I just like to write short stories about GTS stuff. I might expand on previous concepts if they gain enough attention, or I'm just interested in adding more to it.
When shrinking is finally possible, you volunteer to be your sisters toy for the holiday
SO glad this is back! The new chapter is excellent. Hope you keep it going!
Thank you! Hope so too! :)
I agree with Adam, this is probably your best chapter in this short story mini-series. Perhaps it's because everything was less forced and formulaic. Some chapters to feel similar, but this one felt like it had character and not just names for the sake of having names. That's not to say I don't enjoy the others, but this one stands out.
Thanks, AC.
I agree that other chapters felt formulaic in some spots, but still good. I'm really happy with how this one turned out!
I always did look forward to the little snippets of the White Smite universe. Gave something easy to read and none of the fluff. Looking forward to you moving on to your other works though, sometimes I do miss the substance which made each story more interesting - probably why I like chapter 14 more than the others.
Twenty chapters is the perfect size for the short miniseries, maybe a Dudes Abide miniseries could be worked into this format in the future? I do like the White Smite concept which I found to be criticised unfairly in regards to it being racist (it's a fantasy and not at all a representation of your personal views). The only real minor woe is the formulaic outline of each story, but I don't find it to be fair to deduct any points for that as it is a collection of short stories.
Overall, I did really like these.'ll try to review more often as I know they're really the only indication of feedback and one of the few spouirces of motivations for any author. You're a personal favourite of mine on this site, so I look forward to see what you do next after this conclusion.
Thanks a lot, AC
It's always these comments that I appreciate the most; I couldn't care less if I got 1 or 5 stars, but when people take the time to leave meaningful comments, it makes writing worth it.
I completely agree with everything you said. It was nice to be able to write the fetish content without having to build up characters; but, occasions like Chapter 14 are also nice, building up the world and adding some depth. Either way, it worked out nicely, imo. I may have added some more to a few chapters here and there (and I can always go edit), but as of right now I feel it came out nicely. 20 chapters was a wonderful finishing point, at about 3 mini-stories a chapter that's ~60 stories, so not bad. They are a bit formulaic, but that happens when i'm trying to output a large quantity; I tend to fallback on stuff that works for me, personally.
I think a Dudes Abide miniseries could work great. It's along the same premise as White Smite; an entire world to be discovered.
Of course people are going to criticise stories, this is the internet after-all. Whether it be racism, sexism, not enough of this, or too much of that; the only answer I have is "You don't have to read it". People need to realise this is fetish writing and what turns some on will completely disgust others. Also, I have no qualms about people rewriting premises i've come up with, but nobody seems to want to take the time to write what they want to, only complain to those that do. I digress.
Again, I greatly appreciate the review and it's really motivating and an awesome feeling when somebody points you out as an author they enjoy. I hope to keep writing more, quailty, stories in the future that continue to entertain.
This interlude is such a tease. But it was well-executed. I like how it adds to the world, as it always seemed awkward when integrated into the main story as it sort of feels like it detracts from the narrative. I've always liked the balance however, my complaints are just very nit picky. I hope you'll continue writing soon!
Thanks, AC!
No worries, thanks for the comments. I completely agree that this chapter was quite teasing, haha. I really wanted to focus on some world building and it seems like it accomplished that. Hoping to get back to the main plot in this story at some point!
Josh and his four friends have to face a dangerous adventure when a device, they wanted to use to play a prank on his older sister, suddenly malfunctions. Join Josh and his friends through their struggle to return to normal size and find out about the bakcground and the capabilities of the Equalizer.
Loving the story so far, digging the diversity in the more 'intimate' parts, gives it flavour.
Also, really appreciate the daily updates and short waiting times :)
Keep on writing!
Glad you enjoy the story :)
Yeah I like to update it on a daily basis although it establishes the need of longer breaks in between new stories, as I have to write a good deal before starting to publish the chapters^^
I will :)
