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Well that's an interesting development. Let's see if Jennifer backslides, or if they become friends and start a threesome, or if one of them backs out of the relationship.
Get out of my head! But yea, thanks for reading and commenting :)
Kim is definitely a nasty one. On the one hand, Kim shrinking right at that moment seems like a very lucky coincidence. On the other hand, it resulted in fine poetic justice. It looks like we're going to see some reconciliation in the next chapter.
You’re pretty much in my head, aren’t ya? Yup, the next chapter is pretty much going to wrap everything up. Oh, and the whole Kim thing in ch.12 does seem like a well-planned coincidence, but I did have her demise laid out before I set out to write this story. Thanks for the continued comments, I really appreciate them!
[Caution: Porn and violence up ahead] This website being what it is, these always strike as redundant.
As for the chapter, it seems like they could call 911 now and give enough information for the situation to be resolved now. That would end this situation pretty quickly though, so I suspect that you're going to stretch it out a bit.
Call the cops? If it were only that easy.
That's a good premise you've got going here. Develop it to its fullest.
I'll do my best! I already have the story's synopsis written down. Just got to write the story now. Thanks for the comment! :)
Poor Olivia. There's a few ways this story could end, so let's see how it turns out.
There are a lot of ways it could end. But I think Olivia will tough it out.
What happens when a low earning university student seeking a quick and uplifting buck signs their name on the dotted line for admittance as a test subject into an undefined and mysterious four month Cosmolex research program?
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Universe: Alpha. [Involved] (See profile for details.)
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We already know that Cosmolex is a scary organization, and Trapped suggests that she's in for a world of trouble. Your reply, however, makes it sound like she could become a powerful member of the organization. Keep writing so that we can find out.
I certainly shall! In fact, I'm already up to chapter 6. But I want to release it one chapter at a time so that I can have greater time to write and edit future chapters. Though, I'm considering releasing chapter 2 tonight.
At any rate, I'm glad to hear that the story is perking your interests! I wouldn't want to reveal what direction it might take, but I'm hoping I don't disappoint!
Thanks as always for the review! Your reviews are always entertaining to read and reply to.
Welcome back. Ominous things are happening at Cosmolex, and I get a strong impression that those two are up to no good.
If I hadn't read Trouble in the Disco, I'd think that Brenda is a very nice person. She seemed very friendly to Sarah.
Hehe, I'd say that its always wise to be wary in my stories. ;)
Thanks for le review!
So is this the day after the last chapter, or has more time passed?
Its actually meant to be directly after they return to their rooms. (As they'd been asked to do so in the last chapter.)
HOWEVER! I accidentally screwed up by adding in the wrong in-story date and heights for the characters. I had been thinking about the next chapter after the one I posted today because it was already finished. So I'm going to have to edit that. XD My apologies.
Looks like Sarah's found a buddy in Tyler. Let's see what kind of a relationship they have once things get going.
Hope you enjoy! I know the pick up to kink is a little slow thus far, but once its starts I'm hoping you'll all enjoy. ^^ I prefer good literature, so take all the time you need to develop the plot and characters. I used to go straight to the smut, but now I prefer sex scenes that come naturally out of a solid story.
Being as she was a tad shy at times. "Being as" doesn't add anything to the sentence, so there's not much point. I just got some books on writing, and they're making me think about these things.
I'm glad to hear that, my friend! I've been concerned people might be uninterested by the plot or development and just simply want the smut. So its nice to see that someone out there appreciates the development in the story as well.
HMM! Very fair, I'll try to keep that in mind. Thanks for the tip! Books on writing, eh? That sounds pretty interesting. I can't say I've ever even taking a class on writing. Though I was thinking of doing some college studies on it soon.
As always, thanks for a most excellent review!
Some thoughts then:
They're shrinking six inches per night, then. Either it's a slow acting drug, or their food is getting spiked. At this rate, they'll be less than a foot in eight to nine days.
If Cosmolex has done this before successfully, then what are they testing now? That's probably something that'll be revealed in later chapters.
Could you add the heights and date to previous chapters? It's actually quite helpful.
*Snicker* >:3 Which isn't going to be very fun for either of them, I imagine.
Oh yes, indeed! All shall be revealed in time, I am sure. Though the only thing you're off on is that they've actually shrunk 10 inches per night, which does raise a few questions. (Certainly for them at least.)
Absolutely! In fact, done and done!
