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The Tales of Miss Hyde by Rehgahro Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 70]
Summary:

Valerie and Crystal are two good friends who just want to enjoy a movie together.  However, during the movie a shrinking epidemic hits the world, and the dynamic between these two friends changes as one's darker desires get brought to light.

 

Several months after the world was hit with the shrinking epidemic, private investigators Joey and Robyn are hired by an unknown source to investigate Infinity University, where Valerie and Crystal go to school.  Apparently, a lot of the shrunken students have gone missing, causing campus-wide concern.

 

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.


Categories: Fantasy, Young Adult 20-29, Butt, Crush, Insertion, Lesbians, Unaware, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 94049 Read Count: 235631
[Report This] Published: February 07 2018 Updated: May 28 2019
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 23 2018 Title: Chapter 13: Caught?

Best vore story on the site. Also the plot is great. I cannot get enough.

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Date: October 23 2018 Title: Chapter 14: Hyde Rises

If only those who eaten a person cannot be shrunk, how did half the world shrink initially? Confusing and a plot hole lol unless I'm missing something. 

 

Love the direction it took and oh boy cannot wait for more! 



Author's Response:

I explain it later, but that first wave of shrinking was an accident.  Things went haywire, random people shrunk, etc.  When the people responsible finally made working shrink rays, at first theyd only work on people who didnt eat tinies. Hope that clears it up.  Thanks for all the comments :D

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Date: October 30 2018 Title: Chapter 15: ACT 3: Vini Vidi Vici

FUCK. YES.

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Date: October 31 2018 Title: Chapter 16: Bouncing Here And There And Everywhere

I hope she's off to the bathroom to rescue Rachel....

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Date: October 31 2018 Title: Chapter 17: Brought to Heel

HELL. YES.

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Date: October 31 2018 Title: Chapter 18: Lady Jekyll?

I have to admit I'm slightly disappointed. Was hoping to delve more into Valerie's feelings and her seriously think about what led her to save Rachel. Yet she immediately seems to have snapped back to the hyde personality and is already going to punish Rachel now that she can abuse her. Felt unrewarding I guess, though I suppose this could change in a future chapter.

And it still saddens me that she doesn't regret killing Crystal at all... Teared up a little to hear her say that.

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Date: October 31 2018 Title: Chapter 20: Ménage à trois - Part 2

Fucking good shit. Ugh I can't get enough.

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Date: October 31 2018 Title: Chapter 21: Jekyll Rises

ABOUT. FUCKING. TIME! I really hope that Hyde fucking dies... but reading the chapter titles that clearly isn't the case.

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Date: October 31 2018 Title: Chapter 22: Hyde is Dead... (Part 1)

I can't stop laughing. SHE HAS POWERS NOW! Holy shit this is great xD

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Date: October 31 2018 Title: Chapter 23: ...And Long Live Hyde (Part 2)

I can't take these character deaths anymore. Legit killing me :( RIP RACHEL

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Date: October 31 2018 Title: Chapter 24: Exposition / Trajectory

All caught up.... I'm dying for Rachel to come back but I know it won't happen. At least Vivian is recieving justice....

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Date: January 08 2019 Title: Chapter 25: ACT 4: Sierra and the Pale Rider

BY THE HEAVENS YOU HAVE FINALLY RETURNED! WOOOOOOOHOOOOOOOOOOOOO. 

Sierra is a stupid fool. I look forward to reading as she dies painfully inside of Valerie's sexy gut. Also despite how much I hate Valerie for murdering Crystal and letting Rache's killer get off scot free I can't help but still fantasize being eaten and consumed by her because I'm a freak and that's what freaks do *puts on sunglasses*

Cannot wait for the next chapter and by God it better not take as long as it did for THIS ONE because I'm on the verge of an aneuryism.

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Date: February 20 2019 Title: Chapter 26: Near Goth Experience

Wow, you actually ARE capable of not mmurdering a tiny! 

 

I love where the plot is going, brilliant! JUSTICE FOR CRYSTAL!!!



Author's Response:

Haha.  Yeah, that's two tinies who HAVEN'T immediately been doomed upon entering a mouth.  Don't worry, once you read the next chapter you'll know things'll be back to normal :P

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Date: February 23 2019 Title: Chapter 27: Plans in Motion

I hate Laura with a burning passion but hot damn.

