Date: June 27 2013 3:01 AM Title: Early Mornings
Your doing great, man! You'll improve as you continue, and you'll start to get frustrated too, but don't quit,....just read some of the other great stories here and just relax, and let your imagination take over...
The best tales are the ones with a blend of detailed descriptions, intense interaction, and a bit of underlying fear. The spacing between flows nicely, when you take your time, and just let it play out in your head.
I like the way that you've added the mystery of the 'purple-goo', and the 'Idea', that it might have some sort of effect on her...
although, nasty way to clean-up his mess in the panty drawer! (Gag!) *cough*
Author's Response:
Thanks Catman! I love your story "The Decrement of Tom"! Your advice is well appreciated. I didn't really give up I just had to take a step back for a while and really look at this story.