[Report This]Date: May 13 2011 5:18 AM Title: Chapter 1
Great story so far! Can I request to have a bit of sock and nylon action thrown in at some point? Thanks again!!
[Report This]Date: May 12 2011 5:33 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is a great story. Currently im on chapter 5 and im loving the direction this story is taking. My only criticism is how vanessa is referred to as "mom" and how he thinks of her as his mom. It may only be me but incest flashes through my mind whenever it says mom. Other than that, excellent story and I like forward to more additions.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the great ratings, nexela!
Nope, that is exactly what I want you to be thinking. I have them refer to each other that way so that the reader will think of them as being mother and son, all the while telling them early in the story that they aren't related. Kind of like when a girl will call her man "Daddy". I just find the incest theme gives my story a little more emotion.
And the next chapters are on their way, time's just becoming a scarcity for me currently.
Date: May 11 2011 12:16 AM Title: Chapter 1
You could tell by the end of chapter 1 that this was going to be a great story. Keep up the good work.
[Report This]Date: May 10 2011 11:31 AM Title: Chapter 1
Very nice story indeed perfect build up and what can i say keep up the good work....
[Report This]Date: May 10 2011 11:03 AM Title: Chapter 1
You're an excellent writer and continouly produce tantalizing scenes of mother/son naughtiness. I like how she simply dominates him with her maternal body and power. Personally, I'd love to see her gently place him between her toes and slowly pump him dry. Also, do you plan to have her turn a bit "evil," or be gentle the whole way? Thanks for such a great story; you can tell you've taken your time!
Author's Response:
I have thought about turning her evil, and I tried it for a while, but I abandoned that. It turned out not to be as believable as I would have liked. So I will probably save that idea for another story.
Rest assured though, there are some parts coming up that I'm working on now that I think you will enjoy.
Date: May 09 2011 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is great! Hope you think about updating it regularly, because its one of those few stories that actually have well-developed characters and a plot! Keep at it I'll be checking constantly!
Date: May 09 2011 10:31 AM Title: Chapter 1
@aaron
Thx for the review. And yeah they were bare, I see I didn't mention it. Glad you caught it though. Won't happen again haha.
[Report This]Date: May 09 2011 10:04 AM Title: Chapter 1
really nice chapter.
thought it was about his stepmom though?
well now its on to the next chapter.
aaron
Date: May 09 2011 9:55 AM Title: Chapter 1
Livenindeath, your comment kinda put the last piece of the puzzle in for me. I hadn't found a model yet to base Vanessa off of, which is why I haven't put as much descriptive info in for her, but I think C.H. fits the bill perfectly.
Date: May 09 2011 8:00 AM Title: Chapter 1
Nice story, well written, I love the premise. Keep going with this gem if you please. P.S. I had christina hendricks in my head during this whole story with her ample chest.