Penname: DarkStarGoddess [Contact] Real name: Dark Star
Member Since: October 02 2018
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Summary:

The MAJOR/minor crossover special done to it's completion.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Adult 30-39, BBW, Mature (40-49), Gentle, Giant, Muscle, New World Order
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: FM/f
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 36645 Read Count: 40505
[Report This] Published: December 19 2017 Updated: February 11 2019
Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: December 18 2018 Title: Chapter 1: MAJOR/minor SPECIAL: Don't Call my Name

I wish this website had a better communication feature... oh well another review it is. X3  The numbers might help generate interest if nothing else.

 

I figured you were being pessimistic to shield yourself, honestly I do the same thing when I post a chapter every 1-2 years so I totally get you (but I will be honest even if I am my own worst critic the criticism can still sting), but I still wanted to spread some holiday cheer just in case, since again your recent stories have brought me a lot of happiness in reading them and playing with the ideas presented.

 

Oh and not terribly important, but yeah I meant BIG FEMALE little male by F/m... though honestly I was asking if this story contained much BIG FEMALE LITTLE MALE because......... well I do not dislike F/m, but F/f is my preferred cup of tea (more relatable for me), and when I thought this story was going in a more F/m direction I ADMITTEDLY GOT A LITTLE HUFFY and did not read... none of this is important, I was more explaining why I was not able to actually review this story, because I have not read it YET for.... weird reasons of mine as stated above. X3

 

PERSONALLY I am looking forward to any F/f stories you work on, however I would never tell you to do that; you need to write what you want to write, writing for other's peoples tastes can... lead to issues, I have found.  If your vision is F/m then so be it. :3

 

I think your proposed idea is interesting though; I get the message might not be good (however you could try to write it so it has a better message... or have them not end up together, or bring in a third party), but I also love the size difference mixed in with relationship drama... I'd probably read it.

 

No idea if I made any sense I do not know, I have a bad habit of coming to this website REALLY LATE and being a bit fuzzy headed.  Either way you rock and your writing rocks I just want you to know it is enjoyed and appreciated. :3

Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: December 17 2018 Title: Chapter 1: MAJOR/minor SPECIAL: Don't Call my Name

I notice a lack of reviews on recent chapters and some pessimism, so I feel like now might be a nice time to add some encouraging words.  ...However I have not read much of this story recently, I should and I intend to but I have not read the story it is corssing over with and well... you know thinking, I am probably off.

 

I put this story down because I sensed it might go into a more F/m direction (not entirely but some) from wherever I left off, and noticing that the story it is crossing over with is tagged F/m I was just sort of like... eh, I'll see it later.  But I am JUST NOW THINKING I might have written the story prematurely; how much F/m is in this anyways (besides probs next to none like in your other recent stories).

 

Anyways, the reason I decided to write a little something was just to bolster your spirits a little by sharing that your last two stories, Small and MAJOR/minor, more or less were what got me coming back to this site, and enjoying size fiction at all. Such quality F/f is hard to find here (hell F/f and quality by themselves can be hard to find), so your stories got to me and made me decide to not abandon this place, and finally make an account, which led me to reading a number of other good stories.  I love your ideas for interactions and power dynamics and they gel so much with what I enjoy writing as well, it's made me want to write more myself (... have not done a lot of that between 2 jobs and classes, but sometime).

 

So even though if it seems like no one is listening, you at least have someone watching your activity and reading... most things... I will probably go back and give this story another go honestly.  I also look forward to whatever else you put out.

 

-DSG



Author's Response:

Well first of all I'd like to give a most sincere thank you for your kind words! Roadhog thumbs up emote for you!

Secondly I'm just a pessimist by nature when it comes to the things I create in both writing and drawing. It's how I cope with criticism. Nothing hurts when you are your worst critic. Maybe not the best approach but it's what I got. Also I do try to be a little jovial about it in an attempt a dry humor.

I do know people read my stories. There's some nice little numbers next to the read count that go up a bit when I upload chapters although maybe not as much as they used to, but hey that's the grind! I do this for fun and practice as I work on my true passion of cramming as much g/t stuff possible in a story driven sci-fantasy webcomic that may or may not happen!!

As far as F/m subject matter. I do write stuff like that it's just not how this story shook out too much because the main character's a girl. I also have ideas for more naughty stories too but I'm really bad at writing that and I don't like having too many stories going at once since that's how MrSirk screwed up. Don't read his stories!

I do have this idea for a small guy getting forcefully seduced into a relationship by a larger than life female bully maybe even in the MAJOR/minor world cause I like that size difference. Something kind of like GHX. It would be a little darker though cause it would deal with different forms of abuse and control and maybe wouldn't be the best message overall since the pair would end up together in the end. Just thinking about it gives me ideas. Maybe I'll write that story someday...someday.

I assume F/m means big FEMALE/little male but I'm not sure..I hope this answers your questions.

Endless by Curse Crazy Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 110]
Summary: Past Featured Story

A creepy college student uncovers a book of curses, and the depths of her wild personality come to life. By conducting a ritual to shrink people, she is able to hold in her hands the target of her obsessed affections, along with other victims that cross her hexed path.

