Date: November 12 2011 10:48 AM Title: Sanity Questions
So far I have really enjoyed this story. It is very well-done.
In response to your comments preceding the chapter, you are right, no decent human being would do such a thing. There are plenty of decent human beings in the world who would do the right thing. Sadly enough, there are plenty who would not. I think it is a reality of the human condition. Unfortunately there are those who seek to profit, gain, or simply derive pleasure from the suffering of those around them. I could elaborate but it is too philosophical a discussion for a review.
Meanwhile the story continues to draw me in. One thing I noticed though is that you have referred to Tiffany's blonde hair a couple times but at one point you say that "the brunette sat on the couch..." An easy fix.
Author's Response: Thanks for your comments, this is a pretty deepe subject, I agree, maybe not something for a review...lol. Glad you enjoy the story, your comments are always appreciated.
Date: July 01 2011 8:24 AM Title: Sanity Questions
Really like where this is heading. Can't wait to read more.
[Report This]Date: June 30 2011 9:49 PM Title: Sanity Questions
I agree with your soap boxing. This is a great way to keep realism into the story (well, as real as it can be anyway). Going from here, anything is possible.
[Report This]Date: June 30 2011 7:10 PM Title: Sanity Questions
I'm liking this, particularly your first 4 chapters; you as an author are kind of single-handedly proving to me that I am capable of enjoying micro voyeur. And I do agree about the issue involved in "aware" stories; you have a realism hurdle to cross when a loved one of the shrinkies decides to become a mindless slave driver. I myself find this to be a tough one to deal with. From this 5th chapter, it seems like your character isn't quite there yet, as she thinks she's crazy, at least for now; personally, I'd say try and leave it at that, you could very easily get some good meat and potatoes out of the story simply on the sister being like "well, it's not real, so why not?". Wow, this was a long comment, haha. Anyway good job.
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot man. I heavily debated even including a non-voyeur part of the story, but I didn't want it to become a re-hashing of everything else I've done. I think that is my plan, though, at least for now, to keep Tiffany is a blissful "they aren't real, therefore I don't care" state of mind. I think it's the closest thing to realism you can find without beginning to violently twist the fabric of the human psyche to gross proportions of fantasy. Glad youre enjoying it!