I like how you haven't told us what the drug is. One would assume that it's a shrinking drug, but what if it's something different? Soon, though, we're going to find out.
All in due time, my friend! All in due time! :D
Thanks for an awesome review! Hoping to get up another chapter of TitD today as well.
What happens when three guys go to a strip club, where all the girls are of different, sexy sizes? Smut, or humilation?
It's a fun story, and it'll be good to see what the other two are up to.
That sounds like a fun thing to do, and Tyler's experience with the manager sounds like it'll be fun, too (for the reader).
WHAT HAPPENS TO LURKERS.
This website is so much more fun when you talk to people, as long as there aren't too many. If we had 30 000 people reviewing, I'd never keep up.
A witch still quite new to her powers is forced to shrink one of her closest friends. Now he finds himself trapped in a world he didn't now existed with a witch's familiar that first calls for his death and getting a crash course in the rules of his new life. At the same time Julia struggles to with having taken so much from a good friend and her responsibilities as a witch.
I wrote this story for a friend that likes absorption and giantess. So there is some trait absorption mixed in.
This doesn't feel like a complete story. It feels like Act One, at most. You've set up a lot of intriguing plots without resolving anything, or even exploring their possibilities. You mentioned becoming a Resonance, and have barely even begun her quest to achieve that. This has all sorts of story potential - getting there and what Julia does once she's there could be several stories. At the end, you mentioned that Sharon has a scheme that could spawn an entire story on its own. I recommend that you make this the introduction to a series - I find your universe intriguing, and this part is well written. I'd like to see more.
I found the chapters too long. For me, the sweet spot is about 7000 words.
I like to end things on a high hope point typically. The future looks bright but not everything is resolved. It is possible that I'll pick this story up in the future but not for the time being. Right now it's part of my short stories collection. I like to focus on one giantess story and one super fem story at a time occationally deviating to a side story. We'll see what happens once I finish my two main focuses but that won't be for a while. Though my current main focuses were short stories at one time.
I know the length chases away some readers but when it comes to the length I write as long as it takes for me to reach a comfortable leaving off point. I find that setting some artificial stopping point degrades the quality of the story as I struggle to fit things in or leave out details. Plus when i wrote this I was feeling really inspired. After seeing a manga with some wonderful sexual mouth play I just had to come up with a way for a gentle lady and guy to have some naughty fun.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
An honest employee of the Techilogic Corporation sets out to investigate the new widespread use of the shrink ray, only to uncover darker revelations about the business he’ll soon wish had stayed buried.
Ordinarily, one would want a detailed description, but in this case, glossing over the events conveyed great unease with it. This chapter would not have worked at all if Karine just casually described a "seminar" in detail.
You've also left some good opportunities to follow up. Obviously, a second interview with Daniel and/or Karine is possible. There's also the possibility of Howard going in disguise as an employee, and recording some truly damning evidence. How easy would a wire be to spot on a three inch wearer?
Another question is, how much of this is going on with the people we've seen previously? We already know that they were not saying things they weren't supposed to reveal.
Thanks; I figured subtlety made more sense than going in-depth with description here. That's not a bad idea about going undercover. It's not something that'll be happening in this one, but it definitely makes sense for him to try with a boss who doesn't recognize him already. And that's really up to interpretation what's going on behind the scenes, though I would guess not many people are being quite as sinister as Tania.
This is the best chapter so far. It's longer, and I always like longer. It also gives us a wide-ranging look into the wider problem. I expected bad things, but this introduces some things I wasn't expecting. In addition, I was hoping Shelby would return, and this is actually more than I had hoped for. You go Shelby. That's some good research you did there, and good thinking telling Howard about it. Now, some questions going forward: just how much of this report will Howard be able to release, and how much will he be able to do?
Thanks very much. Releasing it is going to be tough for Howard after these later chapters, but he's going to do whatever he can.
@Jacksmith: Yeah, he'd have to have his face altered to get in with Tania. Now let's see where he goes next. My guess is that in the next memo he's going to be fired, and then he'll be fighting this on his own, and then...
Well, you weren't that far off!
Damn, someone's in trouble. This adds more evidence supporting what we've been predicting, but Listen, before you go brushing this all off like you always do, I know full well I’m in the minority here. There are enough people around in the Human Relations department and the rest of the company that like what you do is an intriguing conflict that could expand the story greatly.
Thanks for reading. That conflict you mentioned there will mostly be kept in the background of this story, but I intend on making its presence felt more and more.