Reviewer: Haloichigo Signed 
Date: January 17 2015
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Sleeping Sister
I don't usually read stories with shrunken people of this size, nor do i normally read stories from the pov of a single character (I am more into micro, crowd based stories), but I make exceptions, especially to a new writer who is contributing to the community. Now for my review, I thought it was well written. Scenes were well described and just the simple actions the character did to his sister were sexy. I only wish the sister was given a physical description and I would like to know why the MC is so comfortable with enjoying the body of his sister, not a long winded explanation that takes a paragraph or more, but something as simple as that he lust for his sister and wishes to have an incestous relationship with her. This is a good chapter and I hope to see more in the future.
Author's Response: I like stories of all kind, aside from the pointlessly violent ones. I hope to write more stories, many of which fall under different categories. I appreciate your taking the time to comment, my hope for this story was to give it a sense of realism while still allowing for a lot of interesting things to happen. I didn't want my first chapter to be too heavy, but I do think I should elaborate on the relationships of the family members. I don't think I'd straight up say he wants an incestous relationship, I feel like it's far more interesting if he slowly gives in to the temptation himself instead of directly seeking something else, like coming to realize his sister is also a woman before she is his sister. That being said, I was afraid to give a description as it might turn some people off who have specific taste, but I guess that's a dumb thing to worry about.
