to be input later
This is a TERRIFIC story! Would be great to read more, even just simple things like his continued and constant living off her toe jam and excerssions to the strip club captive to her feet.
When her boyfriend and two others are accidentally diminished in size at the research lab where Sophie works, she tries desperately to find a means to restore them. Her boyfriend suggests they take advantage of the new possibilities, but Sophie is initially reluctant. As things begin to heat up and she embraces the circumstances, the dynamic in the relationship shifts dramatically, leaving her boyfriend to wonder if he has made a big mistake.
Terrific so far. Really starting to come along.
How about the machine being able to shrink people to different sizes; such as Olivia mentioning the different size capabilities and Andrea asking for Bryce to be shrunk down to an inch.
Could you add some long term panty / thong wear, with a tiny in the front or back {both}
Perhaps Hannah gets addicted to using inch or two inch guys as perminant suppositories {perhaps the machine can be calibrated for a particular woman's genetic make-up, so they can live and get stuck up her hiney living off of her poop and breathing in her farts forever}
I'm not sure what Olivia plans on doing with Elliot or how she's going to punish Clayton; maybe she can stuff each one underneath her breasts {like living underwires} and decide to keep each one under their particular breast to drink her sweat and eat dead skin. Of course they'd have to come out to go to the bathroom or for her to change their mini-diapers; but then right back under her breasts they go. I don't know if you said Olivia's breast size; but for this Double EE would be a nice crushing weight to keep them both securely in place even without a bra.
Keep up the great work!!!
Thanks Dark Writter for taking the time to read this story and provide a review, you've provided some excellent ideas to incorporate into this story to keep it moving forward. I hope you continue to enjoy
Perhaps Clayton is on the verge of obsession, even Goddess worship of Olivia. There's nothing wrong with getting tangled helplessly in place in an overgrown garden; like some type of kinky "rope" bondage, maybe made more constricting by struggling like Chinese handcuffs.
Would Olivia really be interested in untieing him from her pubes; not to mention the shower Clayton would get every time she went pee.
Wonder if Warren would get down on his hands and knees and beg to be shrunk and owned by Sophia, be her little pet or dedicated minion. Hmmm, Olivia and an army of minions, perhaps if she shrunk all the homeless guys (and gave them a bath, maybe in her toilet)
I love how Ted took a big drink of Sophie's "nectar". Seems he's quite happy to accept Sophie's demands. Is his wife, Theo's mom to be involved, and at what size {wifey tucks tiny Ted away in panty and goes home leaving Theo, thus family problem solved; OR wifey shrunk and joins the family in servicing Sophie and again family problem solved}
Sophia may be the sex addict; but Olivia is by far the sexiest with her sexual frustration being taken out on Clayton and hopefully soon Wiley. Don't know your plans for them; but Clayton permantly tangled in Oilvia's pubes, perhaps spread eagle facing in, head stuck up her clit hood and legs spread on each side of opening to allow access for Wiley. What ever you decide I'm sure it will be as great as the rest of your story.
Am curious, any tiny going up one of the lady's butts for an extended stay? Of course Olivia would be my first choice; but there's always Grace and Hannah. Only curious, please, just go with what you're doing.
Keep up the terrific work!
Thank you hopefully I can continue to keep it interesting. Thanks for the input I'll keep it in mind as the story progresses. Muwahaha
I hope Olivia reneges on her agreement with Elliot, perhaps restoring his size only large enough to cast his injured foot {assuming any cast would remain full size like their clothing does} about 18" to 24" tall like a small pet dog {even forced to crawl on all fours to keep pressure off of his foot} then possibly back down again after it heals or even kept pet sized and led about on a leash by Olivia. The women are much sexier as all powerful and self-centered in their desires.
I like that Clayton is simply kept in Olivia's panty; kinda like he's not so much a human anymore or a sexual plaything as he's been reduced to Olivia's living panty liner. After all she was never really attracted to Clayton, why not just keep him as a panty prisoner just because she can and enjoys that power aspect. Olivia always has Wiley to shrink to become her sex slave. If she does reduce Wiley, will she keep both tinies in her panty or will Clayton be relegated to some other body part, like Olivia's butt crack and just left there {would he beg her for this so he can stay with her so he can start to worship Olivia, even tucked deep in her butt crack rather than not be in her presence} or perhaps given to one of the other women?
Theo and Hurricane Hannah sound like they are about to go for an interesting and very sweaty jog together. Is Hannah showing her butt to Theo as a taste of things to come? Does Theo actually have a new owner? A new home?
Don't know Georgia Hawthorne's future; but will she or Theo's mom - Ted's wife be the first woman to shrink? Either? Both?
