[Report This]Date: March 30 2018 11:58 AM Title: Introduction
Leaning back and forth between Nostory and smoki1020's speculations.
Knowledge of Caitlin's asthma could definitely play to Jack's favor. But if blackmailing were to occur, I don't see it coming straight from Jack when Caitlin can trump him with the mere threat of physical violence. Perhaps Jack may use it to appeal to Caitlin's humanity or if blackmailing occurs it'll be from someone else; like Alex catching Caitlin abusing him again and threatening to tell her coach about the asthma if she doesn't leave him alone.
Looking forward to how it'll progress now that it seems Caitlin has an achilles heel.
Author's Response:
Yeah, there are definitely a few potential avenues for the blackmail - either an anonymous tip-off or Alex / Penny / even Delon doing something and not Jack himself, assuming they are comfortable putting themselves in the firing line. Appealing to Caitlin's humanity would appear to be a pointless effort, given the way things have panned out in the past, but never say never...
Date: March 04 2018 5:34 PM Title: Introduction
I'm fairly sure that Alex is not betraying Jack. I think that's Alex's locker he's hiding in, and Caitlin just tries it because she wants to borrow something from Alex (she looked in her bag first, then in some other lockers).
Still, Alex does act mysteriously, so it's hard to guess her true intent. I think the pool party soured her on Caitlin's cruel games, and Alex has decided to discreetly help out Jack when she can. Even if that is the case, though, Alex is still something of a gray character, morally. Maybe she wants to help Jack, but she still doesn't like to risk Caitlin's wrath.
That makes me appreciate Alex all the more, since she's the character in the story with the most chance for some personal growth. Yay! Character arc!
Loving the story.
Thanks.
Date: March 04 2018 12:16 PM Title: Introduction
Tense and amazing Chapter! Like the last reviewer, I'm confused about Alex Did she trick or try to help Jack by taking a big gamble? I am always doubfful about her.
Date: March 02 2018 2:29 PM Title: Introduction
Conspiration or not, Better for Jack to Hannah than Caitlin or Amber! Glad to see another update so soon anyway!
Date: February 25 2018 2:15 PM Title: Introduction
"You must register to review " ....I can do that to review this story . Any appreciating adjective would simply fail to describe the excellence this creation . I really used to come back every month to check for an update and man.... can't describe the feeling when i saw chapter 34 instead of 31 as the last one . For my part, i may sound cruel but i never wanted the Caitlyn part to end , i am in love with that bitch and her attitude...hope to see more of her in future . I seriously just warn you to not leave this story incomplete , or get ready for an AMATERASU from me !!!!! Jokes apart , KEEP IT UP MADAFAKA . :D
Author's Response:
I'M STILL GOING, OK, JEES.
[Report This]Date: February 02 2018 1:18 AM Title: Introduction
I sent some feedback on GC but I wanted to leave a note here as well. These last few chapters have been wonderful. If I seem overly critical at times its only because this story is one of a few masterpieces in the genre and as such I hold it to a very high standard :).
Author's Response:
Admit it, you just like to offer unsolicited writing tips because that gets you off. Pervert.
[Report This]Date: January 31 2018 8:15 PM Title: Introduction
Those last couple of chapters were very emotional and kind of sweet (and I know, as a guy, I probably shouldn't gush too much about one little kiss, but that one was a little slice of awesome). Oh, and I'm pretty sure I'm in love with Penny.
These chapters could come off as maybe a little too sweet and cuddly, but they don't because, no matter how sunny things look between Jack and Penny, we can always feel the spector of Caitlin looming just around the corner.
Nicely done.
Author's Response:
Yeah, it's definitely a fine line with how saccharine these chapters come across. I'm sure I'll read them back in a few months and feel like I was being really wet, but then I'll read them even further down the line and be really moved by them - it depends on the mood I'm in tbh.
As for being in love with Penny - I mean - she's almost like the perfect foil for Jack specifically - but in a wider context, regardless of her being female, or tall and pretty, she's is a person who truly cares, makes an effort, and is trying to overcome her own insecurities, a lot like Jack. Most people want to root for a person like that, or would welcome them into their own lives with open arms, let alone as a romantic interest. I worry sometimes, as mentioned above, that it's all way too sweet and gooey and 'nice' - but these characters have developed this way organically, funnily enough - I like to think they've grown to this point by reacting realistically to the situations they've found themselves in.
Date: January 30 2018 10:01 AM Title: Introduction
Finally Jack is connected with Penny good chapter!
Author's Response:
Cheers!
Date: January 30 2018 8:02 AM Title: Introduction
Now THIS is podracing!
Author's Response:
Don't get cocky.
