Wham! I'm not surprised that monsters are former humans - we were beginning to see that with Flonne. But it was a surprise to find out that Pyrrha was someone Samantha knew well. Now it's starting to look like we'll see Pyrrha talk and act like a human, and if Pyrrha recovers her memories, they'll have to come to terms with their old friendship.

As for Jacob, my concern now is that he'll get overconfident and falter in the future, or even get killed. Having said that, he fought like a magnificient badass today.

Poor Olivia. There's a few ways this story could end, so let's see how it turns out.

[Caution: Porn and violence up ahead] This website being what it is, these always strike as redundant.

As for the chapter, it seems like they could call 911 now and give enough information for the situation to be resolved now. That would end this situation pretty quickly though, so I suspect that you're going to stretch it out a bit.

Looks like Sarah's found a buddy in Tyler. Let's see what kind of a relationship they have once things get going.

Hope you enjoy! I know the pick up to kink is a little slow thus far, but once its starts I'm hoping you'll all enjoy. ^^ I prefer good literature, so take all the time you need to develop the plot and characters. I used to go straight to the smut, but now I prefer sex scenes that come naturally out of a solid story.

Being as she was a tad shy at times. "Being as" doesn't add anything to the sentence, so there's not much point. I just got some books on writing, and they're making me think about these things.

So is this the day after the last chapter, or has more time passed?

I like how you haven't told us what the drug is. One would assume that it's a shrinking drug, but what if it's something different? Soon, though, we're going to find out.

If I hadn't read Trouble in the Disco, I'd think that Brenda is a very nice person. She seemed very friendly to Sarah.

This doesn't feel like a complete story. It feels like Act One, at most. You've set up a lot of intriguing plots without resolving anything, or even exploring their possibilities. You mentioned becoming a Resonance, and have barely even begun her quest to achieve that. This has all sorts of story potential - getting there and what Julia does once she's there could be several stories. At the end, you mentioned that Sharon has a scheme that could spawn an entire story on its own. I recommend that you make this the introduction to a series - I find your universe intriguing, and this part is well written. I'd like to see more.

I found the chapters too long. For me, the sweet spot is about 7000 words.

That chapter built up the tension nicely. This is going to have to be really bad to deliver now.

How old is Abraham? You mentioned that he's aged a bit, but how old he actually is would say alot about how stressful this is.

Ordinarily, one would want a detailed description, but in this case, glossing over the events conveyed great unease with it. This chapter would not have worked at all if Karine just casually described a "seminar" in detail.

You've also left some good opportunities to follow up. Obviously, a second interview with Daniel and/or Karine is possible. There's also the possibility of Howard going in disguise as an employee, and recording some truly damning evidence. How easy would a wire be to spot on a three inch wearer?

Another question is, how much of this is going on with the people we've seen previously? We already know that they were not saying things they weren't supposed to reveal.