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Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Adult 30-39, Crush, Entrapment, Fantasy, Humiliation, Lesbians, Slow Size Change, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 168220 Read Count: 248924
[Report This] Published: June 25 2018 Updated: May 02 2019
Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: November 05 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

So I want to start off by saying that this is an excelently written story; you manage to be detailed but without letting the story get bogged down.  The pacing of each chapter is mighty fast for their length, and the story really has me invested in the fate of these characters.  It's also just really refreshing to see a story that works well as an actual story and not just fetish material; it feels like an actual thriller honestly.

However things are beginning to feel a tad soap-opera-y after this chapter.  Honestly I knew how this chapter was going to end but I kept wishing Mel would have an actual threat to contend with (though I also like cat and mouse crime stories), but it's beginning to feel like the tired old story of the characters never getting a break or a win.  It makes reading less enjoyable; Chapter 12 was a well written chapter, but when the characters we want to root for keep losing you begin to expect that things will not go their way.  It made the twist a bit eye-rolling.  I feel like a better balance of giving victories to each side, even small victories for our small girls, would make the story less predictable and more engaging.

Not that I want to tell you how to write you story, you should write what you want, I'm just giving you my impressions as a reader in case you are interested in that.  I like the story a lot it is just beginning to become predictable.

But overall I like the story a lot and I want to support any author who writes awesome F/f content because there is not enough of that in the world!  I look forward to reading the next chapter.

On one last night... I know the story is all dark and serious, but for how much Mel is in love with Adrian we really do not get much, like, affection and love for Adrian... is that intentional?  In some ways not seeing it fits the story... but as a lover of F/f dub-con as fuffing rare as the genre is... just had to ask, heh.

Keep up the good work!



Author's Response:

This! This is a good review! That's what I'm talking about.

It's music to my ears to hear folks enjoying Endless as something more than wank material. That's really what I wanted, a giantess story that captured both the eroticism and horror that comes with these kinds of situations. Crafted to my personal tastes, of course! I sometimes wonder if the elements that I find cute in this story are elements people are more spooked by, haha.

I understand your issue with Melanie not having a real opposition. She seems unstoppable, doesn't she? It can be discouraging to see these innocent people be knocked down, over and over. However, I think discouragement and degrade are a critical theme to this story. Melanie is oppressive and cruel, and she has all the chips on her side of the table. She controls the world of these people and she's savoring every second of it. Narratively, it would feel better to have some hope for our heroes -- a fighting chance. Unfortunately, Melanie really is that unstoppable. When everything looks like it could finally work out for Adrian and the others... it's depressing, isn't it? Everytime, there's nothing they can do. She either has something figured out, or a miracle happens for Melanie. The atmosphere of this story, truly, is despairing.

Perhaps that's what I want to ask from my readers. How long can something like this go on? Doesn't it stop? It's a question I like to see my readers thinking.

I'm glad I can bring some exciting F/f content to the site as well! It is unfortunate, however, that the theme of this story doesn't have a lot of room for the lovey affection parts that you (and I) crave. I actually do argue about where to include the softer scenes, but a lot of those ideas take a back seat as I try to focus more on the thrilling adventure parts. And, as the story has picked up pace, it's been hard to slow down and show more sincere moments. But with that said, I think Melanie's concept of affection is abstract. She really does love Adrian, in her own way. She'd kill for her! That much can be said, right? Melanie is a dark person and her one-track love is equally as dark.

Thank you again for this review, and thank you for reading! I really appreciate this critical input!

Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: November 09 2018 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter Thirteen

I'm glad you liked my first review!  Because I feel I will have to be a little more negative with this one.  One review already mentioned the lack of certain tags which... I suppose that is hard to say either way, but I definitely felt like I was reading a different sort of story than what I signed up for originally.

 

But mostly I need to go back to what I mentioned about having victories for the small characters.  I get what you are going for, a well of despair and a dark story, but I think this chapter took it to a worse degree: put bluntly Candi was killed off so fast it feels like she had no point being in the story, and it feels like my time was a bit wasted.  Like you threw the character away so quickly, it makes her buildup as an actual threat, or just anything, feel even more pointless.  Erin was also not really used much at all during her time as a small girl; she spent most of her chapters tied up and largely speechless only to become a plot device that gets discarded in this chapter.  We lost two really interesting characters and I do not really see what for... to make us hate Mel?  We already do, she's pretty insufferable.  It just makes me as a reader wonder why I got invested in these characters if they could be expended so easily without really doing much or using their interesting traits.

 

Really this chapter does not move the story forward much at all, and it makes the deaths in this chapter feel unearned and cheap.  The chapter just seems to want to revel in how evil Mel is, which I as a reader do not need because we already have plenty of that.  The story felt like it took a backseat here, especially with the more sexual/fetish material in the chapter.

 

The only bit that really felt like like it progressed the plot to an extent was the choice at the end, though again it felt unearned, darkered than what the story originally proposed, and... I know you said she has a weird way of showing affection and all, but it feels like she hates Adrian and is trying to torment her.  Like, there's being tone deaf, and there's forcing your crush to kill someone.  It just feels so incongruent with how we are told Mel feels for her.

 

Also... why didn't Adrian threaten to kill herself?  She has like the ultimate bargaining chip in her hand... if Mel really feels as she does threats of self harm should have at least like... come up, but maybe that is just me.

