As an author, I'm always looking to improve my prose, so feel free to give me your thoughts on something. Reviews and comments are always welcomed, and I definitely do look them over and consider them.
My favorite stuff is feet, mature, insertion, maternalistic, and stuff of that nature. It's what I like so its what I'm looking to deliver on. I've never been much into vore, so you probably won't see much of that. Sorry!
It seems I always give my work an X rating, because I hate rating systems and would rather just play it safe.
Elise must cope when her boyfriend Nick, a lifelong giantess fetishist, suddenly finds himself shrunken.
-"like a flying skyscraper or something like that."
Nice imagery!
This story is great, anyone reading the reviews should read this story.
Please update soon!
The imagery and description in this is so well done, I seriously commend you for making an intelligent and well written story. The little details, imagery, description, use of all senses, humor, characterization... you've put effort into this, and it shows. You've turned a mundane car ride into an "experience" and that's truly what this genre can do.
I am impressed with your characterization and realistic approach. Additionally, you have added an element of humor that is very entertaining by "critiquing" the GTS genre's formulaic nature. I like originality, and you have delivered. Well done!
Thank you very kindly! I think there's nothing wrong with playing on an inherently comical situation or accenting the tension that way.
Love your writing- funny, smart, and entertaining! Thanks for this awesome story!
A quick-moving story about an unaware giantess mom.
This is an outstanding story. Well done.
You can never have enough Garganta. Cool concept for a story : )
Author's Response: Thank you! For more info on the other heroes and villains to be eventually mentioned, herein, try the following websites. "Appendix to the Unofficial Handbook Of The Marvel Universe (UHOTMU)" by Jeff "Snood" Christiansen.
And, Loki of Midgaard's "International Catalogue of Superheroes." For those, like me, who embrace their inner fanboy.
haha... he said broadzilla
Author's Response: Maybe they should form a new athletic organization: the Wrestling Titans Federation (WTF)
A young man and his stepmom get to know more about each other after an unfortunate accident.
I like your style of writing, and this is a very good first story! It's nice that your sentences are grammatically correct and free of spelling errors.
As a pointer, you do want to have these opening chapters provide motivation and characterization for your upcoming climax. It sets the stage, so to speak. They might be a little more boring to write, but the readers truly appreciate it, trust me!
Keep up the good work!
This epilogue chapter does the story a bit more justice, and ends the story well. I'll be looking out for anything new you create in the future.
A solid end to a great story, even if it was a bit rushed. It definitely left the readers wanting more. I'm looking forward to other projects you might be working on in the future!
Thank you for the five stars, even though I believe it didn't deserve it. I was unhappy with how it ended myself, so I'm writing an extended chapter. This story isn't done just yet.
We're starting to see the buildup of a conflict, which makes this really interesting! You've got good thorough physical despcrition and creative situations. Make use of that 3rd person to really let us get into the minds of your characters, that helps build tension!
You're doing great, and there are a lot of requests for things. Personally, I'd just really like to read what you yourself are thinking of. Also, the regular updates are great.
Thank you for the excellent reviews.
I am glad you're enjoying the story so far. I've read "A Chance with a Cougar" countless times, and enjoyed it immensely, and it influenced the work I did in this story. I do plan on putting my thoughts on the story in the final chapter, so stay tuned for that. Time was a scarcity over the weekend, but I count on spending a little more time this week finishing up the rest of the story.
What happens when my girlfriend finds out about my fetish......and what she does about it.
UPDATE: I am constantly rewriting and editing my current chapters as I figure out better ways to express certain things and what I would need to add in to have things make more sense.
This is a pretty decent start with some real potential, and I totally encourage you to continue. It's nice to see some writing in the first person (not as easy as some think). For constructive criticism, I would encourage you to take more time in developing the setting and characters. Instead of stating "My girlfriend is drop dead gorgeous", try using a scene to describe how she's gorgeous, without necessarily stating it.
Don't be afraid to use extra details, describing the scenes as you go. What does Jeff see, taste, hear, smell, feel as all this is happening? What emotions are running through his head from all this? Readers love this sort of stuff, and I have a feeling you'll be able to deliver.
Sweet, Thank you. I will definitely start using more detail for my next chapters.
An adventurous teen who just happens to be five inches tall has been stuck in homeschool all his life. When he finally enters public high school and a new world of friends, bullies, and cliques, he quickly discovers challenges even bigger than he could've imagined.
Kind of makes you wonder what this girl's problem is.
Good chapter.
i'm sure if peter wasn't fictional, he'd be wondering the very same thing
I like the development of the story and the characters a lot so far, and I think the school setting offers a lot of potential. I'll keep reading.
Good job.
thanks for the review, littlemac
James' wife has a special surprise for his birthday, and ends up shrinking him to have him live out his fantasy and then return to normal size as a gift. Will things go as planned, or will something go terribly wrong?
This is a good first story. My suggestion would be to work on establishing each person's character. The idea is that the reader should arrive at a conclusion without the author needing to spell it out. The reader should say "Oh yeah, I could see him/her doing that." This will make your plot and characters actions much stronger and more significant :)
A teenager has been shrunk by his sadistic mother and he has to find a way to return to his normal height
A decent start. I particularly liked the first chapter. You have good vocabulary and description. You need to watch your spelling and seperate your paragraphs though- in the second chapter. It seems arbitrary, but trust me, it makes for a much more readable story. Keep at it.