Reviews For Christmas for kim
Reviewer: wildcatman Signed [Report This]
Date: July 28 2013 2:59 PM Title: Mercy kim!
Author's Response: Yeah thanks for the review appreciate it :)
Date: July 28 2013 2:59 PM Title: Mercy kim!
Wow, the spacing dude.... spread it out a little, and edit it a few times before you upload. Get Kimberly to proof read it, and allow her to give you more suggestions....
The female perspective could be your most valuable tool! I like your basic story and the tale itself. The writing could use a bit of work though, you need to describe EVERYTHING, in great detail, and 'paint a picture' so-to-speak, so that the reader can visualize the scenes playing out, ya know?
Author's Response: Yeah thanks for the review appreciate it :)