A very cool concept of a story, it really gives me a love-hate sensation when reading it. On one hand I love the large and in charge Dianne, but she's at the same time completely corrupt and though exagerrated shows shades of stuff that goes on in real politics and media.

Another strong outing. Very nice seeing Izzy coping with the loss of control of her life and possessions. Gloria being a 'tough love' type o mother makes her strong maternal figure that I don't see too often in stories. I like the fact that despite Sabrina is still being her innocent-self for the most part, even the minor things she said can be interpreted as threatening to Izzy like when Gloria told Sabrina to practice her violin playing.  The care you've put into your story is on clear display.

I've read a couple of your other stories, most notably "Side Effects" and as per usual you do a great job delving into the psyche of Laura as she enjoys the several perks of her growth. Compared to the mental gymnastics that was done by Kelly in "Side Effects" to justify her actions, it's interesting to watch Laura who has clearly fantasized about being in this position quickly disassociate with regular people, accept that many will die, many of which by accident, etc.

Some of the problems though I have is some of the characterization suffering. Mayor Strauss for instance, was a case of needing more show and not tell. If you hadn't told me that he was trying to drive out the liberal crowd, was possibly homophobic, etc. I wouldn't have known. I think if more was done to establish the kind of vile person he was, it'd make Laura feel all the more justified that she was the one who needed to be in charge. Though it was nice touch that he practically sent the police force on a death mission to confront Laura to display his cowardly nature.

As for Laura she early is developed as a pretty opinionated person, liberal, eco-friendly, etc. It would be interesting to see more of that side of her such as when she crushed the man with the oversized SUV, rather than the whimsical abuses of her power that get a bit too repetitive at points in my opinion. 

I also found Staci's death premature considering they just reunited. It would've made for an interesting dynamic if you took longer to explore how Staci responds to seeing first hand  the atrocities Laura commits, or if Laura makes more of an effort to avoid killing the masses to appease Staci, or will Laura deem Staci no different from the rest of the 'tinies' and that it should be Staci's job to adapt to her not the other way around, etc.

Most interesting to me though is that I look forward later on what other type of abilities Laura will discover. Immense strength and capability of destruction are no brainers considering her size; however her uncovering that her brain is much more efficient at processing information, she can influence the emotions of others, etc. Reinforce her belief of goddesshood 

So here's my big problem with this story, it's rapidly starting to feel like Kyra. I'll refrain my whole judgement until more of the story progresses, but the scenario that's playing out is far too similar.

The social commentary aspect of it is interesting, but something I fear is ultimately going to play out in the same manner as your previous work which boils down to the following.

Loving father is whisked into powerlessness and having to deal with or accept the reversal of roles with his daughter.

Daughter has obtained newfound authority and power, and revels in it.

She may have a couple of passive admissions of guilt for treating her loved one horribly, but will likely dismiss it. 

Father will attempt to resist the shift in power dyanmic, only to be thrawted, punished, and he'll eventually come to relucantly or happily accept it.

I hope I'm wrong with these assessments and I don't have any inherent problems with the tone of the shift of power dynamic between men and women, but not when it's just means for the story to progress in the same manner with Mark being haplessly beaten down by the world without any interesting character work.

To me the best aspect of the story thus far is Ben realizing how quickly things have spun out of his control and despite the knowledge of the superiority complex that Heather has, is realizing that the magnitude of it and he's in a near powerless state while she registers him as a slave rather than her partner, plus having to resist his lust while deeling with the giants.

Jason's characterization has also made him an interesting antagonist beyond that of a meathead brute, but calculating and knowing how people tick. Not only that, you've done a good job of making Jason and Heather have different M.O's in terms of getting what they want. While Jason likes to willingly make his subjects to submit to his rule and wants to mentally break Ben down, Heather practically gives him an ultimatum to make him obey her. 

I'm curious to what will happen in the event that Jason is or isn't compatible for growth. If he isn't compatible, he runs risk to being in the same spot as Ben and even if he is compatible, will someone with as severe a God Complex as Heather will be happy to 'share' power with someone. After witnessing that side of Heather, I wonder if there's a possibility of an unlikely alliance between Ben and Jason. 

This story has me hooked.

I like this. You've established Jen's character very well, especially with the dialogue where she's giving herself a pep-talk before questioning Monica about the missing clothes. Her small stature combined with her fear of confrontation and ridicule immediately makes her sympathetic and relatable.

These latest developments at the barn have been the best yet and most importantly the x-factor in Daisy has been introduced as the tipping force that can send Emma over the edge. For everything that she has to cope with and lost, Daisy is a threat who Emma views as someone who can the last important thing to her, Daniel. The person who has helped and grounded her to the best of his ability throughout her ordeal.

All the details of Emma's jealously to Daisy and Daniel's interactions are incredibly realistic to how people can be in real life, but there's an added truth to her jealously when realizing that Daisy can interact with Daniel in ways that Emma now cannot.

Speaking of which, Daniel and Daisy's interactions have been a great insight to the mental toll that constantly having to cater to Emma and walking on eggshells has taken on Daniel.

And the biggest elephant in the room one of Emma's mood swings have made her act on her impulses and she has seriously hurt Daniel (albeit inadvertently) in the process. Now even more harrowing concerns are on the horizon.

How does Daniel proceed after experiencing how his physical wellbeing is now at risk?How much longer can Emma keep her anger in check before she lashes out? The most pressing, with Daniel growing closer with Daisy and seemingly slipping away from Emma, how far is Emma willing to go to keep him? Or worst, if she does lose him? What does Emma do with no one to ground her and nothing else to lose?