Reviewer: Gigatennisstar Signed
Date: August 03 2019
Title: Chapter 3: Pressing Engagement
Dang, I didn't realize my last review was that bad, tell me how you really feel :'(
Hehe, I'm joking. But in all seriousness this story is amazing and is one of my favorites coming out right now. Everyday I come to this site hoping to see another chapter and am hearthbroken when there is none. No joke.
I love this story. It seems to be more than just a sex em up giantess story and I love that. This has a lot of heart and passion put into it that I really appreciate. I'm still loving the character writing with William and am deeply intrigued by what he's cooking up in the background for Naomi. Naomi is being shown to have some depth to her that I find very interesting. The descriptive writing is still pretty good as well. Such a great read.
While I'm not particuarly a fan of hard vore I still found chapter 2 engaging as William essentially battled the legal team for survival, and Chapter 3, being fallout of Chapter 1 was pretty clever and tied the story back into that there are more things at stake than just kill all the dissenters. Which is making this staged rampage something interesting.
I don't want to give to much in the way of what I would want to see because I don't want to influence the story to much. I really want to see where you take this from here. But if I could give some advice from what I've seen of the previous three chapters:
Keep William conflicted. Right now he is so interesting because he is being forced to make decisions that not just reflect who he is but what he is willing to do to protect what he cares about, in this care his life and his family's wellbeing. It doesn't even have to be the same conflicts but right now it's interesting to see his state of mind.
Deepen Naomi a little. It really feels like there is more under the surface than just evil giantess boss. If not, she's still playing her role admirably and I love it. But how there is even that kind of, "I'll kill people at work if I want but in the streets, no go" only to flip flop later, I want to know what makes her tick, see why she follows the rules sometimes and doesn't in other situations (other than it's her company).
Flesh out the world. It seems like you have a pretty interesing setting right now and maybe you haven't gotten to a bulk of the worldbuilding yet but some of the details to me are sketchy. I feel like whatever William is doing in the background is going to end up shedding some light on the world (this review is removed from when I read these chapters but I'm pretty sure there was no direct physical description of his wife, I'm calling she's a giantess) and how it functions.
Keep doing what you're doing and trust in your vision. It's worked so far, I'm hooked. I tend to save reviews for when I absolutely have to let the author know how I feel. Rest assured if you are releasing new chapters I'm reading them, even if I'm not always putting down reviews and if it takes you a while to get going, I'll stay for the long haul. :D Thanks again for this excellent story!
Author's Response: Hey man, thanks! It must have been your review I deleted by mistake, I'm guessing. Totally didn't mean to, I was trying to respond on mobile but this site doesn't work great on phones and so I clicked the wrong button.
Thank you for your praise of the story. I love to hear that people are enjoying it. But honestly, it also makes writing the future chapters more stressful because I'm unsure that they'll live up to what people have come to expect. That said, I like your suggestions alot, such as keeping William conflicted and deepending Naomi. That will help me moving forward, for sure. I'm not sure how much of the "world" I want to build because I don't want to bog down the story. So if I can come up with a way to do that and keep it interesting, I will!
Thank you for taking the time to reveiw the story, especially since you don't do it that often!
