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Reviewer: Chozo Signed [Report This]
Date: April 27 2013 3:59 PM Title: Morning Revival

One thing that doesn't make sense is that in chapter 1 you write that Lucy took a shower and then went to bed, and then in the second chapter she wakes up and comments on how she doesn't have time to take a shower. Why would she need to take a shower again so soon when she just showered before going to bed? That doesn't make a lot of sense to me. Just thought I should point that out. Other than that keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

Thanks for pointing that out,sloppy writing on my part.

Reviewer: zephilia Signed [Report This]
Date: February 25 2013 2:57 AM Title: Morning Revival

Great story so far can't wait for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the kind words,I hope you'll like the next chapter as it will be the first with an interchanging view point.

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