonna kill him? Or keep him forever? If she lets him go, how does she know she'll be safe? Ugh, so many questions! Great chapter!
Author's Response:
All of the above are valid questions. In answer to has she done this to many small males in the past? - we know of one definite example from Delon's message to Jack a few chapters back, but there's a fair bit of hearsay and rumour. As you well know, this is my only story (in anything, ever), and I don't consider myself to be a great, or natural, writer, but I've gone to great lengths to try and create a believable world, characters, situations and actions because this is something I really, really like to imagine. I've zero first hand experience of this sort of stuff in real life, plus I am majorly aware of how horrible, brutal and unacceptable this scenario would be in real life, but for me this a seriously intriguing scenario that pushes a lot of buttons, both in terms of the sexual dominance displayed, and the acute injustice felt by Jack (persecution makes for incredible drama, though I'd never wish it on anyone).
I know where this is going to go for the time being, I've probably planned out another 10-15 chapters until I reach my current CRITICAL JUNCTURE IN THE PLOT where I haven't made my mind up how to 100% progress the story yet (I have a few options on the table, though). For the time being, Jack's current predicament is basically a waking hell, with the sexiest devil ever - it is tearing his brain apart. It's a huge mind fuck that I myself would be terrified of, AND insanely aroused by.
Will he escape? At some point, the story will take him away from this torture. Will he see Penny again? I can vouch for it. Will there be justice? It depends what you think fitting justice would be for Caitlin's crimes - she's still almost a charicature at the moment, but greater depth has been hinted at in some of the less monstrous moments.
There's still a long way to go with this yet...
Date: May 15 2016 6:30 PM Title: Capitulation
Hot damn! Two chapters in one week? And without a dip in quality?! I must have made someone in heaven very happy to be so blessed!
I don't have much more to add that I didn't already say in the last chapter.
However, that last line;
> “Good boy,” she soothed, “Let it out. Let it all out.”
That was probably the hottest line in this chapter TBH, possibly in the entire story so far.
I've always felt like sexiness isn't just about events or contrived situations, but about emotions; The fact she's obviously playing a game of "mean-nice/mean-nice" is what makes the humiliation humiliating.
Author's Response:
Indeed! It's been a bit of a stretch to get it all written down, but I've tried to strike whilst the iron is hot and it's all fresh in my brain. Chapter 16 has been by some distance the longest chapter I've nad to write so far, primarily because there's no convenient break point until that line. It means you get a load of GH-X2 all in one go, though, so not a terrible ordeal for the reader...
[Report This]Date: May 15 2016 6:15 PM Title: Capitulation
I am starting to believe that those weren't crocodile tears. :o She certainly have some issues. Maybe she likes/loves this little beta! In her own way, probably. Not a healthy one. And don't want him away from her.
Author's Response:
There's definitely something going on. She's not being as cruel as she could be.
Date: May 15 2016 4:19 AM Title: Culmination
Seriously, how is Jack going to get himself out of this? And this isn't really a rhetorical question.
Date: May 13 2016 4:12 PM Title: Culmination
God Damn. It's like you've reached into my mind, plucked my favourite fantasy, and made it even better!
The way Jack reacts to Caitlin, especially him "finding truth in her words", makes me think this is the start of her breaking him.
If so, I'm excited to find out how Caitlin will continue to crush his spirit, as well as how that subjegation will be presented (as an unconsenting fear of punishment, or an active yearning to be ruled?).
Author's Response:
Haha, you're very welcome! It's very much personal-fantasy-come-true stuff for me, in more shallow terms with both Caitlin's apearance and the size ratios, but also with the humiliation / kinky stuff and the existential 'it would probably suck to be that small' dilemmas as well. Jack definitely seems close to breaking point, it very much depends if he can stay strong mentally, or if he capitulates. It's that crucial.
Date: May 12 2016 8:51 PM Title: Culmination
Great chapter! I wonder how Jack is gonna cope with all this when it's over, some people can end up killing themselves from trauma like this. He's been forcibly raped, hurt, and humiliated and the worse part is that he's probably not gonna get any justice for it. It's hard not to feel sorry for him.
Author's Response:
Certainly this is going to mess with his psychological state. He was already in a bad place about his future prospects, so this will compound that enormously. He has shown a lot of resiliance up until now, but it's beginning to reach breaking point.