Penname: Ancient Relic [Contact] Real name:
Member Since: November 27 2013
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Summary:

Eight people have been selected to take part in a secretive reality/game show for a million dollars. It is not until they get there that they learn that they will be shrunk down bit by bit as they take part in various competitions! When a person reaches 1/16 of their normal size, they are eliminated. But is there more to this show and it's host, Betty, than it seems?

UPDATE: The complete story has now been finally uploaded, so dive in!


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play
Characters: None
Growth: Mini GTS (16-30ft)
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Munchkin (2.9 ft. to 1 ft.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m, FF/f, FF/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 71440 Read Count: 112900
[Report This] Published: January 06 2013 Updated: January 13 2014
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: January 10 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Day 9, Part 2

This was a good, fun chapter. I like the length, and enjoy these long chapters much more than shorter chapters. It gives me time to really get into it, to convey a lot of plot and character's thoughts, and gives me much more enjoyment each time the story is updated.

At first, I figured Sandra was a shoo-in for winner. She was taking the challenge much more seriously than the other two. Whether she actually leaves or starts a threesome with Betty and Annie, I'm happy. If you do, make sure we get a scene between her and Bill, where they both react to his escape attempt. After Sherri hunted the mouse, though, it became a toss-up between Sandra and Sherri, and if she won, that could be pretty good too.

Also write about how the other men feel about their situation. We got Bill's feelings about his new situation this chapter, but Tom's thoughts haven't been mentioned in a few chapters, and - most important - Dave hasn't had a thought since he first met Annie. What does he think of their new relationship? Let's get a good description of that in the next chapter.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked the chapter! I do agree I was a little bit skimpy on describing how everyone felt. It's one of the ways Season One is very inferior to Season Two.

The Glade by Nom de Plume Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 23]
Summary:

A young woman named Susanna revisits a place of childhood memories. As she strolls among the rocks and trees that she remembers very well, she notices something very...different. It draws her away from familiarity and into the unknown. What she finds there, in a secret hidden place, will plunge her into the realm of wonder.


Categories: Adventure, Body Exploration, Gentle, Mouth Play, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: None
Series: The Cairnbridge Saga
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 27445 Read Count: 50507
[Report This] Published: April 30 2013 Updated: May 17 2013
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 22 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You might have the most beautiful writing style on this website. I've only read the first paragraph and I love this story. Also, TinyDann sent me here.

Summary:

Michael Parker and his wife Amy have recently purchased their first home that they can truly call their own. They're about to throw a housewarming party and their friends will be attending. What will happen when Michael decides to entertain their guests by showing off to them the latest invention he's been toiling away on for the past few months?


Categories: Crush, Adventure, Feet, Humiliation, Instant Size Change, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 59434 Read Count: 208817
[Report This] Published: May 21 2013 Updated: June 17 2014
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: January 22 2014 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

On the one hand, this seems too abrupt a change. Murdering people for fun is a big step up from holding people but not hurting them, and the last time she killed people she had some doubts about it. On the other hand, the scene was written very well. I don't normally like crushing, but I kinda liked reading your description.

Also, I like long chapters. Short chapters are over before I can really get into it.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! I hope you'll continue to enjoy the story!

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 15 2013 Title: Big Problems Pending

You've been writing a great story. Keep doing what you're doing.

"though not in the way he and his teammates were expecting." Now I really want to see what happens next.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!

The Initiation by Deelann Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 40]
Summary:

Fountain City High School is an all girl boarding school.  Many students become a part of a sorority to fit in socially.  When Ann turned down the chance to become a member of the most prestigious sorority, The Heralds of Affluence, something goes very wrong...or very right.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), BBW, Butt, Crush, Entrapment, Feet, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Lesbians, Odor, Slave, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.)
Size Roles: FF/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 52826 Read Count: 109582
[Report This] Published: June 01 2013 Updated: June 03 2015
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: April 03 2014 Title: Chapter 12: The Favor

Things really started to look up when Zoe arrived. It seems like a big payoff is coming. Then we see Rosa. It was established early on that Ann really isn't like the others, so in juding Ann Rosa made a big mistake. This could be the beginning of a great sideplot, if you revisit it.



Author's Response:

You're right Ancient Relic!  I'm way ahead of ya.  :)

 

Dee

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: April 03 2015 Title: Chapter 14: Returning the Favor

Welcome back! Ann was a bit of a badass at the end, threatening a witch, and it'll be good to see how she wins.