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Date: March 23 2019 Title: Chapter 28: The Last Hour

No the Robyn part was a good length. Any shorter and it would have felt rushed (trust me, I've rushed my scenes quite a few times)

It seems Daphne is to be trusted. I'm no fool though, Valerie is going to digest naive little Sierra and I'm not gonna care. NO FEELS FROM ME.



Author's Response:

Daphne is?  ;)

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Date: March 29 2019 Title: Chapter 29: Mistress Fahrenheit

Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat!?!?!!?!?!?!?

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Date: April 23 2019 Title: Chapter 30: Intersexing

I am honestly fucking speechless. SO much shit going on at once and yet it is done so well. I promised I wouldn't root for another tiny again after Rachel's death, but yet once more you have me growing feelings for Sierra. For the love of God... PLEASE DO NOT KILL HER!

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Date: November 09 2021 Title: Chapter 31: Climax... AM I RIGHT?

Reading this whole thing all over again makes me just as mad the first time through.... LOL (crystal...)

Anyways, haven't heard from you in ages bro, hope you're good. 



Author's Response:

Hey man, hope you're good too.  Sorry I'm a ghost, but you know how life can be.  You're still one of the few authors I even come back onto this site for, so you better keep on writing!  You know.. if you want.  :D

Where's Your Brother? by daftpunk Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 70]
Summary:

NEW: 31 Aug CHAPTER 9!

A sick, shrinking boy is taken care of by his over-protective but klutzy mother. His sister, jealous of the attention, plans revenge!

An Unaware Giantess focused story.

 

 

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.


Categories: Giantess, Unaware, Body Exploration, Feet, Gentle, Incest, Maternal, Mouth Play, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Brobdnignagian (51 ft. to 100 ft.)
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: FF/m
Warnings: The Following story is appropriate for all audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 14102 Read Count: 171699
[Report This] Published: August 26 2018 Updated: November 01 2019
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed
Date: August 26 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Shrink Cycle

I like the concept you have here. Not sure how I feel about the whole "not being able to move" thing, that tells me that a lot will happen and that Jeremy is in for a wild ride.

Less than Worthless by Help_Me Rated: R starstarstarstar [Reviews - 6]
Summary:

A depressed man accidentally shrinks in a failed suicide attempt. Three months later and he's been passed around and used as a toy and is feeling worse than ever. We get to see into his life as he's passed onto his new owner.


Categories: Giantess, Young Adult 20-29, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Insertion, Slave
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2578 Read Count: 20646
[Report This] Published: September 03 2018 Updated: September 05 2018
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: September 03 2018 Title: Chapter 1: New Owner

Alright so you've got some potential as a writer and there isn't a whole lot of feedback being given so I'm going to give you some pointers!


First off, you switched from third to first person and back a few times. Here's an example... "Though now I had to come back to reality as he heard Beth knock loudly on a door."

"He" Should have been replaced with "I" to maintain a single perspective, otherwise you'll just confuse the reader. It's a habit I had a long time ago when I first started, so you'll have to proactively look out for those kinds of mistakes.

 

Next, you have several spelling errors. What program do you use to write? Microsoft word or google docs are the recommended because they have spell check, which you should regularly use while proof reading your stories to fix all errors which can lose the immersion of the reader.

 

Finally theres a plothole in your chapter here. Jack says he hates Beth as Beth convinces Kayla that he simply LOVES to be used as a sex toy, which I assume is intended to be a reason that Jack is unable to be free of this cycle of being passed around... However you also make it quite clear that Jack is fully capable of speaking on his own behalf, so why wouldn't he just tell Kayla the truth? It's a pretty steep plothole and you gotta look out for that kind of stuff.

 

You have a solid writing style however and you seem to have a fresh pot of story ideas and that means you've got potential to do some seriously solid writing! Just work on the above points I've made and you'll write some very notable pieces on this site for sure!

 

If you ever want me to help you proof read any of your chapters before posting just email me at giantess9669@gmail.com and I'd be more than glad to help you out on my free time :D

 

Good chapter! Now I'll read the second :D



Author's Response:

Yeah I keep subconsciously switching to third person, I usually catch it but I guess some slip through. I've never done a first person story so it just happens. 

As for the plot hole, the explanation in my mind is that none of his other captors have listened to him and at this point he's basically void of trying to rationalize. I probably should've mentioned it at some point but I'm saving on fleshing out his backstory for later chapters. 

Thanks for the review though! My main goal is to improve and any feedback helps.

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. No money is being made from this work. No copyright infringement is intended.