I really like the Jack and Ron pairing. I know they both hate each other but the fact that they are forced to work together is hilarious. I could see a whole story of them just trying to survive in a big world and arguing every step of the way.

Not really common but intresting none the less. Good descriptions and such as well.

Well this s interesting. Vanessa has wised up real quick which is completely understandable in this situation...yet you've managed to show it's more an immediate reaction than a permanent change good job. It's actually a very real reaction towards self preservation. I'm starting to wonder how much Kelsy cares for her sister. Was the death threat legitimate or really just a threat. The way you've written her I know she's perfectly willing to hurt Vanessa a lot if necessary but I think killing her would hurt Kelsy more than she might even realize. For the moment I think she's just sort of lost in her power trip.....um these are all just thoughts and opinions by the way just keep up the good work.

This story is pretty great so far. I've read other stories like this but unfortunatly they never seem to get finished. PLEASE DON"T FOLLOW THAT TREND! I have high hopes....Also would you be interested if other authors wrote stories in your universe? Maybe.

Hrrrmmm? Lots of good news but that could easily be followed with tons of bad news sooo..?

I like the Jenna and Naomi pairing. I'm doubtful that they'll ever become best friends but Jenna's harsh nature seems to ground Naomi who seems excitable. 

I hope Naomi can handle  the chaperone job beta children cuteness is the leading cause of diabetes.

As well as Naomi is doing I can't help but worry for Stephanie who has way deeper issues that can't be solved with stern words and reading. Her sessions might not even prove very effective if they result in another mental breakdown.

Is Marion dead? I hope not I have to believe she has a tiny grain of humanity in her like less than a fleas worth but it's there. Of course she is a serial killer so I doubt she has a very bright future.

Story aside you really are raising the bar as far as writing.Every time I read a new chapter it inspires me to try that much harder on my stories. Thank you.

Chapter wise you pretty much nailed it this was the most engrossing chapter for me by far and it's because Stephanie's such a well crafted character. You really feel the weight behind her comments and emotions and you almost hate Claire for forcing them out. It's a bittersweet situation where you want Stephanie to own her pain and accept it yet at the same time let her repress it to spare her from it.

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First of all awesome name man. I've been meaning to say thar for a while it's really fun to say out loud.

Second I'm not saying it's unrealistc I've read the story and know beta's have no rights but I feel it's still pretty harsh and very hard to read. It seems some alphas just lack empathy for lesser creatures and I have to wonder why? But I guess if you could get away with killing humans and not going to jail why wouldn't you? 

Just read all three chapters and I must say this is a great story. It's even given me some ideas for my own. Keep up the good work. I would be interested to see Brittany shrink and have to deal with the transistion from alpha female to little sister. Will Erica still respect her? Will she feel pride in her sister stepping up or jealousy that it wasn't her? Probably both. Were they close before the shrink? If not maybe the whole experience will bring them together. Or maybe she'll snap and lose it. Can Erica deal with that? From the first chapter everything seems a little totalitarian and I don't think Brittany like that. Will she speak up. Can they speak up? SO MANY QUESTIONS!!

So someone's already written a book. Why am I not surprised. People will cash in on anything. "Dr. Terrance Smith." Probably has his own talk show on cbs and makes quotes like "Loud is not allowed." 

Everyone's coping differently. Cole seems the most leveled of the childrens I think he'll recover quickly. Hell he's got the attention of a young, curvy, latin girl. Sooo..silver lining?

Keep fighting Brittany! Make life earn the right to shrink you and when it does happen maybe start a clothing line? There's a whole new customer base no one's catering to. Small Comforts are a bunch of hacks. Jump in now and you'll be raking it in hand over fist! 5 years fron now you'll be touring Paris debuting clothes you designed yourself AND model in!

Anyway good chapter.

I hope you people enjoyed that chapter about the Sanders Siblings because It's no longer in my archive to re upload. Curse my obsessive need to have everthing follow a chronological order. I'll have to now completely rewrite the chapter and because I do not have a photographic memory it is bound to be different in pacing and feel. I'll try to have it done soon. Until then I guess the chapter you read resides in some pocket dimesion or something. I can only hope this chapter holds you over.........COUNTLESS UNPLEASANT EXSPLETIVES!!!