I'd also like to see an alternate ending chapter that shows what would've happened if Nina's plan succeeded, showing her growing at the party, and how she would've won after that.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  An alternate ending is a good idea.  I told Mistress Anez about your idea and she told me that she was thinking the same thing.

 

Dee

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstar
Date: January 09 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Bad Impressions

"Sorry for the let down but as a writer sometimes it’s better to leave scenarios to the reader’s imagination." I too don't like it when things are glossed over, but you make a good point about leaving it to the imagination. I think the best way to do that would be to briefly describe what happened instead of simply saying that something happened, without details. Give the imagination seeds to grow. As for length, don't worry. This chapter, and almost all stories here, can get a fair bit longer without causing any problems.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: April 24 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Coming To A Head

That's a nice teaser and set-up. I expect brilliant scheming next time, on both Ann's part and Nina's part.



Author's Response:

Ugh!  Thanks for the pressure Ancient Relic.  lol

 

Dee

Summary:

Home of all my chapter long stories. Each story is given a series of ratings, warnings, and tags in the chapter notes in the beginning of each story so that you know what your getting into. If a story is requested enough times it may get a sequal or its own fully fleged story.

 

 


Categories: Adventure, Crush, Feet
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 10526 Read Count: 23419
[Report This] Published: June 26 2013 Updated: May 27 2014
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: May 28 2014 Title: Chapter 2: The World’s Worst Giantess Story Ever

Writers, if you find yourself doing anything in this chapter, change it.



Author's Response:

Except for referencing Honda Civics. We can never have enough Civic content on this website. :D

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 28 2014 Title: Chapter 4: Story four: The Worst Giantess Story Ever 2: The Unnecessary Sequel Nobody Asked For

This is so bad it's great. I was laughing through most of it.



Author's Response:

You should have seen me while I was writing this. I know its sad to laugh at your own jokes, but I made an exception this time.

I'm glad you found it just as amusing.

Summary:

Thousands of years ago a powerful and highly advanced civilization attempts to retrieve one of its most prized possessions from the surface of a planet inhabited by a race of giants.


Categories: Giantess, Teenager (13-19), Adventure, Young Adult 20-29
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 28165 Read Count: 33475
[Report This] Published: July 26 2013 Updated: July 22 2014
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: April 24 2014 Title: Chapter 10: Bonus Chapter: Nephilim Dictionary

I like the line about positive and negative words. There's a concept in linguistics called phonaesthemes. It's an idea that a sound or pair of sounds can be related to meaning. For example, glisten glimmer gleam glare and glow are all related to light, and all start with gl.

I'd recommend adding suffixes for inanimate objects, and making gender markers optional.

You should have a word or prefix/suffix that means "not". You could also have one that emphases that something is the case.

The subject of a sentence is the thing doing the action, and the object is the thing the action is being done to. In "I saw the car", I is the subject, saw is the verb, and the car is the object.

When coming up with syntax, the first question I would ask is: what's the word order? There are nine word orders, each combination of Subject Verb Object. In English, the subject comes first, then the verb, then the object. We call that SVO. Other languages have subject-object-verb, or SOV.

Another question is how flexible do you want the word order to be? English is very rigid with word order. This is because the subject and object are indicated by their position in the sentence. If you changed "I saw the car" to "The car saw me", you would change the meaning of the sentence.

Other languages, however, are very flexible. In Latin, you can put the words in any order you want, and they'll still mean the same thing. This is because Latin (and a lot of other langauges do this) indicates the subject and object by the way the noun end. Femina is a woman who is the subject of the sentence, and feminam is a woman who is the object of the sentence. Their meaning doesn't change if you rearrange the sentence, but it will change if you change the word's ending.

These are called cases. The nominative case is the subject. The accusative case is the direct object, and there's a dative case for indirect objects. In "I gave the book to you", I is the subject, the book is the direct object, and you is the indirect object. Indirect objects often appear in sentences about giving (datum is Latin for giving). This is a massively simplified account of Latin grammar, by the way.

How many cases can a language have? Finnish has 16. Most of those cases are about location. Think of it as merging a preposition with the word it modifies (this is a process that can make new cases). When making a language, you can think about how many or few words it'll use. You can use separate prepositions and have a lot of words (English is like this), or you can use a pile of prefixes and suffixes (or infixes - the one and only English infix is fan-fucking-tastic).

There are numbers you can use beyond singular and plural. Some languages have a dual number, for pairs or for two things. In Sanskrit, deva means god, devau means a pair of gods, and devaa is many gods. Other languages have a paucal number, for a few, and a trial number, for three.