(This is my favourite review)
[Report This]Date: January 29 2018 7:15 PM Title: Introduction
I read the recent chapter since I saw the review count, now pouring over it. This story is beautiful, I'll provide a more up to date review when I complete my reading of this wonderful tale
Author's Response:
Please do! I would love to hear your thoughts on it, and thank you for your kind words on what you've read so far.
[Report This]Date: January 29 2018 3:40 PM Title: Introduction
Waited years for this moment.
thank you
Author's Response:
I hope it's worth the wait...
[Report This]Date: January 28 2018 11:31 PM Title: Introduction
As a testament to how much I like this story, it’s currently 3:30 am.
Author's Response:
I know that feel, and I'll take that as a massive compliment, thank you.
[Report This]Date: January 28 2018 11:29 PM Title: Introduction
Really loving this story. I like what you’re doing with the chapter nanes. There better be one called “Defenestration” by the end of the story.
Author's Response:
Don't tempt me.
[Report This]Date: January 28 2018 11:22 AM Title: Introduction
I agree with pixl8ed about the romantic tension; it's that gee, I hope those crazy kids get together vibe that is such a pleasure to read, and root for.
Seems like readers (and maybe the characters) are a bit wary of Alex. I don't know. I want to give her the benefit of the doubt. I think she's become troubled about her place in Caitlin's Mean Girls Clique, but is not quite sure if she wants to leave it just yet; it's what she knows, after all. Still, I think that day at the pool opened her eyes about the kind of person Caitlin really is. I think Alex may be in a transitional period, trying to decide who she really is.
Then again, maybe Alex is a sort of 'double agent', appearing to help out our heroes, as part of Caitlin's nefarious plan.
Tomato, Tomahto, really. :)
Author's Response:
This is essentially my position with Alex as things stand i.e. this is how I see it, if I were a reader who doesn't know the way it will all pan out yet. She's a de facto mean girl who never thought about it until now. Is she nice? Maybe. Does she care deeply? Maybe. Is she just trying to appease her conscience for a bit before reverting to type?
Maybe...
Date: January 28 2018 10:36 AM Title: Introduction
Glad to see this story updated, It's nice to Penny to get close with Jack. Delon support as well. But I'm not so sure about Alex. I hope to see few more chapters soon.
Author's Response:
Your wish... granted! (34 will be the last update for a bit)
Date: January 28 2018 12:40 AM Title: Introduction
Yes ! GH-X2 has returned ! I can't tell you how happy I am to read a new chapter of your awesome story. Concerning the situation... I must say that Jack was very, very lucky that Caitlinn didn't notice him. If I were here, I would probably look very closely each and every Beta around to find my prey back... but perhaps that she did it the morning and grew bored or that she herself is too agitated to to do right now.
In any case, I expect something big in the library. Probably Penny, but who knows ? A certain redhead could barge in...
Author's Response:
I suspect Caitlin may have been a lot more observant on Monday, or even during Tuesday day, but by Tuesday afternoon, with school over, she could have reached the conclusion Jack's not coming back or is herself preoccupied or tired.
Then again, who's to say she didn't actually spot him, even more than once, but is simply biding her time... *mic drop*
Date: January 28 2018 12:27 AM Title: Introduction
Ah! I just read the story in one big, 32 chapter gulp (yeah, I need to get out more).
I'm tired, a bit fuzzy around the edges, so I don't think I'll come up with a coherent critique here. I'll just say that I love, love, love this story! The contrast between the Caitlin and Penny parts of the story is striking, indeed (I liked that hug, too).
I'm even feeling a little warm and fuzzy toward Alex now.
Incredible story.
Thanks.
Author's Response:
Woah, that's a commitment and a half. Even I haven't read the whole thing in one sitting since it got beyond 20-odd chapters, I just have to hope it feels consistent across theboard, from recent chapters back to the stuff I wrote a few years ago - fingers crossed it does!
Date: December 11 2017 10:39 AM Title: Introduction
Any hope for a new chapter before the 31st of December ? It would be a great way to end the year :) !
Date: May 10 2017 6:52 PM Title: Introduction
This is a great story. Keep int going and thanks for getting the latest chapters up.
I didn't expect Jack to find his glasses. And from Alex, no less. It's great to hear about these good things, even if they are seemingly inconsequential, pop up amongst all the horrible things that have happened. Something to help cheer Jack up; and boy does he need the cheer.
Author's Response:
Bittersweet innit. Life's weird sometimes. Breaks your heart a bit.
Thank you for the kind words about the story, it means a lot.
[Report This]Date: May 10 2017 4:04 PM Title: Introduction
Love it! Please don't stop writing it, this story is fantastic... Definitely one of my top favorites!!
Author's Response:
I will try to keep writing it until it is done! Thank you for your review!