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Summary:

An honest employee of the Techilogic Corporation sets out to investigate the new widespread use of the shrink ray, only to uncover darker revelations about the business he’ll soon wish had stayed buried.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Adult 30-39, Mature (40-49), Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Instant Size Change, New World Order, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: Oversight
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 45082 Read Count: 79590
[Report This] Published: May 27 2014 Updated: July 10 2014
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Date: June 11 2014 Title: Chapter 6: Report 4: The Williams Family, Interview 1: Lillian Williams

@Xkcd: I was thinking something similar at first, but the issue is increasingly acknowledged as the story goes on.

As for this chapter, she comes across at first as a believer in tough love, but within reason. At the end, though, it becomes clear that we're in for something pretty dark (especially with the cowering bit), and I bet that when he does get his one on one interview, Lillian is going to look pretty nasty.

Also, what effect has this had on Ruby's personality and behaviour toward shrunken people? It seems like she's been affected like Lillian.



Author's Response: It's an issue that he realized has to be addressed after the oddness of the first interview, though getting the one-on-one chats is still tough if the warden believes something is fishy. The end of the chapter is indeed meant to give a different kind of implication to Lillian. And we'll see just how much Ruby's been impacted by all this next chapter.

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Date: July 10 2014 Title: Chapter 18: Report 8: Closing Thoughts and Relevant Notes

This is not the ending I predicted, but it's still good. It makes for a fine sequel hook, with Howard still able to work. This story in general has been good for worldbuilding, by providing hints of things that can be blown up into their own stories, and there are many opportunities to explore moral and social issues.



Author's Response:

I've appreciated your commentary on this one, man. Glad you think it was effective at worldbuilding.

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Date: July 01 2014 Title: Chapter 15: Special Memo to Mr. Howard Taylor, Research Analyst in Human Relations Dpt. - Second Notice

"I am no longer in a minority discussing this". That's an intriguing hint of something larger. Is it the supporters in the last memo? Other Techilogic executives? Shrink Act caretakers putting pressure on them? It's pretty clear that there's a large conspiracy working against him. This also makes it clear that his efforts at privacy are working, because no mention was made of Shelby, Daniel and Karine.



Author's Response:

My lips are sealed, though you're reading those hints fairly accurately.

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Date: June 23 2014 Title: Chapter 12: Report 6: Cambralart Financials, Interview 1: Tania Beakman

Damn, someone's getting bold. I bet a sharper reprimand is coming down the pipe. Would he have gotten more information by taking an approach with more praise, or by pressing her? And I can't wait to get the details of what goes on at home.

It's been a few weeks, so did he ever follow up on Shelby's tips?



Author's Response:

One is indeed coming down the pipe.  He gathered he wasn't going to get much from her, though he's not done snooping around this particular location for answers.

He's still following up on what he can with Shelby's tips; they actually provided the impetus for him to come here in the first place.

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Date: June 01 2014 Title: Chapter 2: Report 2: The Edwards Family, Interview 1: Kitty Edwards

You're doing well with the style so far. This could get very interesting. You're going to have lots of opportunities to explore the moral and social issues of this technology.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading! I'm looking forward to showing the other ways I'm exploring the challenges and consequences of the tech.

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Date: June 13 2014 Title: Chapter 7: Report 4: The Williams Family, Interview 2: Ruby Williams and Trish Reed

Things that were hinted at earlier are now in full view. This is, I think, more realistic than most stories. In real life you'd have some uncaring people like Lillian, but you'd also have people who care about the wellbeing of tiny people, like Ruby.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading! This case, as well as the upcoming one, are meant to acknowledge that not every giantess is a raging psycho.

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Date: June 13 2014 Title: Chapter 7: Report 4: The Williams Family, Interview 2: Ruby Williams and Trish Reed

only to uncover darker revelations about the business he’ll soon wish had stayed buried.

@Carycomic: I'm thnking the exact same thing. We may find out that the higher-ups know exactly what's going on, and think it's just peachy.



Author's Response:

*muffles a devious snicker*

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Date: June 18 2014 Title: Chapter 9: Report 5: The Lindon Family, Interview 1: Professor Abby Lindon

At this point, I'm instinctively assuming that a kind, reasonable interview subject is hiding something. However, Claire being Claire, and the introduction being what it is, this is an instance where it really will be as good as it sounds.

I think it's possible that there will be a few more nice people, but I expect some really nasty people by the end, and the author of Julia can write about a real piece of work.

@Ackbar: Stop being so mean to poor Jacksmith. Think of his feelings.



Author's Response:

There will definitely be a couple more nice people, though I've also got the nastiest case waiting in the wings for later. Thanks for reviewing.

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Date: July 04 2014 Title: Chapter 16: Report 7: “Stand Tall” Protest Rally, Interview 1: Jennifer Sheller

Two chapters left? I expect great things after all this build-up.

This is the opposite of the Tania interview, in that they're both hiding something, but Jenny is hiding something she feels bad about...unless there's a facade behind the facade.

The smartest thing to do would be to give copies of everything he's found to Shelby and Jenny, in case he finds himself unable to publish...



Author's Response: I'll do my best. I think it's safe to say Jenny is hiding her part in it out of shame rather than plotting.

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Date: June 26 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Report 6: Cambralart Financials, Interview 2: Abraham Fogler

That chapter built up the tension nicely. This is going to have to be really bad to deliver now.

How old is Abraham? You mentioned that he's aged a bit, but how old he actually is would say alot about how stressful this is.



