Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed
Date: May 19 2013
Title: None
I really like this story, yeah I hear the criticisms from the other reviewers on here, but I really have no real qualms with this other than the fact that Allison and Erica almost never listen to Ron until its too late, I would think they'd have learned their lesson by now. But here's the thing, Allison DID believe Ron about Jessica, but the way she believed him seemed kind of forced, after all this was the person that had doubted him sooooo many times before and she's just like "yeah I believe you"...I think it should have taken a bit more convincing from Ron to get her to believe him, its a bit inconsistent. Now that I read my review, it seems kind of contradictory, but I hope you can find some use from my criticism. Anyway, dude this is a great story and it has amazing chapters and "meh" chapters but for the most part its an excellent story!
Author's Response: thats great to here you are very much satisfied with the way these ever changing characters are being handeled, gadget. but its also great to hear your criticisms!
i've always had this problem hahaha. ill be writing it and ill be like fuck.... how is this going to be able to continue, when allison and erica are obviously gonna find out?
as a result, ive left them skeptical. ive used the "family" thing as a result, but its true, it cannot be excused away by love for a niece. shes mean, and they should certainly know it.
i too got tired of her not believing him, so i decided to let her believe him this time. i agree in that it was very quick, and very sudden, whereas ron in the past has tried OVER and over to convicne her, whereas now it took no effort. i wish i had gone about this better, and hopefully i will be able to in future chapters, perhaps even regarding this specific instance.
i hope you continue to be satisfied with the story my friend, i write it for you guys. check back tomorrow!!