Date: October 23 2017 7:26 PM Title: Prologue
This is really good is the next chapter ever going to be finished
[Report This]Date: January 31 2013 9:59 PM Title: Prologue
You should post this on writing.com or something, it would be fun to take a whack at it and post chapters of my own. Also, I am confused as to why her name changed from Abby to Abbi. Intentional or accident?
This next little tidbit is for Stubbornstain.
Who is Alex? Do you mean Ben? And didn't you read the part where she said she couldn't hear him? That's why he isn't complaining any. No need to waste breath if she can't hear him.
Author's Response: I feel so stupid. Yes, it is Abby, I just forgot. Wow...I am stupid...
Date: January 31 2013 4:27 PM Title: Prologue
It's an interesting start. I like the fact that a prologue has been included because I feel the background information you have provided will be useful. I also like that this appears to be a second person story, although be careful of using the word "you" in the first few words of too many sentences and aim to have some variety in the description. Second person, I feel, is the hardest writing style to pull off effectively, though present continuous tense in any form is probably up there with it.
[Report This]Date: January 31 2013 1:53 AM Title: Prologue
Ok, official review. I love your stuff on here and writing.com. Favorited definitely. Fun stuff man, fun stuff...
Author's Response:
Thanks!
[Report This]Date: January 31 2013 1:53 AM Title: Prologue
Ok, official review. I love your stuff on here and writing.com. Favorited definitely. Fun stuff man, fun stuff...
[Report This]Date: January 31 2013 1:28 AM Title: Prologue
I'm definitely going to add chapters to "My Shrunken Life" on writing.com. And I know where to start too. Hint: Victoria might find herself minus one tiny guy, and Lisa plus one. It's gonna be fun!
Author's Response:
Go ahead, I would appreaciate the addittions!
[Report This]Date: January 29 2013 8:53 PM Title: Prologue
Hey, are there any ending for "My Shrunken Life" on writing.com? If not, I guess I might contribute a chapter...
Author's Response:
There's one ending, but you should feel free to add a chapter if you want! Out of the 60 chapters so far, only one is an ending so, you should easily find a place where you want to add!
[Report This]Date: January 29 2013 4:50 PM Title: Prologue
Ahh, a satisfying chapter. All I'm waiting for is the eventual realization that her 'slave' is actually Ben. I do wonder how she's going to react.
Keep on writing.
Author's Response: Well, you may be waiting for a while, but that moment will come. And when it does...
[Report This]Date: January 27 2013 1:55 PM Title: Prologue
That's what I was thinking deathshinigami. Just call her, Ben!
Date: January 26 2013 11:19 PM Title: Prologue
I'm going to give you my review. This is indeed a really good story for your first time. Mine wasn't nearly as good as this (I wrote it 4 years ago, give me credit.) I like the idea of her not recognizing him, and I also await the inevitable discovery of her when she sees it's him. My thing I have ti give you is that the 'beginner's element' is shown a lot in here, Not a bad thing, but it shows that you're using the standard fetish stuff. Mix it up! I like the back story you built up between the two though. That's what I look for in most stories. Keep it up.
Author's Response: Oh believe me...I definately plan on mixing it up...you'll see...(Evil laughter)
[Report This]Date: January 26 2013 7:14 PM Title: Prologue
Good first story. It's quickly becoming a favorite of mine. I can't wait to see if she recognizes him.
[Report This]Date: January 26 2013 2:23 PM Title: Prologue
You GOT IT! Really good stuff! First story? unbeleavable, I can't wait to see what her nice(Gentle) 'friend' doe's to Ben, or what happens when she realizes that it's really Ben? Keep it going, I Love IT!
[Report This]Date: January 26 2013 2:05 PM Title: Prologue
I never would of guessed this was your first story, it's pretty amazing! I like how shes angry about ben and takes it out on heer slave not knowing its actually him. I'm not to crazy over feet but this story is still pretty damn good. Can't wait to see what else you do with this!