[Report This]Date: March 28 2024 6:44 PM Title: Shana Day After - Part 2
This was a fantastic way to bring home Shana's character development!
To see her reach this touching, emotional peak, especially after how crude and mean she appeared to be when we first met her, is incredibly satisfying. It was particularly meaningful near the end, when she gave up on preserving that hard shell she has been hiding behind all this time and finally just gave in to her true feelings. I'm guessing that this emotional release will affect the way she treats the tinies as well, even if she still pretends to not care for the sake of appearances.
Maya's awkwardness here was a nice touch, and it really let us know how nervous she was to hear Shana's answer to her question before she even asked it. Stuff like that conveys a vulnerability that makes her pretty relatable. And given the younger sister's previous interpretation of the people in her life and Shana's efforts to toughen her up, it's understandable that she wouldn't be sure that Shana loves her, even after the revelations of the last couple chapters
Also, it's great how she has started referring to Shana as Big Sis these last two chapters, given Maya's previous thoughts on her relationship with Shana. And between this and that vulnerability I mentioned above, it helps Maya "look" the part of the younger sister as well.
I did find it sad that Maya emphasized that she was a step sister, though. Whereas before she was trying to deny her relation to Shana, now the fact that they aren't blood sisters (I couldn't remember if they shared a father or if Maya was around before her mother married Shana's dad) hurts her. She wants to be a "real" sister to Shana. For Shana's part, it wasn't stated directly, but with everything she has said in the last three chapters, it's pretty clear that she doesn't make that distinction. Maya is her sister, simple as that.
And, of course, Emily and Jane show up at the end to add to the cuteness of the chapter. It's always good to see those two together, although I'm still left wondering what exactly Emily had to talk about with Jane. I'm guessing we might find out a little more about that in the next chapter or so.
These last three chapters have been really great, even despite not having much "fetishy" content in them. I love the character development and work you put into them, and the writing and story has been good enough that I haven't really noticed the break we've mostly taken from size-related content (we've seen some light interaction with Jane and gotten some background on the Little Folk, so you've kept some balance there). It's a testament to your storytelling that this story on a fetish site has remained interesting while focusing so heavily on things other than said fetish, especially since, by your own admission, this was at one point supposed to be just a two-chapter story.
I look forward to seeing where you take things next!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review and sorry that it took me so long to respond!
I'm glad you enjoyed seeing Maya and Shana reunited as sisters.
I wanted to make this moment heartfelt and touching, adding my usual dose of comedy to keep it from being too poignant. I'm glad it turned out well.
The reason Maya emphasized the term 'stepsister' was because, as she says, the only people who care about her are those who have no moral or familial obligation to do so.
Emily is a complete outsider, while Shana, despite having the same father, has basically been thrown out of the family, so she would have every right to hate her for that, which is actually what she used to think.
All of this while her parents, the ones who are supposed to be taking care of her, are absent for the most part.
As far as the fetishism goes, that's something I'm having a hard time incorporating outside of the chapters that focus on Suki, given the way I've structured the story.
Shana has no interest in interacting with the little folks, while Emily and Maya would find it dehumanizing and cruel and would never willingly participate.
The only one who could would be Liliana, but she's just Shana's acquaintance in this story, and writing something fetishistically focused on her would have to exclude Shana's presence and would be a side story. And at the moment I'm more interested in finishing the main story.
I'm in the process of finishing the next chapter, and it should be ready in the next few days or so.
Until then, thanks again for the review!