 

You wwanted to see how long readers would think this could go on for, but as generous of a goddess as I am it's more how long it can go for before I lose interest.  Having a dark, depressing story is fine if it is what you want, but it is not always what someone wants to read.  It's kind of like an art film; if you have your vision then that is important, but intentionally unbalanced storytelling may alienate audiences.

 

Sorry if I seem a tad harsh, it's not to be mean; honestly if I do not like a story I simply do not review it, but it's because this one is so well written and has so much potential, and has been pretty good minus some frustrations, that I want to speak my mind on it.  I also do not think you should change your vision to suit anyone else, I have tried that and it leads to issues, BUT I want you to know my thoughts as a reader in case you are interested in them.  Also I might not be the exact target because I am not reading this story for sexual fulfillment like AT ALL, I'm reading almost purely for the narraive (and hopes of F/f affection), so I understand my opinions might be different.

 

On the good side the chapter was well written and you avoided a lot of cliches with writing the vore segment which is good for you and other readers.  I thought the little bit with Mel's nose was a neat touch too.

 

I look forward to seeing what happens next!  Shrinking a detective should have some massive reprecussions that should be interesting to see, and seems like we will be seeing some more character develoment for Adrian, should be a good read!



Author's Response:

I'm always down for the more critical reviews! It's like I get to open up my readers' brains and get to see what's going on...

I apologize that the turn this story has taken is not to your liking. I do sympathize to an extent, I don't think the average giantess story keeps itself this thematically attached to despair. However, my story is more than just an appeal to a giantess infatuation. It's a direct appeal as well to yandere and that entire aesthetic. A crazy girl that just can't be stopped, an obsessed maniac that only seems to be spiraling into darkness. To a reader like yourself, it may seem that I'm just dragging on with this detail, that Melanie is "very evil." However, that is very much the exact purpose of this story. The charm of Melanie is that she doesn't stop, and even when you think you understand her limits, she will gleefully surpass that expectation.

This is why I killed Erin and Candi. The expectation is that they must be fairly safe, for so many reasons. They're the newest characters of the cast, Erin's curse became unique, and Candi has a special background. These details separate them from the others, who a reader would think is closer to an expiration date. Disobeying those expectations is exactly what I wanted. To Melanie, these people are not "characters" that serve her a narrative purpose. These two especially were enemies, threats to her one way or another, and she had no mercy in regards to disposing of them. It was my intention that you would become attached to these characters, only for them to be insultingly eliminated by Melanie.

I'm a little unsure what you mean by "darker than what the story originally proposed." On a meta level, I did begin the story with a note that this is a love letter to yanderes, which is a dark theme inherently. Perhaps we disagree here, but I don't think I've proposed anything lighter than what I've written. A dark story that gets darker and darker. That's what's happening. But, this feedback does help me! It's something I can keep in mind for future projects, at the very least.

Adrian is more complicated a character than I think people may get the impression... I feel I could always write her better, but I don't want to give away too much of who she is too blatantly. There's a lot of story to still have her develop in! I don't want to give away too much too quickly. In regards to using her life as a bargaining chip, the best answer I can really give is that she's too altruistic for that "opt out." She doesn't want to die, of course, and she knows enough too that killing herself wouldn't actually save Erin or anyone else. Melanie will still exist with or without her. Furthermore, suicide is pretty diffcult for someone that tiny! I mean, she could throw herself off the desk, but in the moment like in the last chapter, how could she without being caught mid-fall? Suicide realistically isn't a threat she can idly make, nor is it one she wants to commit to. I sort of wanted to use Scarlet to touch on this subject, actually, but I see that perhaps the message wasn't connected properly.

Haha, of course this story is not for everyone! I don't expect everyone to like it, or for everyone to like 100% of it. As you said, this is my story, and it will be written the way I want. This is the story I wanted to write, this is the story I wanted to share. Fear not that you might come off as mean or overly negative! In fact, this response and others like it prove to me that I'm accomplishing what I sent myself out to do, to write a story that gets under people's skin, one way or another. If that sensation is dismissed as poor writing, that's a wound I'm willing to take.

Again, thank you for all this feedback! I hope you enjoy the next chapter and those beyond.

Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: November 26 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

I have got to say, the "plot armor critique" is not misapplied in my opinion, and even when you tried to argue that against by saying the plot is to keep her protected... well that is kind of plot armor.  It is less that she is staying in power though, it is more HOW she is staying in power.

Mel does not really DO MUCH to keep herself in power, things just sort of.... happen to keep herself in power.  The last chapter with Erin and Candi showed this especially; none of what happened was anything Mel planned for or part of her evil plan, things just worked out for her perfectly, the plot served her the solutions to her problems on a silver platter.  This happened with capturing Erin as well, and in many other parts of the story.

The last couple chapters especially have been full of plot contrivances and that is what is frustrating me and other readers that have commented I'd wager.  How the story is going doesn't make me feel particularly despaired or like "oh won't someone stop mel?", it makes me roll my eyes and takes me out of the story.  And while again I know you have your plan, but I do not think that pulling readers outside of the story is ever a good idea when you want them to suspend their disbelief and get invested in the character drama.

Not to mention you talk a lot about Mel's power, but the way the plot protects her so much with contrivance after contrivance, it makes her feel weak.  I don't believe Mel is a threat, honestly she feels like one of the most weak willed and unintelligent "giantess" chars I have read in a competent story; I don't worry about Mel or think she will do much, I worry about how contrivance will push the story.  If that is what you are going for I suppose that is fine, but it seems at odds with what you are saying you want to do.