Wouldn't it be interesting if either Sophia, Hannah or Grace get confronted by their landlord William James about a rent payment he actually just misplaced, becomes belligerent with her and ends up shrunk and kept in a small hanging bird cage in their apartment living room or her bedroom and forced to sign over the deed to the Victorian mansion and all his properties to her? {Kindly note that is being submitted to Guinness for the record of longest run-on sentence} Grace would be my first choice, Sophia a very strong second.
Hopefully Theo has a new and very permanent home in the golden-brown eye of the hurricane!!! Who knows, there could be a strange side effect of the shrinking process that makes breathing in Hannah's {or any woman's; but definitely Hannah and Olivia's} derierre air life stustaining for tinies.
Maybe he'll even come to find he likes the sense of stability and security up in there so much he'll ask Hannah if he can stay. His dad could pay him an occasional visit and tell him what a beautiful choice of home he's made.
At the very least Theo should stay for Hannah's jog.
Knew he'd loose the bet! Nice work as usual.
Lol the hurricane is force of nature and Theo is completely at her mercy. This story is another that moved in a direction I hadn't anticipated eg Wiley and one which I'll be bringing to a close in the next few chapters.
When heavy metal loving, pot smoking seventeen year old high school junior Morris Jablonski cuts class to sneak out and blaze up, he unwittingly witnesses the school’s three hottest girls shrink down another student. Trying to sneak away quietly, he coughs, inadvertently drawing their attention…
I think this is a chapter meant for your story "Botched" {ha ha, kinda ironic, sorry, had to kid ya about it}
CRAP!!! I don't know that happened, i'm going to have to be more conscientious when I'm loading updates, or stagger the stories to make sure there is no overlap. *shakes his fist in frustration at the screen*
Thanks for pointing it out, :)
I thought the girls were more into using their tinies as toys, not simply eating them all. Are they just trying to scare Mo?
Does this mean Sly is going to be returned to normal size? Was kinda hoping once shrunk, always shrunk; but hey it is as you write it.
Tom being swallowed, if it's going to happen then hopefully it will be Miss Mackenzie whose stomach turns him to mush (guess Len really did digest in Susannah's tummy)
By re-assimilate is Mo finally going to get aquainted with Miss Mackenzie's lightning bolt pupes? Will Mo realize being a tiny belonging to the Furies and Miss Mackenzie is what he wants more than getting stoned or restored?
Are we ever to find out what happened to therest of the "missing people / tinies"?
Perhaps Mo will "re-assimilate" as Miss Mackenzie's panty liner or thong.
Normally I truly like your work; but this time I have to complaim. Reading this is like being brought to the edge and then told "You have to wait till next week". I think in your previous life you castrated unics. Salma Hayek in panies and bra is less of a tease than you are. HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA Keep up the terrific story!!!
I hope Silke cums on Mo a few times, maybe even getting completely stuck to her panty to the point of needing to be washed off.
Now if Silke is one of the Graces, is she in on her brother Sly's "disappearance? Hmmm, if Sly were to have accidentally witnessed Tom getting shrunk, there's always the chance he begged one of the other Graces to shrink and own him, so Silke may have taken pity and reluctantly agreed. Hey, just making things up here as I ramble on; but which Grace would Sly have chosen and what would he beg her to do with him. After all, Susannah did swallow Len {Is he still alive, or at least alive as a human or alive as Susannah's poop, perhaps constipation, HA HAAA}
Perhaps Mo, Tom and Sly could have a happy "little" reunion and Tom and Sly can tell Mo how much they either hate or love their new place in life and their new owners. If Tom isn't loving being in Kimber's bra, well he needs to start smoking higher quality stuff; and who if anyone is in Kimber's other bra cup? Sly?
This is one of those stories I wish I'd come upon once it was finished. Waiting for the next chapter is like a Chinese water torture. UUGH!
Nice writing style by the way. Keep em coming.
Lol waiting is the worst. I still haven't seen your story cross the wire here. We shall soon learn the breadth of the females involved and the fates of Tom and Sly. Soonish
Nice, very nice! I'm wondering if Mo will see any of the girl's other tinies, presuming that all those missing people must be divvied up amongst them and whomever they are saving Mo for. Perhaps a set of feet or two dangling from beneath each breast of one of the girls, while another set sticking out from one's butt crack or sown inside one of their panty liners. {Would they be there by force, or voluntarily after having begged? No need to take any of them out; but Mo could visit them stuck in each one's place (permanent place?????).}
Since it’s Elisha's room, she may want to get comfortable by slipping on a pair of tiny human flip-flops {Just a tiny spread eagle, face up, wrists tied out to their sides with the string going over the top of her foot with another string in the middle running down the top of her foot to a pouch around the back of their head wedged between her big and second toe; just like a real flip-flop but with a tiny instead of a sole under her foot/feet}
Again since it is Elisha's room, perhaps she has a tiny as a pet or one being tortured for her fun {Did Len ever come out, and intact or as Susannah's poop (living poop?) or is he still in her bowels, possible to stay in her for good}.
