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Reviewer: Dudemanguy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 26 2012 11:52 PM Title: Chapter 3

Hmm, Miranda likes him but Julissa doesn't? And the plot thickens ever so more.

Reviewer: timescribe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 02 2012 7:10 PM Title: Chapter 3

"They just stare at me and lick thier lips."

 

I can just picture it. Wow!

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: September 29 2012 7:00 AM Title: Chapter 3

I like the plot twist. I wonder if Melony knows who took him. A fight maybe? The next chapter seems intruiging so I will continue onwards.

Reviewer: kyary Signed [Report This]
Date: September 28 2012 12:15 AM Title: Chapter 3

I like the new chapter. But one thing: you never describe how Miranda looks? She's a new character but you just describe her as the protagonist's crush. You describe the looks of the other two girls, but not her. Just a little nitpick you might have missed. Keep going, I think you're improving.



Author's Response: Thanks, I fixed it and sorry this chapter was short, I had little time to post it, but I'm working on ch.4. This is my third most popular story. Hopefull, it gets the "Story of the Moment" box. Thingy. -Julian

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