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Reviewer: zephilia Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30 2013 10:25 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Introduction

Oh wonder of Rebecca will be all right. I can sence tha malice in the heart of Kira. Cannot wait for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Maybe she will be, maybe she won't be...time will tell =]

Reviewer: MadHatter Signed [Report This]
Date: April 30 2013 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Introduction

Wow, quite the start

All I can suggest is maybe spacing out the dialogue a little bit so it's not so congested perhaps XD

Hope to see more of this one in the future though!



Author's Response:

Ok. It looked fine in my word processor and was squished a bit upon submission. I'll edit it first next time. 

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