You have your idea and following it is important, but at the same time I do have advice to give, and that would be to better map out what will happen to make the story beats feel less contrived and more purposeful; if Mel is a cunning threat to be feared that should reflect in the plot.  She should be the one making the power plays, not the plot contriving things in her favor.  I think having Mel solve her own problems without things just happening for her, or having to rely on herself in a tough situation (like with Candi) would go a long way in having the story feel less contrived and also possibly better suit your vision for a powerful yandere type character.

 

Also a little off topic I think I did have a different idea of what yandere was before reading this so that is on me... though a yandere usually seems like madly in love with someone, so I assumed the story was going to a sort of ultra possessive to a violent extent romance story, so that was where I was coming from.

 

Either way I am interested in seeing where you go from here, glad we did not scare you off, I am always afraid that a little tough love might make writers leave, and I don't want that.



Author's Response:

Thank you for another in-depth review! Unfortunately, I don't have much more to say than what I have said previously. Much of what's in this review I can only digest, I don't really have any direct responses.

Though, I will comment on Melanie's strength. I want to say I disagree about how "weak" Melanie is, but the truth is, you're not wrong either. Melanie isn't a juggernaut, really. She's a college student, a pretty lazy one at that, with very little will. You can see this with her first interaction with Scarlet, when she succumbed to anything Scarlet said because she was scared of her. You can see it in most of her normal sized interactions in general, she's a waif in this regard. However, I'd argue I've done at least enough to show that she is cunning to a degree. She knows how to lie to people, and she's crushingly mean to those that she finally has an advantage over. She stalks people, she executes plans to kidnap them. Perhaps it's not the most impressive use of her abilities -- she's no Light Yagami or Dexter -- but with the resources she has, I'd like to think the image I've made for her, when all context is considered, is that of a truly unhinged girl.

At the same time, the theme of the story does indeed empower her. I've touched on this a little bit more in the most recent chapter, and here and there elsewhere, but Melanie strongly believes in the "fate" of things. The fact that when she is cornered, and yet still succeeds, is part of what enables her into thinking the way she does. If things happen so cleanly in her favor, then she must be right. It must be fate. This must be true love.

I doubt I'll be scared off by any critique, so you and others are free to keep writing reviews! Even if the story starts showing some unrefined edges, that's fine by me if you call me out. I'm not seeking to create the perfect story, I'm just trying to put out there my story. Thanks again for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: November 26 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

Oh I did not realize there was a new chapter when I wrote mt last comment, but I just read it.

 

It was a shorter chapter for you, and it was largely damage control for the last chapter, but it was a nice enough read.  Seeing Adrian's reacton to whay she did, and Mel's reaction to her reaction, was nice.  Personally I feel that removing some power from Mel and making her second guess herself a bit here made her feel like a lot more... not relatable but well rounded, like a person who feels things.  Not much plot progression, but I am eager to see if anything comes of Nicky's guest.... I mean.... even if we might both know it won't happen, but who knows. X3

 

EDITING this reivew to make a comment for Ghostwriter44: I hope you don't mean my reviews, because if you think what I am doing is bullying then I do not know how to help you.  Not to mention the author has responded positively to my reviews, and getting different viewpoints can be helpful; also no one has told the author to write what they want, in fact I have done the opposite, but giving advice to fix possibl structural issues in the plot is not anywhere close to that.  No one is stopping you from enjoying the story.

Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: November 30 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

A story featuring characters of difference sizes does not immediately make it a fetish story, nor does a story being on this website make it inherently sexual.  A lot of people in the community do not read stories for sexual gratfication.

 

The author also seems to be writing the story to tell a story they want to tell rather than simply make smut, from what I have seen.

Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: February 14 2019 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

I really wish this website had better communication features, it would be interesting to discuss writing with some of the reviewers here, but the medium does not make for stimulating discussion or civilized conversation, the medium of these reviews makes comments seem more bold and confrontational than they probably are.  I say this because I am not calling anyone out with this review, I am just thinking out loud because it is late and I am having trouble sleeping.

 

One comment I want to make is on what Saf has said; the author having a specific kink does not mean they are immune to bad writing.  I would not say it is bad art since art is very subjective and personal to the creator, but writing prose generally has rules and general guidelines to follow in order to achieve maximum effectiveness.  You can't say breaking the rules is not breaking the rules because it makes your peepee hard.

But contrivance, when used to such a massive degree as it is done in this story is a writing flaw, and it is not one you can fault readers for being annoyed at.

I see down below the author and Ghostwriter talked about how Plot Armor (contrivance) is mandated for a story like this, and I wholeheartedly disagree: having to fall back on contrivance means that the story has not been fleshed out enough to allow for a better reasoning for the events happening, or the author lacks the writing skills to pull off the idea.  It is a lazy writing tool; now, a little here and there might not be so bad, as the author claims, but saying a little is used in this story is flat out false, it is used heavily in this story, more than many I have seen.

Contrivance basically punishes the reader for caring about the story.  It creates unsatisfying payoffs, and when used repeatedly it makes the reader feel like they are wasting their time.  Of course, if the contrivances make for better jerk off material it can be ignored by those jerking off to it, but that does not mean it is still a storytelling flaw.

