Date: November 30 2010 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh and B+ on the happy ending. The reason for the grade is because the happy ending was pretty predictable once Darius set up Nikki with Rodrick and then Luther came in and other stuff...still. A good ending nonetheless.
Author's Response: Thanks, the ending I too feared was a litte too predictable...There were 3 possible endings I had in mind, but this is the one that I felt I really wanted in the end for my characters lol...But thanks for the review ^^ I am glad you liked it.
Date: November 30 2010 4:39 PM Title: Chapter 1
I like it. I mean dude it was a well tell story from the start. At first I couldn't tell who was wrong and who was right between Brooke and Darius but as the tale unraveled it was better than I predicted. I gotta give it to Darius who was one heck of a lucky guy even though times were tough. Drawing four women to him, getting some loving by two of them and then setting three of them with their true loves. Never seen a male character who can do that and have a wicked background story. Again, awesome story. My only complaint was that it seemed the ending was a little rushed. BUT! With the suspense and the wrong doings of the queen made up for that once she had fallen. So...good job mate and can't wait to read another of your stories. I might be doing a little gentle story myself soon. =D
Date: November 26 2010 10:06 AM Title: Chapter 1
Thanks for the comments, and for those wondering when the next chapters might come up well, it might be a bit. I am currently writing and adding it to deviant art before adding it here, it is up to chapter 17. http://ginbug.deviantart.com/gallery/
Date: November 24 2010 6:20 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great story so far. I love Brooke's teasing personality and the fantasy theme. Definitely a good twist at the end of Chapter 2 as well.
[Report This]Date: November 17 2010 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is awesome. Great twist.