With verbs, you can have a built in subject. Many Indo-European languages do this with verb endings. In Polish, mam is I have, masz is you (singular) have, ma is he/she/it has, mamy is we have, macie is you (plural) have, maja is they have.

You should think about verb tenses, aspects and moods. You have tense. Aspect is whether something is completed or not. A simple aspect distinction would be completed vs ongoing. Moods include the indicative (a statement of fact), the subjunctive (hypothetical statements - English equivalents include "Let us do this" or "Were is possible..."), or the optative (for wishes).

I need to stop sometime, before I write a new linguistics textbook.



Author's Response:

Well now, this is quite a lot of information. I thank you for taking the time to write this.

First off, thanks for informing me about phonaesthemes; I didn't realize that was what it was called. Now that I know I'll probably be applying that idea more in the language. Since it is a primative language it will most likely apply only to universal constants and things that appear quite often and are related.

I'd like a bit more information on adding the suffix for inanimate objects. Do you mean a word that can be combinded with another to indicate an inanimate object? or something like the connector suffixes which for now only include past, future, and present tense? Also on the subject of gender markers; they are optional, and exist primarily for words associated with people.

A "not" word is a good idea. I could make it mean just "not" when alone and "opposite" when used in a compound word. This would reduce the total number of required words by simply allowing me to indicate when something is the opposite.

The final word order I had in mind is basically everything first then the subject. At least for now.  Its hard to explain what my idea is, so I'll just post a couple of sentence examples with translation in the dictionary chapter. For now here's a basic compound word to give you the general idea. "Skiŕ’Kala" translates literally to "Foreign person". the word describing the person is in front, and the subject is in the back. If a gender marker needed to be added it would be behind "Kala" thus modifing it. Finally, "Voeŕ Skiŕ’Kala" translates to "kill foreign person" (kind of a brutal example I know). So, i guess the word order, or one of the word orders is... "Verb,object,subject". I need to think about this word order thing for a while. Thank you for bringing this to my attention.

After writing this example I might just remove "Sha'Kala" entirely. It seems to create more conflict than it solves. I also already have a term for "me", which I could just expand to cover all they ways to refer to one's self. What do you think about this?

Lastly, the dual number idea is a good one. the giants are just like humans in that they have two eyes, two genders, legs, arms, etc etc. A concept to indicate duality might make a good addition to the language. Though I'm not sure about the triple number. Perhaps I could use that one, although the idea of a word to indicate duality seems like it'd be much easier to integrate.

 

 

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: April 21 2014 Title: Chapter 8: Into the Arid Wastes

As a huge linguistics nerd, I'm curious to see what kind of grammar and vocabulary you've come up with. As for the chapter, interesting development. It'll be nice to see where this leads.



Author's Response:

Glad I have someone who appreciates languages around. I am struggling to come up with a concrete grammar system, and could use assistance.

 

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: April 26 2014 Title: Chapter 10: Bonus Chapter: Nephilim Dictionary

@zumi: It's good that you mentioned phonology (a language's rules of sounds). Here's some more linguistics:

There's a variety of speech sounds in all human languages. They're classified based on where and how they're formed. Bilabial sounds are produced with two lips (m b p). Labiodental sounds are produced with the lower lip and upper teeth (f v), and so on through the mouth and into the throat. Read about the International Phonetic Alphabet to see the whole system.

Phonemes are the sounds that a language recognizes. Phonemes often include multiple sounds. This means that the languages considers a group of sounds to be all one sound, and the different sounds are allophones of each other. For example, there are different ways of pronouncing t. In water, t is a sound called an alveolar tap, which is where the tongue stops the air at the ridge behind your teeth, faster than any other sound. In stop, however, the tongue spends more time stopping the air at that ridge, resulting in an alveolar stop.

Then there's stress. Different languages have different rules about which syllable is stressed. It could be the last syllable, the first syllable, the second syllable, or the second-last syllable. There are different ways of stressing syllables, too. They can be louder and longer (English does this), or a different pitch.



Author's Response:

Your two reviews combined have at least a semesters worth of ligustics information in it. Have you considered teaching the subject?

And since the giants are virtually identical to humans I suppose the international Phonetic Alphebet will work here. The Nephilim language does tend to use a lot of rolling "r" sounds and I'm not even sure its physically possible to pronounce some of the words with them in there. I'll have to investigate this further. Maybe add pronounciations for each word.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: April 05 2014 Title: Chapter 7: Escape From the Burning Sky Palace

Welcome back. It's good to see this story move forward. I like your idea of mini adventures. They can deepen the plot and characters, and develop a rich mythology.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the warm return and the rate.