The story is going great. I've been meaning to post, been busy. Later!
Good to hear from you again, glad you're still following this story. Haven't fully decided where this one is going yet, a couple of different options are currently tugging me in opposite directions. We shall see.
Funny you should mention that about paranoia. With one of my current stories {Jack In Her Ass} I have two ways to take it. One way, everyone will comment I'm a, well let's just say a jerk. The other way, more conventional for this site I guess.
Perhaps I could write both and let readers decide the ending they prefer. Be interesting to twist the two, let me think on this one.
Oh, glad you took my attention to your story as the compliment it's intended.
As far as Silke being one of the Graces like I mentioned, that would be awkward to have her brother a victim; that is of course if he were actually a victim and simply didn't find out about the Graces powers and beg to belong to one of them. In which case it's an act of mercy. All this even assuming Silke could be one of them or Mo's not paranoid.
I really like how you kept so many alleyways open and the suspence building.
If I can keep people guessing then it helps build suspense and sustain interest. I think in many ways a forum like this allows people to engage one another and help refine storytelling skills. Still waiting on yours btw :)
"Mo a captive in Kimber's top,..." - "Mo"????? Hmmm, "Tom..."!!! ; )
Please don't consider that me being critical; rather consider that I acknowledge I'm following your story with rapt attention.
Seems all of a sudden Silke may be a closet Grace, making excusses about Sly and touching Mo. Coincidence? Which reminds me, I'm working on a story. Actually a few; but not sure if I should post any if I finish one.
So they're might be having a pow-wow about what to do with Mo, or perhaps who gets to keep him. Once agin, interesting possibilities.
Nope, not being overly critical at all, in fact i appreciate it because otherwise the story doesn't seem cohesive, thanks for noticing it and bringing it to my attention! When you finish your story, throw it out there, you have got to share, you've got some great ideas and i would love to check it out!
who knows about Silke, or any of them for that matter? Maybe Mo has just become overly paranoid and jumping at shadows...
Both Tom and Sly gone, NICE! These girls remind me of seals and dolphines playing with their live prey.
When he dreamed of a brunette, I was curious if it was Elisha. Not that we know if it was yet; but a quick reference to last night {e.g. "Did you like exploring my body?" or pointing to her crotch and whispering "Lightning Bolt"} or will Mo notice her fragrance is the same as his room was last night?
So have Tom and Sly been shrunk or transformed? Will the Graces play more mind games, perhaps catching his attention when no one else is looking, pulling out a shrunken person and playing with them or sitting where he can see them in the lunch room as they swallow more.
Will Mo get stoned and drift off in a haze onlt to see and feel where/what Tom and Sly are?
Great as always.
Exactly like seals, savoring the play almost as much as the take down, heightening the experience. More revealed next chapter, starts twisting and opening other scenarios. We'll see how the Graces take their torment to the next level
@ TomSpeedy I tried copy and paste each time, it won't let me do it. Thank you for mentioning it though. On a side note, I just noticed you have a story posted. I'll have to check it out.
UUUUUUGH!!!!! Why does this keep happening? I wrote out a long review {great story by the way} and go to submit it, only to be told I can't perform this function. SON OF A B_TCH!!! This has happened several times now at this site.
Glad the story is still holding you. There is another reviewer who has expressed issue with difficulty providing lengthy reviews. I am an infrequent reviewer and have as of yet encountered the issue. Next update will include some ideas gleaned from your reviews to help further meddle with Mo's mind. Hopefully the difficulty you've encountered does not dissuade you from providing your great feedback and input.
Tension building!!! I like how you are laying so much ground work, so that when anything happens it's been well foreshadowed.
It took me awhile; but I think I figured out the odor on Tom's hand. In the interest of not being a spoiler, I'll keep my guess to myself. Let's just say Optimus comes to mind.
Nine missing students, a principle and teacher missing, sounds like a lot of playthings. Two teachers mysteriously "retiring"; or were they "happily volunteering" { I sure would; but for whom and in what way??? }. Will Morris ever get a full accounting of all thirteen?
Not sure who may or may not experience Silke's butt close up and personal; or in what way {e.g. shrunken, transformed (ha hum) } or for that matter if she'd go about completely unaware, living her life and never knowing of any constant companion.
