Date: November 27 2012 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 3
I'm not sure about the gym, but maybe for Halloween Ashley wears something revealling, and Randall, too dumbstruck to make any witty or critical comments, quietly admires her. She could be dressed as a vampire and uses that as an excuse to get intimate, because vampires like necks. Unless of course, you don't think the story is ready for such inimacy.
Author's Response:
There will be but they are at the stage where they don't want to admit anything. Also nice idea I'll keep that in mind!
Date: November 27 2012 3:17 PM Title: Chapter 3
Randall is way to rude!! Give him manners and can Ashley grow more or Randall shrinks down. Maybe 2 feet and Ashley 12? That could work. But besides that good job. I give it a 6.5 so far
Author's Response:
First off thanks for reading the story. Unfortunatly Randall won't be shrinking but Ashley still has a little bit of growing to do, but that would be in the future. If I did grow Ashley she wouldn't grow taller than 9'2". Randall is mostly a caring person but I can see how he comes off as rude, but you gotta think that he has spent most of his life being picked on by people so he tends to hate situations that make fun of his size or when someone is being bullied. Also the next chapter will be from Ashley's prospective and I will mature her character but there is an event that will lead to that. Anyway keep reading and see how this story progesses!