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Reviewer: SirFarty Signed [Report This]
Date: January 11 2023 6:04 PM Title: Chapter 1

Please space the paragraphs.


Otherwise, good.

Reviewer: Zaximus Signed [Report This]
Date: January 07 2023 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 1

Great concept to open up the year. I very much enjoyed the simple premise of "study buddy group project with a giga giant". Pretty inventive the way you bring it out. Immediately caught my attention and held it throughout the story.

I admit I'm disappointed to see another blond giantess. Figured from the description of a farm girl with freckles she may have been better cast as a redhead or something else but that's more a personal preference than a true criticism. Just too many blond giantess around. 

For English not being your first language this was well written and well presented. Formatting was good, didn't see many errors so great job there! 

Some pretty solid worldbuilding. Standard stuff, nothing to out of the ordinary but a good primer for the world you're taking us too. It would be interesting to see how some populations fair within this setting. It seems that Giants would be the dominant species so how do country and domain borders function between Norms, stuff like that.

Only real thing I can offer is descriptions. Descriptions make or break giantess stories and I think adding even more detail to the consequences of Miriam's actions would benefit the story tremendously. That's not to say you don't have some good details already. There were some pretty vivid scenes and images in here. I think if you just built on those more with some more details describing how the Norms are impacted or what the destruction or how things are being destroyed by various body parts, what have you look like you could bring them to life that much better. You had some pretty good descriptions of her size in this, which I appreciated. Many writers don't really illustrate the size difference very clearly so it was good to see it represented here.

Other than that, solid start to what I hope will be an ongoing series. Excited to see what comes next! :D



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your review. I'm very happy to hear that you enjoyed the premise.


Making Miriam blonde was kind of a spur-in-the-moment decision. When I imagined her for the first time she just seemed blonde to me, which is weird because normally I don't particularly favor blondes myself, so I defintely understand where you're coming from.


I do have some notes for one or two other stories that'll flesh the world more out. Personally I love NWO stories and the interactions they bring, so I plan on adding to this setting.


Despriptions is something I've definitely noticed myself too. They really are what makes a story stand out.

Not being descriptive enough is actually one of the irks I had with the story before I posted it, so it certainly will be an area where I'll strive to improve.


This story was initially intended as a One-Shot, but I do have some notes for more interactions between Justin and Miriam, as well as the world around them. So perhaps there will be another chapter to this story somewhere in the future.


Again, thank you for leaving a review! 

Reviewer: GentleFan Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 07 2023 6:43 AM Title: Chapter 1

Great start for your first story. Wishing Justin luck!



Author's Response:

Thanks! And I'm sure Justin will be fine. I mean, what's the worst that could happen, eh?

Reviewer: WorldsBiggestOOPSfan Signed [Report This]
Date: January 07 2023 1:25 AM Title: Chapter 1

Wow this was refreshing and well written! English may be your second language but you’d never know it!


please continue! I’d love to see more interaction like this!



Author's Response:

Thank you! I'm very glad to hear that you found the setting refreshing!

I didn't initially plan on it, but I may add another chapter in sometime in the future. I think I'm not quite ready yet to say goodbye to Justin and Miriam ;)

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