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Reviewer: Stylesrj Signed [Report This]
Date: March 21 2010 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 3

Chapters 3 and 4 need apragraphing.

Author's Response: your right. Went and fixed the spacing.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 20 2010 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 3

The dialogue and narrative need lots of separating. Other than that? I like what I've read so far.

Off to chapter 4!

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