Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: May 06 2014 12:56 AM Title: Chapter 1

I really like this story, and it's fairly unique, so it's a shame about the errors I found.

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opened her I slightly.

You mean: eye

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or some highly complicated thing that fairy creature tend to do. 

You mean: creatures

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 its how we now how to trust another

You mean: know

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he leave such a beautiful women

There's only one female so you mean: women. If there was more than one then you'd remove the "a".

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 had the face of an angle

You mean: angel

An angle is something you use a protractor to measure.

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and hide from there terrible nature, 

You mean:

and hid from their terrible nature, 

"There" is used when you mean "over there", such as when you're giving directions.