And your spot on with the mini adventures. I intend to develop a rich detailed universe.

Nephilia and Michael's story is just part of what is to come.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 07 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

I have something of an interest in mythology, and I'd like to know what mythologies and other sources you're drawing on here. I see what looks like Greek and Sumerian mythology, ancient astronauts stuff, Biblical stuff and 19th/20th century versions of the Atlantis story.



Author's Response:

You have quite an eye for these things Ancient Relic! then again, with a name like that I would expect nothing less.

As for all the sources, here is a list of all I can give you without spoiling future parts of the story.

  • First off, Nephila's name... well, that one is a bit obvious.
  • Michael's name comes from the archangel who shares the same name, and the Atlantian Military is based on both the Christian and Jewish Angelic Hirarchies.
  • The war mentioned in the beginning of the story is derived from christian apocrypha Specifically the book of Enoch. And the un-named leader of the rebellion that Michael killed was based off of Lucifer.
  • The idea od Atlantis being an advanced spacefaring civilization I got from a book, which I cannot for the life of me remember the name of. (sry)
  • lastly Seraphim Yesod's name comes from the Jewish Sephirot.

You were spot on in your analyisis on my story, and I hope you keep on reading so that I can repy to you again when I have more written.

 

Summary:

The beginning of the After Shrink High series. A "What-if" scenario where Chijunda lost to the Director on top of the tower. Despite his best efforts, he runs out of time and all living things are shrunk to 1/100th their size.

The story focuses on one of the newly rebuilt, in a sense, cities, Atlanta, GA, and one of its many Ranger squads. Ranger Squad 5 will find itself thrown right into the middle of the war between the Society and the Resistance. Only to uncover a mystery that may bring to light truths they never meant to find...

Much like Shrink High itself, the story and characters are the bigger focus rather than sex. There will be sex scenes, however. Also, not played/gotten the cliffnotes for Shrink High will not make the story unreadable. I made sure to limit things that you would have to have played Shrink High to get as simple shout-outs/gags. The story assumes you have not played the game and brings you up to speed/explains everything.

 


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Adult 30-39, Mature (40-49), Crush, Feet, Gentle, Insertion, New World Order, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.), Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: After Shrink High
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 142018 Read Count: 155903
[Report This] Published: August 04 2013 Updated: January 30 2014
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 22 2014 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: All Have Our Choices to Make

Hot damn, this is intense beautiful tragedy. You've set the bar very high for Act 2.



Author's Response:

 A bar I intend to blast apart.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 18 2014 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: Traitors

I'd like to second gadgetmawombo's thoughts. Hot damn that hit hard. You've got a fine story here; keep it coming!

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 21 2013 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: Fairies and Choices

Keep it coming, the plot is developing nicely. How did your exams go?

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: January 30 2014 Title: Chapter 28: Feedback Chapter thing

1) I think that they're good for worldbuilding, and that you should keep them.

2) I think that the music you provided the last time around suited the action well. Keep doing it, as long as the music is appropriate.

3 and 4) I have no experience with Shrink High, and never heard of it until I found this story, so it doesn't matter to me at all.

Summary:

Follow Nathan Pierce. A young, 19 year old high school dropout who finds himself in quite the predicament as he awakes within a strange new gigantic land. Merely two inches tall, and suffering from Amnesia, the poor soul is soon to find himself back exactly where this all began as he searches for answers, and a way out of this new hell.

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Universe: Alpha. [Involved] (See profile for details.)
Title #: 01. (Of series.) 

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This story has nothing to do with disco's. 


Categories: Giantess, Teenager (13-19), Adventure, Young Adult 20-29, Crush, Feet, Entrapment, Gentle, Giant, Humiliation
Characters: None
Growth: Brobdnignagian (51 ft. to 100 ft.)
Shrink: Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 25102 Read Count: 58492
[Report This] Published: August 08 2013 Updated: April 21 2014
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 08 2013 Title: Chapter 11: Attempting -

I hope you get a chance to write again soon. You've set up what looks like an intriguing conspiracy, and I want to learn more about these people.



Author's Response:

Heyo! Thanks so much, I'm glad you're a fan!
And also terribly sorry that its been so long since I've been able to continue the story. Unfortunately a whole bunch of things came up that rendered me incapable of adequate time to write. But, I'm really hoping to pick this up again soon since I had a lot of fun writing it. ^^

In fact I'd say its pretty likely you'll start seeing updates again!

Thanks again for your review!

 

- Xandar.