In an all new story, I shrink myself to spy on cheerleaders in the shower, but what'll happen when I stay shrunk?
Been waiting for this one to come back, its been a fav of mine for a while now...
Bobby was so close! Now he's stuck tiny for more time with a girl with crazy moodswings! I suppose he should be thankful she's nice most of the time.
Natalie is has some powerful mood swings doesnt she? One minute shes a great, caring girl and the next shes forcefully raping a helpless man! Shes hella inconsistent, if I were Bobby I would have bailed! Anyway, im glad your updating this, its my favorite of your stories by far!
A girl keeps a tiny city in her room and uses it to satisfy her own carnal desires. She lets her friend in on her secret and worlds change...
I dont feel bad for her for what Jeff said, she just killed a whole bunch of people to satisfy her urges, he was kinda right about her! Overall liked the story up till the point its in, just saying that Cara doesnt get my pity!
A dysfunctional family learns to deal with each other in an unconventional manner.
Really loving this story so far. The dynamic between the gts and tinies is not something we get here too often...shes not really evil, not gentle, she just thinks shes going crazy. And it really seems like she cares for her siblings, so I wonder how heartbroken shes gonba be if she finds out she killed one of them on a whim? Really great story so far, definitely a fav!
After a nuclear holocaust, civilization had to move into enourmous cities. During this time humanity discovered an alternet source of power called Eyous. However several years after this discovery, people have been disapearing off the streets from both the middle level and the lower level.
The story begins with the lead protaginist named Alice Vermire. Her parents and herself are driving on the highway when a tragedy befalls them. There she caught a glimps of what looked like a monster and another human sized figure covered in a blood colored tattered cloak called Red Raven.
Reviews may contain spoilers. Please be advised.
[AWHILE AGO I CHOSE TO REARRANGE SOME PLOT POINTS BECAUSE I THOUGHT I COULD DO A BETTER JOB THEN THAT SO YOU MAY HAVE TO RETURN TO A PREVIOUS CHAPTER]
I actually was in the process of writing a different story but I wanted to test some of the ideas for it here. Any criticism is greatly appreciated. And I don't want to sound like a jerk but Some more reviews would be nice.
I do like this story, its cool and it kind of reminds me of Attack on Titan for some reason. I think what kind of throws me off though is that you wrote it kind of like a play. Other than that this is good, I like it, and I wish you luck writting it!
Thank you sir. I originally started it with just basic paragraphs but I heard other readers were having difficulties reading large paragraphs. Plus when I started reading my work after I finished it I myself lost place with the characters dialog. Trying it closer to a play instead allowed me to keep the pacing between character conversations. (And also allowed more to be accomplished with less text)
Was scared the story was going to be compared to something far less impressive. But hearing it even reminds someone of Attack on Titan made my day.
So is Spicule a dayon? He has fire powers, but he's not huge, or so far as I can tell. I don't know why, but I'm having trouble keeping up with whats going on. Maybe I need to go back and read from the beginning, since the previous chapters were a while ago.
Well to answer the qustion. Yes Spicule is a Dayon. But he actually has Nuclear Powers. And yes he is small for a Dayon. 17' 6" feet is big for a human but since Alice right now is the same height and she took on several others who were ranging from 30 - 45 feet tall. By comparason he is actually quite compact. I wanted Spicule to be a calculating combatant so having him turn into a massive building sized slower moving creature contradicts his character. I still wanted him to be a Dragon themed Nuclear Dragon. But ultimatly I chose to have a smaller, and more nimble beast that could still fight with master martial arts level of attacks. But still pose a threat to creatures ten times his own size. If you have any suggestions of specific areas I can try to fix then I look forward to your opinion.
An adventurous teen who just happens to be five inches tall has been stuck in homeschool all his life. When he finally enters public high school and a new world of friends, bullies, and cliques, he quickly discovers challenges even bigger than he could've imagined.
Awesomesauce! I love this story and Im glad you updated so soon this time.
Thanks for reading/reviewing!
Uh Oh, I guess Peter's good luck has run out!
As it tends to do from time to time.
Aww, this was a cute chapter for sure! Erica and Peter seem to have a good relationship too but Jessica and Peter's is a lot more playful it seems!
Definitely accurate.
Hoo boy, here we go again, hopefully Jessica will take his side in all this and not play along with her friends ideas if they might harm Peter.
Peter can only hope.
Pretty good chapter. I wonder if Stella is gonna get some kind of sick pleasure from making Peter sniff her sock or if it's just a little childish game to her? Can't wait for the next one!
Given how she's acting, it's entirely likely to be either option. Though neither is good for Peter. Thanks for reading!
I kinda figured things would end up like this. Peter's mom is gonna go momma bear on this kid if she finds out what she's been doing to her son!
Yeahhh it's not gonna be good.
Woah, any more and he would have been stepped on! Who knows if that would have killed him but it certainly could have broken something! Is Suzanne gonna find out? Im eager to see her go momma bear on Stella but I realize that would probably be bad for her. Honestly this is worse than anything thats happenef to him at school so far, even Sharon is starting to look like a saint in comparison!
Jessica's definitely making enough noise at this point that Suzanne's going to find out. And yeah, Stella makes a few of Peter's school mates look nicer.
Aww, Peter really does have an amazingly loving family! Its rare to find a family of a tiny on this site that doesnt take advantage of the tinies size and truly loves them even a fraction of what Peters family does!
Given the kinds of families I depict in my other stories, it seemed appropriate to give one tiny character a break.
Oh oh! Suzanne about to go mother bear on those brats!
Or at least Kimmy.
Wooo! New chapter! I'm eagerly awaiting the next one!
Glad to hear
Amazing chapter and SO satisfying. I can't imagine how poor Peter is gonna cope with this. I know this is a story and shit HAS to happen for it to be interesting but if we count all the things that have happened to him so far in such a short amount of time I don't know how he's still sane.
It's weird but Sharon popped into my head awhile after reading this chapter, the other so called villian of this story. Compared to Mandy, Sharon is a freaking saint!
Glad to hear this section's conclusion was satisfying. You're right that Peter's been through much. In a lot of ways I view his journey as akin to young protagonists from fantasy epics who have intense trials to face on the way to their endgoal; even though this is a relatively-normal school, his size means the setting/world present a deceptively grander set of challenges, and the consequences that come along with those. But hopefully anyone who wasn't as much a fan of this section with Mandy knows this story overall to have lightness balancing out the darkness eventually.
Really liking Ms.Tritter so far! She seems like a reasonble, intelligent young woman, and beautiful to boot! I can't wait to get more of her!
Sharon on the other hand probably wants Peter like a little girl wants a gerbil; a tiny, portable pet...I get the impression she doesn't see Peter as a tiny human pursuing his dreams.
Great chapter, this and Julia are my favorite of your stories, maybe I like this a bit better since it's more gentle and I'm biased towards that.
Tritter is definitely the closest teacher to a friend that Peter will have in this story. And may be onto something with Sharon. Thanks for reading!
I wonder what's wrong with Lisa? Has a family member of hers died or something? Also, I don't know why but I'm starting to like Sharon a bit. I think she has iffy intentions but I kinda feel like deep down, she's not so bad once you get to really know her... I don't know why I got that impression from her this chapter despite her little games, maybe I'm wrong though.
Author's Response:
Hehe. Anything's possible! Thanks for reviewing.