Your stories have so much to build on and directions to go. Once again, great work.
Thanks you for your generous praise and support I really appreciate your commentary it helps me consider perspective as I try to keep the story fresh.
The build up is getting pretty intense, like an avalanche about to go over a cliff. I notice all the "Midas touches" Morris is getting from the girls and one of his teachers. Kimber touching him on the cheek. Ms. Mackenzie putting her hand on his shoulder. Susannah grabing his arm. Has he been stung by them all and not know it yet?
Is Ms. Mackenzie one of the shrinkers? Does she keep a "teacher's pet(s)" on {in???} her person? That sure would explain any missing people reports over the years.
I have to admit, this story line has SO MANY possibilities that it's humbling to read such great work.
What a cliff hanger; but nice story and character development. One has to wonder, where did the Graces acquire such power and why did Mrs. Pembry not ask Morris WHY he was late {does she know something just happened, sorta teacher - disciple psychic connection}?
Hmmm, psychic connection, imagine someone(s) lighting up only to channel Len in Susannah's stomach throughout the slow digestion process, feeling the experience from Len's mind, even hearing Susannah giggle and talk going about her day. Imagining waking in your own bed the next moring having "dreamt" that the entire time. {Not being sure how you got to your own bed making you doubt it really happened}
Does Len even get digested? Digested or not, does Len die in the process? Does Len's body, or at least his consciousness even come out, or remain in Susannah's bowels.
It would be a heck of a high if everytime Morris and Tom light up they are channeled to experience Len's existance; or if they exist the perspective of another of the Graces' shrunken - even transformed people.
You're story is full of possibilities. Great job in coming up with such a wonderful scenario.
Thanks for the wealth of input. I think chapter 4 may include some dream sequencing as per some of your suggestions I haven't figured out all the details yet. :)
I love how head cheerleader Susannah just tips her head back and swallows Len then pats her stomach. Having Morris see Susannah's throat actually passing Len along is great. Makes one wonder if after school games Susannah ever swallows cheerleading squads or entire sports teams {perhaps both} from rival schools to have gulped Len down so easily. Will Morris get to hear Susannah digest Len throughout the school day {possibly as her belly button jewel / ring}
Are Elisha and Kimber also into swallowing their playthings, or do they prefer using them for other purposes considering their large breasts and shapely butts? Do the girls have different interests at all? Even though Susannah swallowed her tiny snack, do any of the girls prefer slaves, worshippers, bra or panty prisoners, living toe rings, trained pets?
If any of the school nerds were to find out these girls can shrink people, would they have the courage to ask, even beg to be shrunk for use by the girls? For that matter, would Morris? It makes one wonder.
Please keep up the great work. Whatever direction you take this story, I'm sure from what you have already it will be terrific. Thanks for writing this!!!
Thanks for following this story too Dark Writter. Again you bring some very interesting possibilities to the story and you've given me some ideas to play with. We'll see the proclivities of each of the girls before this story reaches it's end.
Oh look, twelve sneak-thieves going after the same girl. And they might have gotten away with it, if they weren't stupid enough to try an unlabeled bottle right in front of the locker they stole from.
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The tags will be added as I go along, and you guys can recommend certain fates as I go (I've only planned seven of the twelve punishments thus far).
Why yes, I am borrowing this concept from a story that never got off the ground.
Fantastic story. I really like how Diane submits to Val. It would be great if Val becomes Diane's Goddess.
Since I like human-dog play, Diane barking like Val's Chihuahua earlier was a nice touch. Since Diane told Kayla to do this before and Kayla lost then reneged on her bet; will Kayla now follow Diane around worshipping the ground she walks on and being her "bitch" just like a puppy? Perhaps kissing each spot Diane has stepped on.
Evy's death was a bit saddening. Not so much for her demise as her death leaves Diane with one less tiny. Too bad they're not indestructible.
Keep up the terrific work.
On a side note, reading that you're a woman writing shrinking stories {"disappointed in her lack of new reviews"} was surprising and quite exciting. Knowing that real women exist who would like to shrink people, even if possibly only other women going by this story, is sweet news to hear. Thanks for being you!!!
I hope hope hope that you enjoy the story as it unfolds, but NO SPOILERS.
Perhaps . . . I might have been given an idea.
Remember: Diana is the only character who knows the exact effects of the shrink perfume, because she bought the stuff. So there's that.
Well, yeah. I surprise a lot of people. Especially because I'm like Diana- tall and kinda butch-looking, but this complete and utter pushover. I swear if I was straight I'd own this community like nobody's business, but no . . .
Thanks for reading, and for the review!