Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: April 12 2017
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Oh for the luvva--- stop. Stop. Just STOP. No seriously stop comparing your character to Superman, or using DC analogies when they do not work in any sense. Superman has a set list of abilities and a weakness that actually affects him (most of the time.) His strength and speed may vary but he's not omnipotent. Not unless you wanna count Superman Prime One Million who can warp reality and the Multiverse without any effort. Your character is just another demi-goddess, probably about to become full-on goddess. A more appriopriate analogy would be trying to make sense of Franklin Richards, Mad Jim Jaspers or Dreadpool.
And for a story that is not mean to have consistency, you seem to be very CONSISTENT with Vicki's behaviour and her use of powers. I think you mean to say that you don't have a laid plot like your last story. You're just having fun here, which is fine. But you sure went into great detail with the background of the character. What was the point if there's no consistency? And I gotta say, I see no difference between the beginning of Side-Effects and this one. Both involve the Giantesses figuring out what they can do with their size and just messing around, and then someone tries to stop them and they get punished for their troubles. If you're gonna include a chapter like Chapter 28, you're bound to get someone confused. I mean there was literally no need for it. You could have just said she fell asleep and woke up to find that a communicator was inside her ear. No point in change of perspective, unless you intend to have a sideplot about exploring her inside.
What else am I supposed to think?
And BTW, you forgot again!
Author's Response: Honestly, I think you are putting too much thought into this... having Vicki displaying a consistent character does not go against not striving for plot cohesion. I would say that even if I'm making the plot progress as I go, having the main character at least not turning from gentle to evil to gentle again ever other chapter would be something to aim for.
As for comic book references... look, it's far from my intention to start a discussion about it. So, Superman is consistent because someone decided that being born in Krypton and being under a yellow Sun would turn someone all-powerful except for when random shards of crystal from your exploded home planet are close to him and Vicki is not because she has no weakness? Well, maybe she has no weakness or maybe I have not exposed it yet... (or maybe I need to make it up).
Honestly, flying does not seem to be consistent with the laws of physics, no matter where the guy was born. Being bigger is easier to explain (it "just" requires extraordinary amounts of energy and mass, even if I did not include that in the story). Also, it would be more logical for someone of Vicki's size to have enough stored energy to shoot laser beams through her eyes than for someone of Superman's size and weight... Anyway, just thoughts.
Going back to the original discussion: chapter 28 was probably pointless for you. It was fun for me (and for some other people, I must say), so if anything, that's the reason is there.
Cheers!
P.S. Honestly, fact checking Giantessworld stories and getting upset about them is bound to create unnecessary stress...