That leads me into my second point on Saf's comment, I do not think it is entirely fair to say that people can not judge a story because it might be used as jerk off material for some.  I do not believe that a story being posted to this website inherently makes it sexual, and there are a number of younger readers who come here, as well as readers who come here because they enjoy sized themed fiction despite not having sexual interest, such as myself as an asexual female.  I and others like me are as much a part of this website as anyone else, as much as the GTS community is designed to serve hetero male fantasies, but that is not an argument for now.

 

Now I am not saying the story is bad or anyone who likes it is bad or the author is bad with this comment, but it is incorrect to say that using contrivance in this way is not bad writing. 

 

Another comment I want to make, and this one is more addressed at the author, is about how the audience perceives Mel: you do not show her as cute.  Like, at all.  You directly TELL us she is cute, but... who are you?  You are not in the story.  The story does not have anything redeeming for her.  I might have mentioned this before, I forget, but this is super cliche but SHOW DON'T TELL.  Telling is Mel is cute is lazy, showing us her cute actions or characters reacting to cuteness.  I fall into this trap too I think everyone does, but it would help if that is what you want.

It could be that your idea of cute and what most people think as cute are at odds too, possibly.

There is also the possible issue that you have inserted yourself too much into the story and it is blocking the reader's view of the story, but that is a conversation for a different time.

 

Anyways I am just thinking out loud after reading the recent reviews, no one take anything personally, hope all the best for the story.



Author's Response:

When I say Melanie is cute, I do indeed say that with a knowing, smug grin on my face, the fact that most people would, in fact, not consider Melanie cute. When I blatantly tell reviewers that Melanie is cute, I do so half-jokingly, understanding that to someone who isn't interested in the creepy aesthetic of dark, haunting women like I am, Melanie would probably come off as gross, horrid, unlikeable. I've never been bashful to admit, even from the very beginning, that Melanie was designed for me, with my interests in my mind. Furthermore, I do defend myself from the "show, don't tell" writing critique: my responses to reviews are not part of the Endless canon, and shouldn't reflect the quality of the writing. In-story, I have not referred to Melanie as explicitly cute -- unless I'm totally blanking out on a stray comment I made about her! I don't think I am, especially since I've had it in mind that "cuteness" and the identification of cuteness is a running theme. It hasn't really been coincidence that so often I've used the phrase "cute girl" in regards to how Melanie views people around her.

I think the note I'll leave this response on, as it extends to the rest of the topics brought up too, is that my endgoal here is to share the story that's in my heart, the way I invision it, and express that  story with the size community as best to my abilities. There are going to be elements many don't like or understand or sympathize with, elements that do break the immersion if read as a casual story, but my hope is that those flaws would be forgiven as they're somewhat necessary evils for what is... ultimately, my erotic giantess fantasy, where much of the erotic and fantasy comes from aspects that don't make for a bestseller. I'm rambling, but I hope what I'm saying is understood. For my erotic giantess-shrinking yandere fantasy story to exist as it does in my heart, and for that to be expressed purely, there will have to be plot armor. My heart demands it, go talk to it.

I will also mention this, as it did come up and I'd like to make a statement: I do not support "younger audiences" reading this story. I don't think this website makes this distinction clear enough, especially considering the legitimately disturbing synopsises of stories listed here and what that says of this ragtag community, but this story is purely for audiences 18 and older. To tie this back into the discussion earlier, it's not been my intention, ever, for this story to be read and critically acclaimed by a wide audience. Although my writing is, allegedly, good enough to make an engaging story, I've not committed to writing it with making a literary masterpiece. It is an erotic adult story and should be read as such at all times, even if there's more emotion and drama behind it than the usual erotic novel.

Thank you for the readership and the review! I know I don't respond to reviews until I push out a new chapter, but this provoked some thoughts from me that I didn't want to lose. For anyone curious, the next chapter is coming! It is. Delays have certainly come up but I promise the next chapter will be out very soon! Thank you thank you for your patience~

(Also, just so everyone is clear, Melanie is cute, everyone else just has bad taste.)

Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: March 05 2019 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

@Saf To an extent I get what you are saying, but I agree with CurseCrazy in that the distinction that this is an adult website for adults is not clear enough.  Honestly I have not thought much about this being an "adult" website until reading the comments here, I always just thought of it as a website for stories that feature people of differing sizes, and I know many others who do as well.  The lack of many warnings and the inclusion of what seems like a child inclusive rating system (G, PG, R, such) does not help the website in this regard.

At the same time I disagree with the notion that a story that is posted here is inherently "adult," but since the author says the story should be read as such at all times, this one is inherently adult.  However, being an adult story does not mean that it is not breaking rules when it breaks the rules of prose or storytelling, as I already discussed in my last comment.

But if crafting a compelling narrative or well written is not the intent, then there is not much more for me to say.  In the end we should be writing for ourselves either way, so there's no harm, I just mistook the story as attempting to be something of a thriller since it had a lot of the bones of one.

 

@CurseCrayCray, oh and I am pretty sure you have referred to Mel as cute in-story before, which is why I brought it up.  I think this is example of yourself sorta entering the story a bit too much, which can be distracting and pull the reader out, which one generally does not want to do when writing erotica, especially fantastical erotica.  Again though, if that is by design then that is fine, but it seems like you were aware you were doing this.