Author's Response: I'd put Abraham in his early/mid forties, the aging comment was to suggest he looks older than he actually is.

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Date: June 26 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Report 6: Cambralart Financials, Interview 2: Abraham Fogler

We've now seen a number of people request to speak off the record, so what we're reading is clearly not what will be submitted. Is it what Howard hopes to publish somewhere, or is he writing for the drawer?

@Carycomic: I'll be amused if Stargate is referenced, or if Wessex Daniel Jackson is mentioned (look him up).



Author's Response: Howard hopes someday to publish this as a means to help hurt the Shrink Act, but since he doesn't yet have enough research to do that, for now he's just building up material.

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Date: June 02 2014 Title: Chapter 3: Report 2: The Edwards Family, Interview 2: Gemma Edwards and Dale Edwards

At first I thought, "Shouldn't he interview Dale alone" but then you acknowledged that issue quite well.



Author's Response:

Good catch! Definitely an intentional thing. Thanks for reviewing.

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Date: June 09 2014 Title: Chapter 5: Report 3: South Hanenrow University, Interview 2: Dominic Graham and Shelby Bill

It's following the pattern I thought it would: it starts relatively innocent but slowly gets darker. Here I saw a stronger indication that the giantess is hiding something, with Shelby blurting out something she wasn't supposed to say. It's also good that you left open the possibility of Shelby calling Howard later.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing! We're probably going to see Shelby appear in some context later on in the story.

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Date: May 28 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Report 1: Preliminary Findings

The beginning was a bit dry, but it got really intriguing in the last third, when you hinted at the possibilities for stories. The bit about Carly was great, and of course you can't spoil Julia, but maybe later in the story...



Author's Response: Thanks for the review! There was a specific reason Julia wasn't mentioned here (I won't say if that's good or bad), though I will mention that this chapter contains a clue about how Jack and the others might be able to beat her. ;)

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Date: June 20 2014 Title: Chapter 10: Report 5: The Lindon Family, Interview 2: Claire Lindon and Corey Lindon

I like the way this was handled. There were situations where we could have seen the stern "say nice things" looks in previous chapters, but instead we have two people who seem to have a great relationship. Even then, the end of the chapter made it more interesting by hinting that, even though they get along well, there's still something going on.

What's his sampling method? Are the subjects chosen completely at random, or are they specifically chosen based on some criteria?



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing! His sampling pool is semi-randomized, though he is still aiming for ones with particularly hairy accounts to share.

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Date: July 07 2014 Title: Chapter 17: Report 7: “Stand Tall” Protest Rally, Interview 2: Faith

So Julia has been mentioned, after all. This means that we're going to go up against someone who's already established as a scary person, when Techilogic is already most unhappy with Howard. It'll be interesting to see how you talk about her without spoiling Julia.

Confirmation of Faith's identity would be quite satisfying.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing! Further mention of Julia is going to be pretty understated in the final chapter, though Howard is going to keep on looking. And Faith's identity will receive confirmation in future chapters of Julia.

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Date: June 09 2014 Title: Chapter 5: Report 3: South Hanenrow University, Interview 2: Dominic Graham and Shelby Bill

@Moonpie: He said this to me, in response to my review of the introduction:

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! There was a specific reason Julia wasn't mentioned here (I won't say if that's good or bad), though I will mention that this chapter contains a clue about how Jack and the others might be able to beat her. ;)



Author's Response:

Teehee...

Summary:

After the success of Season One, the mysterious studio that runs the Shrinking Show commissions a new season with eight new contestants! One again, eight contestants arrive at the set of this secretive reality show, only learning upon arrival that they will be shrunk down bit by bit, taking part in various competitions along the way. When a contestant shrinks to 1/16th of their normal size they are eliminated--usually. Things are a bit more complicated this time around.

Season Two is longer, raunchier, and all-around better than Season One. As it is a new cast of contestants, it is its own story and you do not need to read Season One to understand what is going on, but it wouldn't hurt.


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Body Exploration, Entrapment, Gentle, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Lesbians, Mouth Play, Slave, Slow Size Change
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.), Munchkin (2.9 ft. to 1 ft.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m, FF/f, FF/m, M/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 47 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 250434 Read Count: 270194
[Report This] Published: July 06 2014 Updated: April 25 2015
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Date: July 25 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

With Marie, you've hinted at other lines of business Betty could expand into, and then there's Andy, Hailey and Carla.

First to be eliminated? I'd say Dale. He's made himself less popular than Paul. And winner? I'm going to call Marie.

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Date: July 25 2014 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Wham! Tom comes back, and something happens that I did not expect.

@TomSpeedy: It's just that site. For other stories I like, check out my favourites, and use the Wayback Machine to find Carrie's Science Project.



Author's Response:

Yes indeed, Tom is back for a visit.

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Date: September 03 2014 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

This is the most interesting competition yet. There are good surprises, and all the stuff in the maze is intriguing and amusing. There have been all sort of wacky adventures.

I'm a bit surprised that Dale won. I figured Betty would have her sights on him, and women tend to do better in general. This is some nice variety.

Hailey, Andy and Carla have three ribbons. Jerry and Vera have two ribbons. Hailey, Andy and Vera will probably get through, leaving Carla and Jerry.

In the game: Marie, Dale, Hailey, Vera, Andy.

With Betty and Sherri: Paul, Jerry, Carla, Let's see if I'm right.



Author's Response:

I tried to not always go for what people would expect to happen in this story--I'm pretty sure no one saw Dale coming out first!

You'll see if your predictions are correct very soon!