Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 4 Some Part Pt1

The character-building keeps getting better and better. Although, with regard to Chance? I think you meant to say "...fourth _passenger_ in the car."

Unless, of course, it's a quintet made up of Zoey, Ida, Juliella, Chance, and Alex. In which case; lucky Alex! ;-)

Author's Response:

Yeah I did and no Alex dosen't get all the girls but one and thank you for reading

Reviewer: Dudemanguy Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20 2013 9:35 PM Title: Chapter 4 Some Part Pt1

COMMAS! I notice a massive absence of these. Other than that, it's a really good story, but use COMMAS!!

Author's Response:

I will use these in my story and thank you