Date: March 24 2014 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
Make another one except make it so girl shrinks boy on the boys permission and takes him home plays gentely with him and if you didn't have mouth play in this or body exploration do it in this one plz
Author's Response: I'm back and I have an idea for a story for you. A little short story, just while I work on my other ones. For those others reading this, I will continue Jarret Johnson. But for the meantime, I have another story for all you to read. Uhpoop, would you mind if I have a bit of violence in this story? It will be as you requested, with the mouth play and body exploration, but I have a solid idea for this story. I'll be publishing it very soon, so comment any specific requests for this story. Thank you for your time.
-Julian
[Report This]Date: December 26 2012 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 1
That was one of the most sudden shrinkages ever. Of all time. But I like the story so far. Don't know why I waited to read this. but still, no sympathy from Melony. A typical girl torture of shrunken men.
[Report This]Date: October 19 2012 11:54 PM Title: Chapter 1
lol combining the two different stories. Im looking forward to their meeting. good surprise I give u that.
[Report This]Date: October 02 2012 7:07 PM Title: Chapter 1
Good position. I wouldn't need to be threatened with punishment to sleep there. LOL.
Date: September 29 2012 6:50 AM Title: Chapter 1
It's an interesting start, and although I feel events are moving too quickly I have a feeling will enjoy this story anyway.
Date: September 26 2012 11:44 PM Title: Chapter 1
I think this story has potential, and is pretty good so far. One thing I like is that you seem to have a lot of different ideas for interactions (for example, when her tear hits him. there are a million stories about feet or breasts, but tears are a liquid i've almost never seen used).
I wish you'd linger a little longer on things though. Like take just a few more sentences to describe some of the "scenes". It's important in a story like this.
Also, when you say you're doing a chapter for each day with a girl, does that mean Melony will be the subject for the next 5-6 chapters before another girl, who then takes 7 chapters? I don't want to say it's a bad idea, but you might want to think about bringing in the other girls faster. And then maybe having some kind of conflict between them based on their different feelings for the shrunken boy.
I don't wanna be too negative on it. The interactions between the characters are pretty cute and should get better as the story continues.
I mean, do whatever you want. Just my thoughts. I'm still starting out as a gts writer too so I wanted to say a few stray observations.
Author's Response: The reason I started on here and started making stories was because many of the stories I've read here inspired me to write. My first stories had many flaws and were too fast, so I took the comments all together, put them in my thoughts, and BAM! This story came out. P.s. Thanks for reading and giving me your thoughts.
Author's Response: The reason I started on here and started making stories was because many of the stories I've read here inspired me to write. My first stories had many flaws and were too fast, so I took the comments all together, put them in my thoughts, and BAM! This story came out. P.s. Thanks for reading and giving me your thoughts.
Date: September 26 2012 6:47 PM Title: Chapter 1
Hey can u pick a story and stay with it?
Author's Response: Sure, I am planning on making a chapter for each day he spends with a girl. I am going to stop production on all other stories and focus on this one. Btw, thanks ALL of you for your feed back. My past stories were lame but, I want to make this one a story you guus won't forget. P.s. If I can, I will post a chapter every day.
P.p.s This story was based of my life. The people and thier feelings about me is.true.
Author's Response: Sure, I am planning on making a chapter for each day he spends with a girl. I am going to stop production on all other stories and focus on this one. Btw, thanks ALL of you for your feed back. My past stories were lame but, I want to make this one a story you guus won't forget. P.s. If I can, I will post a chapter every day.
P.p.s This story was based of my life. The people and thier feelings about me is true. Everything is real. (except the shrinking.)
[Report This]Date: September 26 2012 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 1
Don't feel too bad, Julian. No other guy, this side of Richard Simmons, would try to run away, either!
Author's Response: :D
[Report This]Date: September 26 2012 6:26 AM Title: Chapter 1
Aaaw. Isn't that cute? She HAS a soul! Wow. That was a HUGE plot twist. I seriously did not see that coming.
Author's Response: Haha, lol. Yep, she isn't THAT heart-less
[Report This]Date: September 26 2012 1:45 AM Title: Chapter 1
not bad at all. Im use to your stories going by a little faster than others. you are the type of author who likes to get straight to the action. u seem to like names that start with J (My name starts with a J) I like that u have so many different ideas in your head. Try not to forget about your other stories! :) (FEED ME MORE!)
Author's Response: Yeah, I figured that. I am getting better at writing, thanks to your comments. My real name is Julian. I'm really happy because this is my first story that has all 5 starts from the reviewers. -Julian