Reviewer: sithlordnergal Signed 
Date: October 12 2014
Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation
Oh wow, this chapter really hurt, but in a good way. You did an amazing job conveying the emotions going on here. And the way you ended it was perferct. I honestly feel bad for Lexi and Bridget. Now, Bridget is not innocent here, not in the least. She should have been listening when Lexi repeatedly insisted on being innocent. That's not just because Lexi is her friend, but just something an Enforcer should do anyway. If a prisoner continues to claim innoccence no matter what, something is up. Either that person is nuts, or the investigation missed something. It was her job to find the actual truth, not force her truth on someone else.
Now for the actual events...those just really drive the knife in and twist them. The fact that she dropped Lexi really hits hard after re-reading the chapters and spotting a small three sentence section in chapter 7. For those who don't remember, here's Bridget's quote:
“Don’t be scared,” the Omega wheedled. “I’ve never ever let anybody fall.”
So, that already sets up the fact that Bridget took pride in the fact that she never drops people when she was younger, and I can't imagine that has changed any time soon. So, lets do a small tally here:
1: Bridget accidentally dropped, and broke the leg of her prisoner. Due to her being a top enforcer and is constantly described as a kind anf gentle person, I get the feeling that something like this would hurt Bridget normally, no matter who it happened to.
2: She gets to find out her prisoner was innocent all along, and her punishments were given to someone who did not deserve them. Again, due to Bridget being described as someone who adheres to justice and some sort of fairness, this would hurt her deeply. Or it should if she honestly holds things like justice as close to her heart as we've been led to believe.
3: Finally, all of this happened to her best friend, someone she sees as a sister, and she caused it.
If that doesn't break Bridget, then nothing will. And I don't get me started on poor Lexi. The Aegis corperation has a LOT to answer for. And honestly, I'm not sure how you'll be able to wrap this all up in two chapters. I mean, we have Lexi and what she's gone through (unless she dies from her injuries and is no longer part of the story), Bridget coming to terms with what she's done and her emotional response to it all, and what happens to the Beta that caused all this. Even id you don't do an epilogue that's a good three chapters there, unless, as I said, Lexi isn't featured in the end chapters.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading/reviewing! Glad you liked the end. Good work noticing that line as well; it's definitely meant to foreshadow the fall. Lexi and Bridget both have some healing to do, for sure. I know there's a lot to cover for the conclusion in 2 chapters, but everything that needs to be wrapped up will be.
