Date: November 27 2012 5:19 PM Title: Chapter 2
I really like this story. Could do with more description in place, but for the most part I think your writing is decent. Giantessworld has tip for aspiring authors such as yourself in the "Writing Tools" section of the site.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your response and I will try to work on that.
[Report This]Date: November 27 2012 9:20 AM Title: Chapter 2
Really cool story. An I'm looking forward to more if you choose to write more.
aaron
Author's Response:
I'm really sorry Aaron, but when I created this story I had came up with a list of characters before hand and had events that I wanted to play out. Unfortunatly one of the characters name is Aaron also so I hope that you don't get upset with the character. Anyways thanks for reading this so far.
[Report This]Date: November 27 2012 6:23 AM Title: Chapter 2
It is a very sweet and nice start to the story. I like both of the characters so far and how shy and timid Ashley is. I will look forward to reading more.
In my opinion you seem like you are doing a nice job on the story. Sorry thats all i think of to say.
Author's Response:
Thanks, I will mature the character further but it will take some time. For Randall I wanted someone who doesn't let his size get to him but does see the limits of what he can do. Ashley on the other hand will mature further but I wanted her to be someone that Randall can rely on while still treating him as an equal which many people don't. Anyways thanks and continue reading!