Author's Response:

Using ctrl+f pulls up 40 instances of the word "cute," but none have been used to describe Melanie or her actions. That would be consistent with the audience opinion that Melanie, generally speaking, isn't considered cute. So if there is any place where I've referred to Melanie as cute in-story, maybe I used a different adjective, then... my bad! I still don't think I've made that error, but if it's there, that's definitely a mistake. I know fully that Melanie isn't conventionally attractive, so it isn't my intent to contradict that in the story. I just think that what makes Melanie cute to me are many of the things people find ugly about her, haha.

Summary:

Katie goes shopping for furniture with her big sis only to end up closer to her then she'd like


Categories: Giantess, Butt, Entrapment, Incest, Instant Size Change, Watersports
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 1974 Read Count: 6787
[Report This] Published: October 01 2018 Updated: October 01 2018
Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: October 02 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

First time ever reviewing, though I should have long before.  Anyways I noticed this is your first story so I just wanted to offer some words of encouragement; as a first effort this is pretty enjoyable.  You would definitely do well to proofread a bit more since there are some typos and errors that made reading a little difficult, but overall the story read well.

 

I LOVE F/f with sisters so I'm always happy to see people write more of it, and I think your concept was pretty fun.  The level of detail was pretty good, descriptive without getting too bogged down.  The characters perhaps could have been a bit more defined, but if you wish to continue there is time for that.

 

I think when you have a concept where you have a big sister and a little sister or something like that, it's good to kind of establish the characters a bit more so we can feel with them how degrading or dirty or good it feels to be used at the hands (or in this case butt) of their big sis or such.  Does that make sense?  Giving the characters more character and having them react more makes it feel a bit more realistic, I suppose I am geting at.  It's late sorry if I am unclear.

 

Either way I liked this and I hope to see more like it, we need more F/f writers in general, especially ones that focus on this specific field I rather enjoy.  Definitely proofread/edit more, but other than that good job!



Author's Response:

well, I'm glad you liked it and thanks for givin me your thoughts. I've always been kinda shitty at proper punctuation and all that so it's tough writing a story and fixing them all but I got a few spelling and punctuation checkers downloaded so it's getting slowly better. this is mostly a test story so to speak since I've never written anything like it before but ill definitely go into more detail for characters and all that jazz in later chapters and other stories most likely! also if your interested in female x dickgirl/futanari or whatever you wanna call them I have a Literotica account and my user for that is  witch_of_november and currently I'm working on a fantasy romance story on there so if your into that then I hope ya check it out ^^ thanks again for taking the time to review my story and I hope you'll enjoy my future works 

Bitch and nerd by dr_joe Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1]
Summary:

No need for office romance when you can use co workers to blow off steam


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Humiliation, Lesbians, Slow Size Change
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 17564 Read Count: 23924
[Report This] Published: November 30 2018 Updated: June 29 2019
Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: December 13 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I saw no reviews for this so I just wanted to say it seems like a neat idea so far and I like the not exactly cruel but humiliating if slightly gentle tone the domination has to it.  However I recommend breaking up the giant paragraphs it would make the story easier to read.  I look forward to seeing where this is going.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the comment =) Glad you liked it. I did some formatting in my text editor and reuploaded it. I hope it got a bit easier to read

Summary:

Remy is an average beta girl with an average prime family. There's nothing remarkable. There's nothing to see here.


Categories: Giantess, Teenager (13-19), Humiliation, Gentle
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 23216 Read Count: 19821
[Report This] Published: February 07 2019 Updated: February 14 2019
Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: March 05 2019 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I think your story is well written and I like slice of life stories that look at the emotional affects of size difference or changing.  I am also a hopefully F/f lover, especially when it comes to families.

The idea for the doll is interesting; I have seen robots for tinies used before in furry stories (a recent one I have not finished but can say is well written is Hetzer's Integration, though I am not sure how much it comes up), but this one brings interesting possibilities.  I was expecting to dislike it due to limiting interaction, but it has some interesting implications.

I was hesitent to review this story because it feels like a certain type of content featuring younger characters is.... heavily ingrained into the story, and that worries me.  I thought Eli's channel had issues with that, and this story passes it by a country mile.  This will dictate how much I read the story, but if I ignore that I really do love the family interactions and drama and high moments, so I hope you continue the story.

Summary:

Rose is a doctor that specializes in piloting a P.O.D. (Physician Operated Diminisher), a vehicle designed to investigate health issues at a small size. Sara is her “guardian”, who assists in the procedures she performs. James is Rose’s boyfriend and Sara is far from his biggest fan. When he comes to Rose with a personal issue that he wants her to look into off the books, the three of them get tangled in a series of multisized affairs, some of which are not fun for all involved.

This heavily features giant male and giant couple. There will be sexual content.


Categories: Body Exploration, Couples, Entrapment, Giant, Humiliation, Insertion, Lesbians, Sci-Fi, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.), Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/f, FM/f, M/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 10931 Read Count: 27422
[Report This] Published: February 15 2019 Updated: February 27 2019
Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: February 20 2019 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was an interesting idea, and it was enjoyable to read!  Well, "enjoyable" might not be the best word, I really felt the betrayal and I think you wrote it very well, and the idea of them synching their minds really helped bring out the drama and emotions (which I love in SW fiction).

