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Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: January 02 2013 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 1

Your story looks ok so far, although it's a shame the chapter was so short. One thing I must mention is that in the summary it says "Shrink 1-12 Inches" but from the way you've described the scene and Jimmy it seems as if he is smaller than that. If there is going to be meaningful interaction in the story then ant size doesn't seem realistic and is better for an unaware story.

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