 

I am just curious if you have plans to continue?  I am really enjoying the character dynamic between Sara and Rose and would love to see where it goes, though I can also see this working as an ending.

 

Either way, I look forward to whatever you write next!



Author's Response: Hey, thank you! I kind of lucked into the synced mind thing. I needed a convenient means for Rose and Sara communicating that kept James out of the loop, but then I really liked playing with how their emotions melted together and how they handled all of it. So, a win-win! Hm, yeah, so I am definitely entertaining a few possibilities with these characters. I don’t yet know if they will be added to this story, or if I would make sequels. Beyond a possible alternate universe type deal where I rewrite the events of the second chapter with James being aware, I think I have wrapped up my intentions with the FM/f. So, going forward, the story would shift toward other structures. And I like having limited tags for a story, so that someone who wants “FM/f”, or whatever, isn’t hunting through chapters for just that content. I don’t know if others share my feelings on that, or if it makes sense for this particular set of characters and their stories.

Summary:

A sequel project to the shrinking curse story, Endless, where various alternative endings for several of the characters are explored. Content varies from chapter to chapter.

(If you enjoy my writing, consider pledging to my Patreon~ patreon.com/cursecrazy For just $2/month you get early access to these stories and more!

Or, consider just buying me a coffee~ ko-fi.com/cursecrazy )


Categories: Fantasy, Feet, Footwear, Gentle, Humiliation, Odor
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 22490 Read Count: 15425
[Report This] Published: June 21 2019 Updated: April 20 2020
Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: June 25 2019 Title: Chapter 1: Kimberly's Story, Part I

As I mentioned before I really do love sweet F/f content so I ate this up.  I always felt like Kimberly could have used more attention too, so I am glad you are going this route.  The story was cute and well written, and I enjoyed sharing Kimberly's tough emotions with her past abuse and this new person.  Mia seems like a sweetheart too.  I look forward to continuing this!  I am curious who else might get attention.  Nicky and Juniper were fucking adorable, I can only hope for some continuation of that.

 

Only small thing I feel the need to bring up is, as a reader, I did not enjoy the Patreon/Kofi links dropped in the middle of the story.  I understand wanting attention to them, but I almost put the story down because it took me so out of the experience.

 

Looking forward to what comes next.



Author's Response:

I'm glad to hear you enjoyed this content! It is quite a change of pace for how Endless played out. Gentle interactions are fun as well~ It might take some time before the conclusion to her story comes out, but it's great to know that this story is enjoyed so far!

Nicky and Juniper, ah. I'm glad you liked them as well! I'll try to come up with a Never-Ending for them as well, they seemed quite popular and hey, I loved them too!

I understand your issue with the patreon links. I do want my patreon to succeed and get some focus~ but I've taken your input and I'll leave the links at the beginning and ends of the chapters only. I hoped the middle link wouldn't interfere much with the story, but I suppose I was wrong.

Thank you for the review~ The next chapter isn't so gentle, but I do have more plans for other Never-Endings for stories much less focused on anything absurdly rough or mean. I hope you stick around!

Summary:

The lone survivor of a horrific Shrinkee massacre is left dealing with the four giantesses responsible for the bloodbath as they compete to become her sole owner. 

 

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.

 

 


Categories: Giantess, Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Breasts, BBW, Butt, Crush, Entrapment, Feet, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Lesbians, Mouth Play, Slave, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, FF/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 411107 Read Count: 244571
[Report This] Published: September 01 2020 Updated: February 18 2024
Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 15 2022 Title: Chapter 1: The Beginning

Obviously the answer for who is next will be Zoey.  If only (I am very curious to see them meeting, not that I want poor Annabelle to suffer, part of me wonders if she'd treat her little sister differently seeing her like this?).  Though Nell and Annabelle are cute together too.


First time reviewing, I do not have much to say, just that I am very much enjoying this story and am always looking forward to the new chapters.  Thank you for sharing, I am looking forward to seeing where this story goes.  There are a lot of side characters and I am very curious to see if and how they come back into the story.



Author's Response:

Ha! I also think Zoey deserves her own (second) chapter. Who knows, maybe she'll get one...or two...or three. 

There will definitely be some more Nell and Annabelle moments coming up, though they may not be what you're expecting, or maybe they are             ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ (who can say, right?).

Thanks for the review, DarkStarGoddess, happy to see that you're liking the story. And yes! After, (and maybe even during) the FF's chapters, you will be able to see some familiar faces. 

Thanks again for commenting! 

Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed
Date: May 19 2022 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

Toe Jam: I feel bad for her, she seems to just want to be Leah's one and only.  I like the dynamic between her and Annabelle.


Byte: He's a good boi.  It's honestly refreshing having a completely able and competent tiny in such a dour environment, at first he almost felt too cartoony but I came to like that.  I am glad he's back and hope he comes around more, I would like to see more of this plot line.


Warren: Put him down, kill him.  Though I admit I am not as into cruelty as most people reading this story probably are, I found him to be almost too evil, though that might be because baby eating (symbolism aside) was so heinous it took me out of the story, both due to the evilness and that I don't like thinking of children in these stories.


Looking forward to see where the story goes, despite not being a fan of cruelty the narrative and Annabelle's plight has captivated me and I am very interested to see more!



Author's Response:

They'll be more Toe Jam in upcoming chapters--don't know if it will be what you're expecting though.

Byte is a good boi. He is definitely over the top, and when he starts to get more scenes you'll see why. 

Hahahaha! It's so funny to see the different ways you all react to these characters. Warren and Zoey seem to be the most polarizing (Although, everyone agreed that Mrs. Gates' should've burned). I'm with you on the children thing though, I try to keep them in the peripheral--or only referenced (like in this chapter).  

Thanks DarkStarGoddess for commenting! 



Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 15 2022 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

Well this was a treat.  Up to this point I felt like Leah was my least favorite of the main 4 giantesses, but this chapter may have changed that.  Not because I like her anymore as a person, obviously, but this chapter just hit so many emotionally complex notes that I love in shrinking fiction.  I loved Annabelle clawing her way back from her temporary episode, and I felt for her during that ending segment.  She had me going for a moment, I thought she really was unfazed by Leah's evil ploy, now I just feel for her.


Love learning about Annabelle's past from before she shrunk.  Would one day hope to see her with Zelda or Zoey but not sure if the story will go that way, but I find her old life interesting.


Poor Toe Jam too, I felt a little bad for her before, now I really do.  I feel for her so much, I really hope she gets a happy ending.  I mean, I hope everyone outside of the BSA gets one for that matter.


Anyways, thank you for the update, I look forward to the next.



Author's Response:

It's so funny to me how some of you guys are changing your rankings so drastically, but in completely different directions--though I really relate to your reasoning. I am a sucker for flat characters--archetypical disney villains, etc-- but in order to make this story work, the FF really need that layer of complexity that is often revealed through how they treat/are treated by other characters. 

God, can you imagine if I just never told Annabelle's backstory after hinting at it after over 30 chapters? That would actually be hilarious--don't tempt me, DarkStarGoddess.  But what I will say about the moment when we go into her past, is that it will be the most nervous I will be publishing a chapter. It definitely is my most "out there" plotline and stands to run the risk of jumping the shark (which is why I'm taking so long to write these next few chapters as to mitigate that risk). I know on some level it's silly to care about believability in a story where a secret organization kills people who are predisposed to randomly shrink down to three inches, but I know a lot of people like this story and I want to respect the time you guys have given to this. 


Oof yeah, I also really like Toe Jam (I like all of my characters). I can't say what will happen to her, but know her story isn't over yet!


Thanks for your comment!

Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 27 2022 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

I am happy to see an update, and personally I really liked this interlude.  I think Artemis is an interesting character, despite her obvious denial (even before Grey made it clear she knew he was lying, it seemed pretty evident that she knew that Annabelle was the pet in question but didn't want to admit it to herself).

Really like the shrinkee world you have created, I think it's neat, the HQ, their little gadgets, and their capability despite their size.  I already said I liked Byte for his competence, so I like to see even more of that.  I feel like it's not something you see really often in stories like this, where the smaller characters are usually perpetual victims with little agency.

Look forward to seeing more with Bet and Byte and more of the story in general.  As for what Beth will choose, I say why not both?

Thank you for sharing.



Author's Response:

Thanks DarkStarGoddess!

I also think Artemis is interesting. She's had a fascinating and unique life, and she's experienced a lot of different things. You'll see how that's shaped her in later chapters. 

And I really thought hard about the type of civilization I wanted the resistance to exist in. There's just so much an advanced society provides in terms of plot. And don't worry Byte's skills will be appearing again. His skills in question showed up in chapter 34. It was super subtle and sneaky, but it'll be discussed in upcoming chapters so don't worry if you didn't catch it.

An yeah, maybe Beth can have her cake and etc, etc. Or maybe she'll have to choose...we'll just have to see.

Thanks again for the comment, DarkStarGoddess


--WOP

Summary:

A mother helps her futa daughter come into her magical inheritance.


Categories: Giantess, Body Exploration, Destruction, Futanari, Gentle, Growing/Shrinking Out of Clothes, Growing Woman, Incest, Lesbians, Slow Size Change, Trans, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 11137 Read Count: 9208
[Report This] Published: April 13 2022 Updated: April 16 2022
Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 15 2022 Title: Chapter 1: The Witching Hour

I really enjoyed this, it's not a common subject matter that you see around here so it was very nice to find and read this.  Enjoyed the detailed descriptions especially during the action in the second half.  I really hope you do write that second chapter, but even if not I am happy you shared this with us, thank you.

Summary:

Gina accidentally discovers her roommate is a witch and subsequently keeps finding herself part of magical experiments that, for some reason, always results in her shrinking. Otherwise, her life is pretty normal.

This can be considered a collection of short stories that star the same characters. There's no major overarching plot.


Categories: Gentle, Growing/Shrinking Out of Clothes
Characters: None
Growth: Mini GTS (16-30ft)
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.), Munchkin (2.9 ft. to 1 ft.)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 11135 Read Count: 10293
[Report This] Published: May 27 2022 Updated: November 01 2022
Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 15 2022 Title: Chapter 1: Rules of Potions

This is an extremely cute story, I love the dynamic between the two leads, and like the wholesome feel of Gina being Ashley's unwilling little pet friend.  I hope you continue to update it, but even if not I enjoyed what you wrote, thank you for sharing it.